There was quite a metamorphosis from the orig - maybe even three different takes before the time travel and the Isetta made it's way in. Female mob bosses and double crosses, pet detectives - hence the canary - and a few twists in between.
In the very first, Annabel was another woman, and a singer, and in those days they called female singers canaries, which is how that got in the story. By the second draft, the actual bird made it's way in, and the old car as well. The Isetta, the time travel, and the falling house all came last, like two days before due date!
Thanks for reading it again. I will repay you in kind.
Thread: Another Man's Dame
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12-19-2008 09:42 PM
12-21-2008 12:37 AM
read your script again and i am impressed by your mastery of structure and language. the opening scene was terrific, the spanking was fun, and the quirky wizard of oz ending seemed appropriate in this futuristic world. great writing! ;)
12-21-2008 03:01 AM
Hey Alex. The old school slang of your script made reminded me of a movie you would like. Man of the Century.
Of course you might have seen it already."We've all been used...and reused...and abused...and amused!" [ ZARDOZ ]
"If you don't have anything to say then you shouldn't be making films. It's nothing to do with what lens you're using." [ Chris Doyle ]
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12-23-2008 02:08 PM
Nice work Alex. I always look forward to reading your stories well done. I loved the dialog and the use of time was great. I like the subtle humor that you produce so easily. Awesome jib.