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    A Train to Kansas City

    Logline: A train conductor accepts the task of delivering a letter for a wild west legend; unfortunately bullets are involved.

    I thought about calling this one 3:10 to Kansas City, but that sounded too familiar.

    This is a smaller script (in scope, not page count) than I've written for past fests. I'm curious to see how it plays.
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    Sounds cool!
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    Looking forward to the read.


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    I like the premise. Curious to see who the legend is, unless it doesn't matter, perhaps it remains a mystery? or is it a fictional legend?
    I suppose I'll have to wait and read. Looking forward to it.
    the writer formerly known as "Conlan Forever"

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    I'll spill that much of the plot. It's a fictional legend. His legend status plays into the narrative, hence the focus.
    Chris Johnson


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    This one sounds pretty darn good. Good luck with the writing. I can't wait to read it.


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    The tagline ought to be "Don't shoot the messenger." : P

    Can't wait to read this one. Sounds liek it has an interesting twist.


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    That is a good tagline. I hadn't bothered to think of a tagline yet.
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    hey krestofre.... i hope you are still entering. looking forward to reading your script.

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    This was a well-written story, with some really good visuals. On the whole, I dug the story. I was waiting for something bigger in the end, but it was a quaint, emotional farewell. So in that, it was good.

    A lot of the dialogue was somewhat cliche, "nobody be a hero" but the action sequences paid off. I especially liked where Rook still insisted that Samuel still delivered the envelope. Something trusting and very bold, even for a nefarious character.

    Bad boys still have feelings...

    I really can't nit-pick too much about it. So KUDOS on a very well written script.


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