--[] When Stars Collide []-- by MAH

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

A man and a woman. Two loves. One betrayal.




Written by Michael Anthony Horrigan

[DarkElastic]

Looking forward to it, MAH. Good luck.

[Russell Moore]

Great to see you in the fest.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Thanks, guys. Hope you enjoy it.

I figured it would be fun to enter one of these again.

MAH

[kennethhurd]

Good luck! I look forward to reading it.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Thanks, Ken. Good luck yourself!

MAH

[Chris_Keaton]

Alright I read it. CRAP! It's all crap! Anyone knows Spaceballs rules the universe, duh! But seriously nicely written and the banter is fantastic. Great job. Now if you could trim it to one act that could be performed on stage I know where you might be able to unload it.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Thanks, Chris.

Glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.

MAH

[Mailliw87]

Just read it

I liked it, enjoyed the dialogue, very nice. It was written well, clean and precise paragraphs. And the humour kept alive throughout.
I've no relation to Star Trek though so couldn't really relate to some of the dialogue, but it didn't break the script for me. The only thing I reacted to, and this is nitpicking, was that she was screaming as she ran into the living room. Maybe because you hadn't written what kind of a scream it was, it felt a bit awkward to me.

That's all I've got for now, might come back and add more later.
And Love the title.

[DarkElastic]

Hi MAH,

Just read you script.

As a Trekkie who also enjoys Star Wars I understood the whole thing, and could understand both sides. You've made two good characters, whome I was happy when they made up at the end.

Overall, an enjoyable script, but it isn't going to be a star in everyone's eye!