Hey, thanks. We (theloniusjones and I) did a lot of lighting and shot tests at the specific locations prior to the the actual shooting days. It made it so much easier on the day of shooting. We had shot lists and lighting diagrams ready to go. It was also helpful because the actors didn't have to stand around and watch us scratch our heads. Anyway, thanks for the comment!Originally Posted by RichardVClark
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06-05-2006 05:28 PM
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06-05-2006 06:45 PM
Wow. Talk about impressive. And it had a real storyline, too.
The great stuff:
- The lighting. The focus. The clarity. Generally, all in all, the cinematography. The visuals pop. Beautiful.
- The use of the 35mm adapter could be included in the above comment, but special kudos for designing your own adapter and using it so well. This short should put you in the adapter business in and of itself.
- The story. Made sense. Beginning, middle and end. And it raises some real ethical questions with no easy answers. So the film looked great and made me think. Holy smokes.
- The acting was great. Your star nailed it. And I loved seeing a believable guy playing the doctor. Nice job at casting.
- Costumes really worked for me. Good tone and very believable.
- Nice touch with the guy delivering a BIG clock. It didn't have to be a big one. It could have been something smaller. But big looked better and was more interesting on screen and was just a really nice touch.
- Nice dolly shot to the guy stirring his coffee. Again, a nice touch that wasn't strictly necessary, but added to the feel and presentation. Well worth the time to set up.
- The killing scene behind the blinds. I'm not sure it reflected the talent and the skill demonstrated in the rest of the piece. Perhaps a little cliche, but bear in mind I'm digging deep for ANY negatives here.
- The music? Really soft when present. But it still fit in beautifully. Maybe I should just move this comment up into the "what I liked" category.
So that's about it. An awesome short that I was really pleased to experience. Fantastic job.
Thank you.God: Every time I try to talk to someone it's "sorry this" and "forgive me that" and "I'm not worthy"... (Monty Python and the Holy Grail, 1975)
06-05-2006 07:02 PM
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Best cinematography so far. this was also the most filmic i've seen yet. great job!
06-05-2006 09:17 PMOriginally Posted by Dahopafilms
06-05-2006 09:49 PM
Snod...i dont know man. This made me well up at the end. This was the only real emotional piece in this contest, well I take that back because there were some funny ones. It was the only every other emotional piece here. Wow. That was something else. I still feel it in my gut and my gut still hurts from jimthejibs funny joint. My friends complimented this also. Very emotional, very cinematic, very well scored, very good job.UrbanMouse.com
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06-05-2006 11:12 PM
that scene where he's outside the van is so pro. I was totally into it. Shot very well.
06-05-2006 11:33 PMOriginally Posted by Aram Bauman
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06-05-2006 11:48 PM
I must say.. very, very well done. I need to get your snod35 now!
well... dahopafilms pretty much hit them all.
I dig the sound FX of him having the 'lapses'. At first I thought the film was going to be another "Run Lola Run" and I was pleasantly pleased when it took a nother direction. I liked hearing the sound re-visit.
Action was dead on. Best i've seen so far.
Cinematography was great. The movements, the feel, the urgency and the feeling you have towards the guy. HOWEVER; I see you guys in the mirror in the doctor's office. I'm sure someone here could AE that out. or... am I wrong? Only flaw that stood out.
Music. Eh.. I have to disagree. I'm not sure i liked the strings. They were nice, but they really didn't make me feel anything like I would have liked to. The guitar piece at the end was fantastic; however.
Only part that I really was confused about was how he got there. I would have like to seen more on the 'napkin' in terms of information on the guy. Perhaps a few things crossed out, or even additional notes portray he found out who this perv was.
At first, I thought that was the main character in the window. I'm sure there's a reason why his shirt was off too. Was this to convey he's... well, I'm sure there's a reason.
The end was good. Maybe a tad too long. I would even fade it out and what would have made it really creepy would be to hear him continue to weep during pitch black. Mess with those ears.
only beef. Dude, Credits?
Other than that. Fantastic work and sensational short.
06-06-2006 12:09 AM
Excellent work. A truly great piece. I really liked the color, the lighting, the composition of the shots, the acting. All were phenomenal.
I really liked pacing of the story and how it was developing but the ending didn't work for me. I only say this because I really respect the work you put into it and think it is great. If I didn'like the film I wouldn't take the time to explain.
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I did see where the ending came from in terms of emotional build up but not through charcter development. I got the impression that he was a relatively normal, good guy, who has a tortued side. I though murder, even the murder of a pedophile seemed to be too extreme for his personality. In the scene where he saves the girl from the pedophile I didn't get the impression he would have done anything to him given the oportunity nor that he even wanted to but was simply satisfied with saving the girl. So the next scene seemed out of place. Perhaps it's just me though. I think the ending could work but there needed to be something in the character to lead us to it. Even a different reaction when he looks over at the car and sees him drive off. Perhaps his run over to the car could be a little more passionate, not so much that it ruins the tense feel of the scene though. I guess the main reason I think the ending seemed off is because in the car scene, he knows what is going to happen and when he sees it actually happen his reaction is very subdued.
I hope you don't take my comments badly. I really liked the film and thought it was an exeplary piece of filmmaking. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
By the way, your baseball bat to the face on your site is brilliant. I didn't know AE could be used so effectively.
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