I stand corrected. You learn something everyday.
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05-27-2011 02:21 PM"If they move, kill'em!"
05-27-2011 05:14 PM
Gut wrenching. I donít care if you finished or not. Compelling. This would easily fly on screen. Nurses code of honor is an interesting spin on the theme.
At the end when they are singing and the alarms are sounding... I wanted to see one thing I didn't.... A small bead of water just one. Just speed past her on the floor and maybe when she sees it that's when she starts singing... or maybe she sees it as they are... not sure... It would just add a little more to her awesomeness and the head nurses dishonorable cowardess. That's not a critique, it's a suggestion. Bravo.
05-28-2011 10:01 AM
- If you want the viewer to know the day and time put them under the header in a SUPER.
- A general trim and compress could ease the read.
- Lose the (CONTINUED)s
- Holy huge action block. Action blocks should represent what is seen in each shot. Your 9 line action block reads as if it should be at least 3 blocks.
This is an interesting human piece. I like the simplicity and heart. Might be logistically hard to shoot. A good job!