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    This is an interesting religious type tale. I think the horrifying moments went by too fast. And the build up was pretty slow for a short. It was all the way to page 5 and the midpoint that he is introduced to the thought of selling his soul. The dialog and writing in general were fantastic as usual. I see a few points where the characters say 'you' when they meant 'you're'. But that's about it. Good job.
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    Thanks Bill and Chris,

    You both spoke of the pacing. It's something I didn't like about this myself and thought of changing but was short of time.


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