Here is a two and a half minute short shot on super 16 for my narrative film class. Any comments and criticisms welcome, as well as any production questions.
Thanks
Jacob
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04-15-2010 09:35 PM
very nice looking, film is so awesome.
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04-15-2010 10:05 PM
Nicely done. Gotta love film, and it looks really clean for 16mm.
I thought the very beginning of the 1st shot was a strange composition, before he entered frame. It seemed like throw-away footage. I would consider starting with one or more of the ECU's before cutting to his CU. Just a thought.
The rest was clear, story-wise, and intriguing. Nice use of score. Good sound design.
I'm guessing this is one of those, "tell a story in 2 min without dialog" assignments, and to that I'd say job well done.
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04-15-2010 10:46 PM
Very nice. I love the SR2 and color negative film. My only critique is the opening shot as noted above. It is a straight cut in to the top of the door. It is disconcerting, to me. I would trim the head of that shot and bring it in with the actor coming in to frame. Other than that, great job.
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04-15-2010 11:31 PM
What narrative film class are you taking? I'm in Austin as well, just curious.
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04-16-2010 12:38 PM
Thanks for the comments. I have gotten similar notes from my professor about that opening shot. I'll get around to fixing it one of these days.
Drew, I am in Nancy Shiesari's Narrative Film class in the RTF department at UT. In the class we shoot two projects on 16mm, this was my first. The second I just got back from the lab and will start editing soon.
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04-18-2010 07:19 PM
And the acting was excellent. His expressions say it all.
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