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    Comments are appreciated.

    I don't know if people need a summary, but I'll throw one out:

    Guy travels to the future, comes back with scary black-haired fellow. Fellow knows everything. Fellow scolds other Guy for being a looser. Other Guy calls him a dick. They hold hands and walk into the sunset. The end.
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    There were cities of floating bananas. Best line of Sci-Fest so far.
    This film was a bit dull - there was too much talking and not enough happening. Even if people are saying interesting things, if nothing interesting is happening, and we don't care about the characters, then...you know the rest.
    I think your sound recording could use some work. A lot of the dialogue sounds hollow. I think the booming wasn't properly done. And nothing takes a person out of a film like bad sound recording.
    It seems like there might be some interesting ideas tucked away in here, but people don't watch films for the ideological content alone - they want to be entertained.
    Good work finishing, and keep on shooting.
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    I agree with Penfever for the most part....the originality of the concept was cool. I liked it overall. A few things here and there, but, every film on here has that...even the ones some seem to be promoting, etc... Your's was creative and original and I certainly felt that wonderfully interesting and entertaining independent film quality shining through.

    Hope to see more in the future.


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    Thanks for the comments.

    I knew going in that I was making a movie about ideas, not action, and that this would make it less accessable. What I really wonder, though, is if people get all the stuff that I meant to imply (ie, that the future guy - Cassius - might have thought it was all another dream). I condensed down about twenty pages of script ideas into the six minutes, and I think some concepts got lost.

    The audio problems - I didn't notice some of them until I watched my copy last night with my fancy headphones. Seems the speakers I was using to edit/mix weren't nearly as clear (they have a bass boost) as I'd have hoped. But yes, I'd agree that there were several audio problems. Some have been fixed in the latest edit (6:47 long), and some I'll be fixing very soon.

    Thanks for letting me know that the audio issues were distracting.

    Comments are appreciated. Thanks again.
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    Quote Originally Posted by ProfD
    Hope to see more in the future.
    What is that supposed to be a pun or something?
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    Who's your DP? What a jackass he is for stamping your film with his ridiculous BSG shooting style?

    I hope you don't use him for your next project, you can do a lot better than him.
    And I may be busy with another one of my silly little projects. But mainly don't use him because he is a hack.

    And by he, I mean me.

    Until the Future,
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    Quote Originally Posted by P!body
    Until the Future,
    P!body
    What is that supposed to be a pun or something?
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    I liked it. I thought it was thoughtful and interesting, but it did suffer seeming like so much going on in 6 minutes. I would like to see a longer cut. Keep up the good work.


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    There are a lot of poetic and linguistically interesting lines of dialogue in this movie, and it toys with a lot of potentially complex ideas. Unfortunately, it's rather hard to follow because more time is spent on those meditations than on demonstrating the story's through-line. It's also very difficult to invest in, because there isn't a character who's likable enough to care for. It's a nice moment, there at the end, but it would be better if we felt an emotional wallop along with the surprise.

    Again, the dialogue certainly has a style, and there was a lot of thought put into it, but a little more clarity/time spent in the simple details of storytelling would even out the experience.


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    thanks jimmy.

    I wish I could have spent more time with the characters. After about two drafts I realized that I could either tell the story, or give the characters backstory and depth. I tried my best to make every word important, but in the end I made a philosophical journey rather than a cinematic one.

    At this point I'm wondering if only three people have seen it... I'm hoping people are going alphabetical... or I must really inspire apathy in the viewer, and that is tragic.
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