Educated Mouse Trap

[Chris_Keaton]

Thanks for re-read Conlan, sometimes it's the little things. But really I've been sitting on this a long time then the changes hit me. Then the feeback came and I tweaked again. No one should work in a bubble, this feedback is uber helpful. I think I actually have a script now worth filming.

[Chris_Keaton]

I'm learning, again, that you can never rewrite enough.

Ok, I trimmed out a whole scene bringing it down to roughly 5 pages. It's all one location (front room) with one jaunt to a bathroom. It's far more doable and the story is relatively the same, but it flows smoother and is tighter overall. So keep rewriting.

[Mailliw87]

Well if you have the energy to re-write, do it I say.
I've never written a second draft because I'm lazy..And because I find it hard to get into the work again, it is impossible for me, the emotion and drive I had then is gone. Suppose you need to make it alive again somehow.

[Chris_Keaton]

Well if you have the energy to re-write, do it I say.
I've never written a second draft because I'm lazy..And because I find it hard to get into the work again, it is impossible for me, the emotion and drive I had then is gone. Suppose you need to make it alive again somehow.

80% of writing is rewriting.

[MrKilloran]

I liked it. It's very engaging and I was drawn into the story. Very tight story telling, keeping the action to one location and still be entertaining. I'd flesh out a few more details about the "disc" and the uncle's warning just to make a more satisfying ending. Well done.

[Anthony Todaro]

80% of writing is rewriting.

Well written.

[Mailliw87]

80% of writing is rewriting.

Still that's not what writing has been to me.
I know of the saying 'writing is re-writing'.

But whenever I've tried to re-write something I've just ruined it.
I think it's individual.. It's not set in stone, It can't be!!
Maybe I would change my mind after having written a feature.

[Chris_Keaton]

Still that's not what writing has been to me.
I know of the saying 'writing is re-writing'.

But whenever I've tried to re-write something I've just ruined it.
I think it's individual.. It's not set in stone, It can't be!!
Maybe I would change my mind after having written a feature.

Ah, I see what you mean. And that was true for me when I started. I would totally ruin whatever I re-touched. However, now I find everything I rewrite gets better. It's the art of know what feedback to take and how to execute it. The rewrite I have now of the Educated Mouse Trap is one page shorter, but tells the story more clearly than ever before. It takes practice.

[Chris_Keaton]

Here's the film fest link for the film. It was shot for DVXuser Fiction Fest.
http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread...91#post2267191

And it was made PG-13.