Daddy the Explorer

[jasonthewho]

Daddy the Explorer

by Jason Johnson-Spinos


Logline: When a little girl wonders about her absent father, her mother makes up a tall-tale of the man she lost.

[Chris_Keaton]

Back to the strange land of Texas. Well welcome to the party. It looks like we may have a good turn out this time.

[jasonthewho]

Added the poster.

[Anthony Todaro]

I can dig this. I'm wondering, light hearted or dark... You've got me guessing.

[jasonthewho]

It's a drama, obviously, since that's the required genre... but it has a little comedy interspersed, which I think every drama can benefit from. Maybe not LOL worthy, but some moments of levity.

[Anthony Todaro]

I know it's 'drama'. I was wondering, not even really asking, if it was more on the lighthearted side or dark side of 'drama'. The poster and log gave me the feel it might be a dramedy. Which would be cool. So rare people attempt the funny around here. I know I'm not going there! I'm admittedly a comedy chicken. Wait that didn't come off right... ;p

Good luck to ya!

[jasonthewho]

To be honest, I rarely think about genre when I write. I'm not even sure I know how to write to genre. On second thought, I'm not even sure I know how to write. And yet I try. I guess that's what we all do...

[Anthony Todaro]

Really?... I do. I write specific genres and budgets all the time. Sometimes they do crossover into multiple areas though, which is what you want. Mass appeal is always nice.
Currently have a horror, a thriller and a kids project on my plate. You don't want to mix those. Especially the horror and the kids! ;p

I don't even know how to speak let alone write. With you 100 on that one. I'll let you guys be the judge.

[Chris_Keaton]

****Don't read reviews until you've read the script.

Notes:
- Do we get an age for Rich?
- You don't need the CONTINUEDS anymore.
- Give us a fade out.

This was a nice story. Glad to see you're using your New York experience for some good. If you were able to act out the imaginary dad alongside the read dad it would be a great, but sad, kids story. Good Job.

[Anthony Todaro]

**SPOILERS

1 - Might break up that action block.
1 - How old is Rich?
1- Consistency. You've got no ages, written number ages and numeric ages. Go with one method to help make it easy for us to process your info. I like the numeral method you've got going on.
2 - AJ is a girl. Let us know if she is or isn't visually. Totally cool to trick us.
6 - That's a big action block. Maybe break it up.

Smooth to read. I love the crossover visuals metaphors. Really special story. The end really brought it all together. Could work as an animated short also or live action and anime, etc.