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    Thanks for re-read Conlan, sometimes it's the little things. But really I've been sitting on this a long time then the changes hit me. Then the feeback came and I tweaked again. No one should work in a bubble, this feedback is uber helpful. I think I actually have a script now worth filming.
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    I'm learning, again, that you can never rewrite enough.

    Ok, I trimmed out a whole scene bringing it down to roughly 5 pages. It's all one location (front room) with one jaunt to a bathroom. It's far more doable and the story is relatively the same, but it flows smoother and is tighter overall. So keep rewriting.
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    Well if you have the energy to re-write, do it I say.
    I've never written a second draft because I'm lazy..And because I find it hard to get into the work again, it is impossible for me, the emotion and drive I had then is gone. Suppose you need to make it alive again somehow.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mailliw87 View Post
    Well if you have the energy to re-write, do it I say.
    I've never written a second draft because I'm lazy..And because I find it hard to get into the work again, it is impossible for me, the emotion and drive I had then is gone. Suppose you need to make it alive again somehow.
    80% of writing is rewriting.
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    I liked it. It's very engaging and I was drawn into the story. Very tight story telling, keeping the action to one location and still be entertaining. I'd flesh out a few more details about the "disc" and the uncle's warning just to make a more satisfying ending. Well done.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Chris_Keaton View Post
    80% of writing is rewriting.

    Well written.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Chris_Keaton View Post
    80% of writing is rewriting.
    Still that's not what writing has been to me.
    I know of the saying 'writing is re-writing'.

    But whenever I've tried to re-write something I've just ruined it.
    I think it's individual.. It's not set in stone, It can't be!!
    Maybe I would change my mind after having written a feature.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mailliw87 View Post
    Still that's not what writing has been to me.
    I know of the saying 'writing is re-writing'.

    But whenever I've tried to re-write something I've just ruined it.
    I think it's individual.. It's not set in stone, It can't be!!
    Maybe I would change my mind after having written a feature.
    Ah, I see what you mean. And that was true for me when I started. I would totally ruin whatever I re-touched. However, now I find everything I rewrite gets better. It's the art of know what feedback to take and how to execute it. The rewrite I have now of the Educated Mouse Trap is one page shorter, but tells the story more clearly than ever before. It takes practice.
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    Here's the film fest link for the film. It was shot for DVXuser Fiction Fest.
    http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread...91#post2267191

    And it was made PG-13.
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