Glad you enjoyed Anthony Todaro
MML, you're right, I will have to research the details
Mailliw87, I was wondering if that line was funny to anyone else, for the dialog, i think i will look for some other screenplays
Thread: Bad Intel
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01-17-2010 06:59 AM
01-21-2010 12:55 PM
- Join Date
- Aug 2007
Your script really pulled me in from the start and it never let me go. However, there were a few things that didn't work for me. Once I met Captain Mohammed and started to hear his doubts, I knew what would eventually happen. I didn't, however, think that he would be killed in the end, so that was a nice surprise.
01-22-2010 11:36 AM
Solid effort, and I like where it's going. Put a little research in when you're going to tackle things you're not quite sure about and invest more thought into your characters, I just didn't connect with anyone, they don't feel natural. Then dig back in and re-write, you've got some good ideas but you can shape them better with time.