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    Junior Member Quincy Minor's Avatar
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    Glad you enjoyed Anthony Todaro

    MML, you're right, I will have to research the details

    Mailliw87, I was wondering if that line was funny to anyone else, for the dialog, i think i will look for some other screenplays


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    Your script really pulled me in from the start and it never let me go. However, there were a few things that didn't work for me. Once I met Captain Mohammed and started to hear his doubts, I knew what would eventually happen. I didn't, however, think that he would be killed in the end, so that was a nice surprise.


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    Solid effort, and I like where it's going. Put a little research in when you're going to tackle things you're not quite sure about and invest more thought into your characters, I just didn't connect with anyone, they don't feel natural. Then dig back in and re-write, you've got some good ideas but you can shape them better with time.


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