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    Hey guys,

    I'm finishing a movie and we're working on the log line of the film. It's in portuguese, but we're trying to find an equivalent expression in english. Since english is not my native language, I was hoping you could help me find which works best for the purpose. This is supposed to describe a character that feels dettached, away from himself. So here goes:

    "Nothing feels worse than being away from one self" (this is a direct translation from the portuguese)

    "Nothing feels worse than being estranged from one self"

    "Nothing feels worse than being apart from one self"

    Thanks for helping and if you have other suggestions, please feel free to write them.


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    “Estranged” is an interesting image. Possibly also separated. Or distant.

    “Distant” kind of rolls of the tongue a bit easier in the larger sentence.

    You need to make the end possessive, though: “one’s self”
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    I prefer "Nothing feels worse than being alienated from yourself".


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    "Nothing feels worse than losing your self"

    This could also be taken to mean something more prosaic as actually just getting physically lost but then I think "your self" would be one word and maybe the ambiguity speaks to the premise anyway. I personally think the original options are a bit clunky.


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    Those are all great suggestions, thanks guys. To give a bit more context, this is not someone that lost himself recently. It's someone that always felt dettached from himself but never knew why.

    I like the image "apart from yourself" but I was unsure if it could be used in this context.


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    I think your number three works - "Nothing feels worse than being apart from one's self"


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    I don't think people really talk like that, "one's self". It should be "nothing feels worse than being xxxxx from yourself."
    That being said, "Nothing feels worse than being apart from yourself" doesn't sound quite right either.
    The most natural way to say this would probably be "I feel alienated from myself. It feels...terrible."


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    Constructive form:

    “Know thyself” - The Oracle of Delphi


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    "a stranger in his own body" may be closer to the emotional weight of the original expression.


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    I can only chime in with my opinion that generally the fewer words you can get away with and still convey your idea, the stronger it is.


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