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    Premise line: A teenage boy held back in school for two years searches for his old high school sweetheart only to discover she now considers him a freak of nature.

    Setting - Park - single location

    Time setting: 50s

    List of characters:

    Johnny (18)
    Diana (20s)
    Amy (15)
    Two female extras (20s)
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    Script is now polished.

    It was set in the 50s, if I'm going to be honest, it's because I got hooked on, "Mad Men" and I wanted that rolled-up jeans and t-shirt look for the main character with his hair greased back.

    Hint of storyline: Think echelon of spiritual life...
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    This story is outside the box, the monster you can't look at is the monster you once were, that freak of nature.
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    Hi Charli, I enjoyed reading your script.



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    I didn't find this a monster script in any sense really... Just someone who didn't fit for what ever reason.
    As a script and story, it is very good, very strange, and would be a very interesting short.
    I really like your style, it makes it so easy to read. There are a few gramatical errors, but I won't point them out as they didn't spoil the read.

    Overall, I really enjoyed the read, but I don't think it fits in this fest.


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    Dark - the monster that is, is the monster in you, so this is definitely outside of the box, this is not a horror flick but something more towards the line of the Twilight Zone or Hitchcock in suspense more than horror.

    It may not fit the fest in the strictest form but I bet you this would do well in film festivals. Thank you reading this script and would you pm me the grammar errors?

    Thanks!
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    Different. Not what I would call a monster story. I know you were going more abstract and less popcorn, but.

    Not sure what you were trying to say philosophically. I mean doesn't anyone help somebody less fortunate out anymore?

    Good job.
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    It was a good script and well written but I'll have to repeat, I don't think it fits into the spirit of the fest. Although outside the box, it was more about a real monster.

    I didn't get a sense of suspense more of desperation and a need to understand. Good organization, pacing, and I'm sure it will make an interesting short film, reminds me a lot of the segregation of "cliques," "clubs," or "groups" in school. The spiritual equivalent of hierarchy or popularity.


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    The monster definition to this fest, "gross exception to the norm of some ecosystem" - so keeping this in mind,

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    The 'monster' is because Johnny is the freak according to Diana's ecosystem where her world is surreal and without restrictions, even though she was once like him.

    It's true, this story will not fit into the "horror" interpretation of monster, but to Diana, Johnny is a monster, a freak to her people.

    Is the darkness always dark? Or is there a horror in the light as well?
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    By the way, if anyone is interested in filming the short (maybe not for this festival) please let me know as it is available. It is a single location very low-budget short film - done purposefully but the special-effects is what needs extra care.
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