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02-16-2006 01:09 PM
Last edited by JimtheJib; 02-17-2006 at 05:28 AM.
02-17-2006 08:15 AM
The 1st to post, as often.
Not crazy about this one - there was just too much voice-over. I really think it's important to tell a story with a mixture of devices. Voice-over's a tempting tool, no doubt, but it creates a certain atmosphere of distance and indifference. This kind of atmosphere has to be carefully planned around and backed up with the shot style, composition and everything else - otherwise, it doesn't hang together as a unit.
For the next fest, I suggest you challenge yourself to get better actors, a more experienced unit, and try to branch out a little bit. I think the core - desire and good ideas - is definitely there. Just don't take the easy way out, especially when casting.
Keep shooting, and good luck.Red 143 - Viva Jannard!
02-17-2006 08:57 AMOriginally Posted by penfever
You're based in the NYC, right? I've had great luck on Craigslist when casting actors. There definitely might not be the same actor to normal person ratio in NYC as there is in LA but there are definitelty a lot of good actors in the city willing to work for food.
In terms of the VO, I didn't mind it. The majority of the shorts in this contest seem to use VO in one or another so I guess I'm used to it. With that said, I think VO can often be an "easy way out" structural device but your writing was sharp so it worked.
Anyway, good job.
02-17-2006 11:03 AM
thanks 4 the comments... i realized even before i submitted it that it had some mistakes... having said that one of my actors didn't show up and i was forced to stand in myself. keep em coming...
Last edited by JimtheJib; 02-17-2006 at 11:09 AM.
02-17-2006 11:13 AMOriginally Posted by JimtheJib
02-17-2006 05:21 PM
Your concept was interesting but you would have been better served to write it around something that would have been more apropos to your actors' ages. It's nice that you aspired to something more, but it just kind of blew the illusion with actors so young portraying older "business" people. With that said, keep shooting and you will find your "groove."
02-17-2006 05:50 PM
what did you think technically?
02-17-2006 06:24 PMOriginally Posted by JimtheJib
02-17-2006 11:01 PM
I thought this was pretty good. I agree with others that most of the actors were too young for their respective parts. Definitely needed more light in places but overall I enjoyed it.
One thing that completely threw me for a loop:
The boy that tells him he needs to make a decision on his future looks EXACTLY like Natalie Portman!