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    Jesus is drunk and God is pissed.


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    First time on DVXuser...eeeee!


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    Nice. Look forward to it.

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    This reminded me of something. I can't quite put my finger on it. Maybe it was a joke I heard?
    That aside I really loved the dialogue in this one. Very quick and easy to read. It flowed off the page really well.

    Great characters (of course) and a very interesting ending.

    Nice entry.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Michael Anthony Horrigan View Post
    This reminded me of something. I can't quite put my finger on it. Maybe it was a joke I heard?
    That aside I really loved the dialogue in this one. Very quick and easy to read. It flowed off the page really well.

    Great characters (of course) and a very interesting ending.

    Nice entry.

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    Kfer, I'm fairly sure you're going to hell for writing this, and so am I for reading it.

    A fun read, but a couple of small things bugged me. I thought it was odd for God to be taking his son's name in vain; and I expected a stronger reaction from Joe the Catholic when God (of all people) suggests that Rachel get an abortion.
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    I liked the opening line, cracked me up. I am afraid though I found the dialogue
    very, very clunky and hard to read. I really couldn't get into it, but I did read it, just
    didn't really get it. Nice try.
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    Wow! My feet are already getting hot, certainly it's the flames of hell licking at my soles.

    I found this quite entertaining. This is sure to offend somebody and that's okay.

    It flowed really well for me, easy to read. I liked the dialogue, definitely some funny things going on here. Wouldn't Jesus call God, dad? lol

    Well written and creative. Nicely done.
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    On the one hand I thought the dialogue was good but there was too much of it. Maybe tighten it up to create a brisk read, it felt a little tough to get through at first.

    Interesting take on your characters that you had a lot of fun with.

    good work.


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