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    TITLE: Lovecraft

    LOG LINE: Heaven. Hell. The same sh*t, different zip code.

    This is a classic pulp fiction, supernatural noir script. As a bonus I see this as a possible short series.
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    Anything to do with horror writer H.P. Lovecraft? I recently photographed his grave in Providence, RI


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    Excellent to see you here!


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    [quote=Jokerswild;1488770]Anything to do with horror writer H.P. Lovecraft? I recently photographed his grave in Providence, RI[/quote

    Yes, in spirit. The main character's name is 'Nathanial Lovecraft' and the story is definitely strange.


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    I look forward to reading your script.


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    Cool love a twist on the genre. Can't wait to read it.
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    "I have learned silence from the talkative, toleration from the intolerant, and kindness from the unkind; yet, strange, I am ungrateful to those teachers."


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    I forgot to mention that it only has one location, a sh*thole motel.


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    Awesome job Chris. I really enjoyed Lovecraft. This idea should have been made into a feature instead of the Hellboy movies.

    ****SPOILER ALERT****

    Your script flowed really well. The narration worked and didn't interrupt the narrative. I like the SPECIAL POV scene as well. Very cool. You balanced the noir side with the supernatural side very well.

    Nothing really wrong with this. One thing that I wondered was it seemed that after Lovecraft shot himself, the script never described how his head looked after this. I assumed that he reverted back to looking normal and had no head wound. I would maybe clarify this detail in future drafts.

    I'd also like to see this developed into a longer piece with more supernatural creatures. It has potential to be expanded upon. Maybe you could use some creatures from HP Lovecraft's stories as well?


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    Nice job. Pulled me into the story from the first few lines. Descriptions are short and sweet and dialog to tight and efficient. Would limit the use of He in one or two sentence starts (do it myself and it reminds you that you are reading something distracts a little - I try and mix these with characters names).

    Overall good story, well written and little to improve or moan about (from my end).


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    Interesting "universe" and well written. I was wondering more about Lovecraft, who and what he is. Could definitely see these characters in a series. Well done.


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