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Point of No Return
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First time on DVXuser...eeeee!
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01-05-2010 06:16 PM
Nice. Look forward to it.
Welcome to the madness, Kfer.
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01-05-2010 06:19 PM
welcome to the board brah.
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01-11-2010 11:59 AM
This reminded me of something. I can't quite put my finger on it. Maybe it was a joke I heard?
That aside I really loved the dialogue in this one. Very quick and easy to read. It flowed off the page really well.
Great characters (of course) and a very interesting ending.
Nice entry.
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01-15-2010 09:07 AM
There's a bunch of God, Jesus, and Santa jokes
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01-11-2010 01:02 PM
Kfer, I'm fairly sure you're going to hell for writing this, and so am I for reading it.
A fun read, but a couple of small things bugged me. I thought it was odd for God to be taking his son's name in vain; and I expected a stronger reaction from Joe the Catholic when God (of all people) suggests that Rachel get an abortion.The Plinkett Equation:
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01-11-2010 06:35 PM
I liked the opening line, cracked me up. I am afraid though I found the dialogue
very, very clunky and hard to read. I really couldn't get into it, but I did read it, just
didn't really get it. Nice try."Imagination is more important than knowledge." - Albert Einstein
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01-13-2010 04:31 PM
Wow! My feet are already getting hot, certainly it's the flames of hell licking at my soles.
I found this quite entertaining. This is sure to offend somebody and that's okay.
It flowed really well for me, easy to read. I liked the dialogue, definitely some funny things going on here. Wouldn't Jesus call God, dad? lol
Well written and creative. Nicely done.the writer formerly known as "Conlan Forever"
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01-13-2010 11:18 PM
On the one hand I thought the dialogue was good but there was too much of it. Maybe tighten it up to create a brisk read, it felt a little tough to get through at first.
Interesting take on your characters that you had a lot of fun with.
good work.
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