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    Senior Member MML's Avatar
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    Logline: Feeling trapped in her relationship, a girl with a flair for the dramatic finally pushes her easy going boyfriend too far.


    Looking forward to my first Scriptfest!
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    Welcome, good to see some new blood in the fest.

    There are usually more competitors, but I think you'll still find the feedback informative. I always do.
    the writer formerly known as "Conlan Forever"

    Need a short script?
    Have an idea? Want to collaborate? Contact me.

    screenwriter75@yahoo.com


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    Woot woot!


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    Welcome. Good luck!


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    Come on...I'm ready to play! When do we start??? When do we start???


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    Good luck.


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    Thanks Dark. I'm looking forward to reading everyone's work.


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    Hi MML,

    I read your script. The couple's relationship is very interesting, very bitter, a relationship gone sour if you will. It is set up nicely with Ashley's fit of temper. We get slowly taken about this tug of war between the two, which is its self is very interesting... But, I was expecting more. Something hidden between them.

    Overall though, it is a well written emotional piece. Well done.


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    POSSIBLE SPOILERS



    I really didn't like her, but I think that was the point.
    You did a great job with that. She came off like a spoiled little brat and I could easily see her striking out at him like she did.

    I'm just happy that the birds didn't suffer from being caught in the middle. Nice visual ending with the suitcase as well.

    Cheers,

    MAH


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