A young female assassin learns that the code of honor and respect can not be forgotten.
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03-26-2011 04:20 PM
Last edited by taylormade; 05-22-2011 at 11:00 AM."If they move, kill'em!"
03-30-2011 01:00 PM
killer poster, nice poser work.Matt Harris
Director / Composer / Colorist / Motion graphics
DVXFEST ENTRIES: GLASSJAW / CABIN / CLARA / THE SOLUTION / LAKE WICWAS / BACKFIRE
BOUNTY ON A DEAD MAN'S HEAD / VACCINE / NO HORIZON / THE BOATSHED / CLEAR SPACE
05-25-2011 04:44 PM
The good: an easy read, a goal for both characters, a nice reveal. good dialogue.
The bad: word choice took me out. I had to look up a couple of words. I think it comes off as snooty. But then again that's just me.
Spoiler: thought it was a little creepy to have a naked girl with the ninja 'you know who' in the same scene. there was a little sexuality there that just isn't right after the reveal.
05-25-2011 10:17 PM
Thanks for reading the script. I'm curious, which words bothered you?"If they move, kill'em!"
05-26-2011 04:07 PM
I'm honestly really surprised. Avarice has been around along time and is used in may religious passages and in literature. Same with suffice. I can't agree with you that using those two words is "snooty."
“Poverty wants some things, Luxury many things, Avarice all things”
"Pride, avarice, and envy are in every home”
"Acting doesn't suffice."
Rod Taylor (the actor)"If they move, kill'em!"
05-26-2011 06:09 PM
Suffuse not suffice.
Fine, you use avarice in dialogue so the character talks like that.
If you need affirmation fine, I like your script IMO it's the best one here.
Last edited by Mobie540; 05-26-2011 at 06:43 PM.
05-26-2011 09:45 PM
Sorry I got defensive. I really was surprised, but then I'm an old fart with an apparently ancient vocabulary. Thanks for the compliment on the script."If they move, kill'em!"