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    Let's see those great Monsterfest scripts-
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    The quality of the entries in these festivals is constantly improving, especially now with the new 'cheap' cameras that look great right out of the box.
    One area that is always the most difficult for me, and the place where many entries suffer is the WRITING.

    Since the script is where it all starts, and it's really tough to make a great movie out of a not-so-great script, I suspect that many people will get an eye opener at what a great 6-minute script looks like, and it might help them write stronger shorts that are more focused and engaging for Betrayal Fest .

    So- I kindly request that the winners, and some not-so-winners, to post their scripts (or outlines or whatever you used to shoot with) here so we can all see where you started from, and compare it to what you ended up with, either as a jpg so we can read it right here, or a link to download a pdf.

    Thanks! and Congrats to ALL!


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    it would be nice
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    Here's the script for Red and the Wolf.

    For my film Innocence in Twilightfest I wrote a six and a half page script and the runtime ended closer to 9 min. So this time around I wanted to find something around four pages just to be safe.
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    Thanks for posting that AJ. That's a great read.

    And not even four pages... which made for a 6-minute film with a very good pace to it, not too rushed, not too slow, (although I imagine you might have a longer cut in mind?)

    Hmm. I think next time I'll limit myself to 3 1/2 pages. Betrayal Fest might be calling.


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    There's a lot to be said for that, Tim. I think Dispatch was under two pages. Slimothy (Tim Hyten) would need to confirm that, though.


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    I think for shortfilms the whole 1 page 1 minute rule doesn't apply as well.

    In a feature there is a lot more time for things to even out between the scenes that got extended from the script and the scenes that played out shorter.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Blaine View Post
    There's a lot to be said for that, Tim. I think Dispatch was under two pages. Slimothy (Tim Hyten) would need to confirm that, though.
    Hell, there's only 42 words spoken in it...I couldn't imagine it being much longer.


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    Monsters Beware
    "Imagination is more important than knowledge." - Albert Einstein
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    Quote Originally Posted by AJ Brooks View Post
    I think for shortfilms the whole 1 page 1 minute rule doesn't apply as well.
    You have learned something many still haven't.


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    Here is the original draft (The Box) and the final draft.
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    Samurai ScriptFest: A Dream of Electric Revolution (1st Place)
    Suspense ScriptFest: A Clockwork Darkened(2nd Place)
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