Title: Praying for Bears
Tagline: Camp isn't the only thing to dread about these woods.
Logline: A group of treasure seekers gets more then they bargained for when accidentally angering a territorial beast.
DISCLAIMER: I'm a bad proof-reader, It should have read MORGAN AND NATE!
Thread: Praying For Bears
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09-09-2009 09:08 PM
Last edited by MrKilloran; 09-15-2009 at 12:24 AM.
09-10-2009 10:10 AM
Nice title. It sounds like your characters are in for a big struggle.
09-11-2009 12:04 AM
Cool title. My curiosity is officially piqued.
09-11-2009 03:27 AM
If this is like "The Goonies" meets "The Edge" you've got yourself a winner.
09-14-2009 10:17 PM
This is the first short that feels like a scene in a larger film. Like we are walking into a movie late. It certainly follows the monster story pattern, but I'm disappointed there was no underage drinking or sex. I mean that is guaranteed reason to get mauled.
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- Aug 2009
- Indianapolis, IN
09-14-2009 11:38 PM
Last edited by MrKilloran; 09-14-2009 at 11:46 PM.
09-15-2009 09:23 AM
Good story and vivid descriptions.
It was easy to imagine it as a sequence of shots in a movie. The writing shows a nice variety of sentence structure and broad vocabulary. It was fluid reading with full immersion.
I liked how it started off already at high energy and then you buried the rest of the exposition behind some funny interaction. The audience has no reason to be bored. Characters behave very human, inviting actors to prove their abilities.
Overall, one of my favourite scripts in this contest.
(To Trevor & Ashley)
At least some people appreciate a good time.
THUD! Kyle’s mauled corpse falls into the fire. Everyone
Also who did Owens write that message for and why did he point at it when he died? Without further clues it doesnt feel natural for a recluse mass murderer.
09-15-2009 01:00 PM
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- Aug 2007
I enjoyed this script. It was unique, entertaining, and kept me guessing at what would happen next. I thought the characters were well developed and your monster worked well.