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    Here is a two and a half minute short shot on super 16 for my narrative film class. Any comments and criticisms welcome, as well as any production questions.

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    very nice looking, film is so awesome.


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    Nicely done. Gotta love film, and it looks really clean for 16mm.
    I thought the very beginning of the 1st shot was a strange composition, before he entered frame. It seemed like throw-away footage. I would consider starting with one or more of the ECU's before cutting to his CU. Just a thought.
    The rest was clear, story-wise, and intriguing. Nice use of score. Good sound design.
    I'm guessing this is one of those, "tell a story in 2 min without dialog" assignments, and to that I'd say job well done.


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    Very nice. I love the SR2 and color negative film. My only critique is the opening shot as noted above. It is a straight cut in to the top of the door. It is disconcerting, to me. I would trim the head of that shot and bring it in with the actor coming in to frame. Other than that, great job.
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    Wish I were banned. Drew Ott's Avatar
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    What narrative film class are you taking? I'm in Austin as well, just curious.
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    That was beautiful.


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    Just great all around. Thanks for sharing.

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    Thanks for the comments. I have gotten similar notes from my professor about that opening shot. I'll get around to fixing it one of these days.

    Drew, I am in Nancy Shiesari's Narrative Film class in the RTF department at UT. In the class we shoot two projects on 16mm, this was my first. The second I just got back from the lab and will start editing soon.

    Jacob


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    And the acting was excellent. His expressions say it all.

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