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    Senior Member lawriejaffa's Avatar
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    Right oh gentleman here it is!

    This is a 3 hour opus, and ive got to admit, this style of feedback may be a bit daunting for even the bravest listener.

    Basically i read through all of the scripts, making comments as i go along. Even with my reading of the scripts, you can probably discern from my general manner, where they are effective and less so effective.

    http://www.newagemedia.co.uk/MonsterAudio.mp3
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    The quality of recording isn't great im afraid and they are all read in alphabetical order (if you have trouble finding your script - i apolagise hehe, theres 3 hours of random waffling and insight.

    If the mods can delete my other audio feedback thread thanks!

    Enjoy (er if you can!)

    As a note i recommend having the scripts on hand as i go through each of them if you want to follow my read throughs and comments.
    Last edited by lawriejaffa; 09-21-2009 at 03:50 PM.
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    Thanks!

    I'll give it a listen once I'm done with my reviews.
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    I have tears in my eyes from laughter... Oh my.


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    um, I have never watched american pie but jacob's ladder and Session 9 are my favs .

    I think you were too prejudiced after the exposition on page one. It's a party in the woods, nobody was supposed sit around the fire, drink tea and exchange ironic observations. Danny was supposed to be an obnoxious and violent bro-type, so Mike had a better reason to kick him out of the car later. It's just a question of taste and on that level I usually expect more neutrality from a review.

    I laughed when you mentioned the supposedly mysogynistic tone in my story. We have certainly not a lot in common.

    But I have still learned a lot useful stuff from this review. Thx for putting so much effort into this mp3.


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    Loved this, you've pinpointed a lot of things and I'll get to work on updating it but your "howl" is truly frightening.


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    I did laugh when he added homosexual dialogue to your two male characters, Moonkid.
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    I'm guessing I don't even want to know what he said about mine...
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    Awee hey thanks guys, glad your enjoying and they are just opinions, yep moonkid you never expect neutrality from a reviewer (be it a very neutral sounding or ridiculous and candid feedback like mine.)

    I do want to add that i wasnt prejudiced by your particular script after the first page, but pretty much every page (in so much as how i expressed similar views throughout.) Im not quite sure how you think we don't have much in common from my interpretation of your script mookid - please elaborate

    Its nice to discuss any of the feedbacks etc!
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    great feedback - although I wasn't in it, waiting for my written hammering....signed the gimp.
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    Ha, you had me laughing to the point of crying. And this time it wasn't about your sad views on film or lovelife, but your reviews were witty and entertaining as always. Hell, dare I say it, they were also helpful.

    Of course you were spot on about my screenplay. If I had went through another draft I probably would've trimmed the fat so to speak.

    I have this on other writing site getting reviews and a British producer reviewed it. He said it was totally confusing. Without (Continous) he didn't know what was happening next. He wasn't sure what the slug was, could it be Momma? What was the doctors background that would make him love on some slug.?

    Glad you liked the slug love. Aliens need love too. And as Adam Ant says 'Every girl is a something girl.'

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