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    Any comments on my short documentary ?
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    Hi,
    i would appreciate some comments about the result of my new short documentary about strong women in history (from 1890 to 1980):

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fpd4...ature=youtu.be


    Thanks in advance,
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    First thing that strike me: to slowed paced Is that you narrating this? If yes, any chance you could read faster? I think it would help a lot.

    Also when using a lot of stills find a way to liven them up - too many just static stills for my taste. Maybe do parallax stills from them in AE? (if you have skills of course)

    Besides that, very cool topic, unique and rare Hold on to it!! Any plans to do interviews with those women that are still alive?
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    It was interesting enough for me to watch the whole thing, which is better than what most people post. I agree with alohype's comments. Also, you name two different women as the "first modern female bodybuilder," and say that Jack LaLanne "inspired billions of people." You can't just make up numbers in a documentary, and that particular number can't even be close to accurate. Anyway, good topic and thanks for sharing.


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    Yeah i learned somethings..interesting. Most importnant.

    Your narration does not suck but it could be better ( slightly more energy...sounds like you're sleepy lol) and at the end you seem to be tired and lose concentration.
    I know it;s not easy to do....but i liked id the rest

    Take this concept and continue with it ....i think many people would be interested to see such a doc


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    Thanks everyone for the comments. I really appreciate.
    I will note these for my next documentary that will start from the 1980 to about 2010.

    I dont have the intention to interview some of the strong women. Maybe for another documentary.

    I have a question : How to do parallax stills in Adobe After effects ? And HOW DOES IT LOOKS ?

    Thanks in advance,


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    Quote Originally Posted by deleuze3 View Post
    Hi,
    i would appreciate some comments about the result of my new short documentary about strong women in history (from 1890 to 1980):

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fpd4...ature=youtu.be


    Thanks in advance,
    have a good day,
    This may seem like a small point, but it's really not.

    Your title on YouTube is "Strongwomen in history," but the actual title you have on the video is "Strong Women In History."

    These are little inconsistencies which scream "amateur." It looks cheap and careless, and also, "Strongwomen" and "Strong Women" have entirely different connotations.

    Also, you need to be meticulous and consistent about spelling, capitalization, and proper style in general. These things do matter.

    It IS a worthy and interesting topic, though. I think it could find an audience.
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    Quote Originally Posted by deleuze3 View Post

    I have a question : How to do parallax stills in Adobe After effects ? And HOW DOES IT LOOKS ?

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    How do you do this kind of parallax ? Adobe after effects tutorials?
    Thanks again for all the feedback and commentaries


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