Page 3 of 6 FirstFirst 123456 LastLast
Results 21 to 30 of 55
  1. Collapse Details
    #21
    Senior Member MiataFilmSomething's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    Pickerington, OH
    Posts
    215
    Default
    I already have a vision of what I'm imagining this to look like, but I'm going to wait until I read it and see if I'm right. Looks pretty cool!
    "...and knowing is half the battle. The other half is violence..."


    Reply With Quote
     

  2. Collapse Details
    #22
    Mod v2.0 Noel Evans's Avatar
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    Shooting
    Posts
    10,142
    Default
    Hehe, I dont think it will really be what anyone expects. I think the poster really only fits one scene.
    SDC Productions Gold Coast Aust. http://sdcproductions.com.au
    admin@scarlet-films.com +61 (0) 408 455 374
    http://www.ozcrews.tv/

    ECHOES ON THE WAVES - IN EDIT http://www.facebook.com/home.php?sk=...643079268&ap=1


    Reply With Quote
     

  3. Collapse Details
    #23
    Senior Member Nektonic's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2005
    Location
    the interwebs
    Posts
    2,420
    Default
    Quote Originally Posted by Noel Evans View Post
    Hehe, I dont think it will really be what anyone expects. I think the poster really only fits one scene.
    So there isn't a big shootout with hot chicks firing off Tommy guns? Darn Noel, you just ruined my Christmas


    Reply With Quote
     

  4. Collapse Details
    #24
    Mod v2.0 Noel Evans's Avatar
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    Shooting
    Posts
    10,142
    Default
    Hey, I said nothing about there not being a shoot out. :P
    SDC Productions Gold Coast Aust. http://sdcproductions.com.au
    admin@scarlet-films.com +61 (0) 408 455 374
    http://www.ozcrews.tv/

    ECHOES ON THE WAVES - IN EDIT http://www.facebook.com/home.php?sk=...643079268&ap=1


    Reply With Quote
     

  5. Collapse Details
    #25
    Knight of the Holy Order krestofre's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Location
    Springfield, MO
    Posts
    2,707
    Default
    Good script over all. Lots of nice action pieces. Good characters. We simultaneously think that Candy is the baddest mofo chick on the planet, but also see her as a sympathetic character, which is tricky to pull off.

    ***Spoilers***

    The only part that troubled me was that she left the apartment with her brother at the mercy of the thugs. That didn't seem like her character at all. Changing that would alter the rest of the script significantly, but as a reader that troubled me. Candy seems like the kind of person who would have figured out a way to get both of them out, or die trying.
    Chris Johnson


    Reply With Quote
     

  6. Collapse Details
    #26
    Default
    I agree... I was confused why she found it sufficient to lay him behind the couch while she went and locked herself in the bathroom and escape...

    I feel like there could have been a better way to have James kidnapped so that Candy had more to do in that scenario then run and hide... and crash at a motel for the night.

    In fact, now that I think about it more... I think a lot of her actions in the middle are unmotivated/confusing. Like, where is she going when she loads her gun and leaves James? And like, she steps out side... gets knocked out... and then they bring her back upstairs... it feels like there could have been something more dynamic going on there.


    Reply With Quote
     

  7. Collapse Details
    #27
    Mod v2.0 Noel Evans's Avatar
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    Shooting
    Posts
    10,142
    Default
    Thanks for reading and giving your thoughts.
    SDC Productions Gold Coast Aust. http://sdcproductions.com.au
    admin@scarlet-films.com +61 (0) 408 455 374
    http://www.ozcrews.tv/

    ECHOES ON THE WAVES - IN EDIT http://www.facebook.com/home.php?sk=...643079268&ap=1


    Reply With Quote
     

  8. Collapse Details
    #28
    Senior Member CallaghanFilms's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2005
    Location
    Rick's Café Américain
    Posts
    3,661
    Default
    I really dug it, Noel. Well played

    I swear I though I was reading a lost scene from Sin City (¬¬compliment).

    ***SPOILER ALERT***
    Favorite Line:
    "You sound like a duck that met another duck and shoved the other duck up its arse. poo pooin painful."

    I also plotzed over this bit of Action:
    "The spittle now runs red" (very nicely said.)


    For your daily Callaghanism...follow Cal on


    Reply With Quote
     

  9. Collapse Details
    #29
    Mod v2.0 Noel Evans's Avatar
    Join Date
    Aug 2005
    Location
    Shooting
    Posts
    10,142
    Default
    Quote Originally Posted by CallaghanFilms View Post
    I really dug it, Noel. Well played

    I swear I though I was reading a lost scene from Sin City (¬¬compliment).

    ***SPOILER ALERT***
    Favorite Line:
    "You sound like a duck that met another duck and shoved the other duck up its arse. poo pooin painful."

    I also plotzed over this bit of Action:
    "The spittle now runs red" (very nicely said.)
    Awesome mate. Really glad you liked it and thanks for the HUGE compliment.
    SDC Productions Gold Coast Aust. http://sdcproductions.com.au
    admin@scarlet-films.com +61 (0) 408 455 374
    http://www.ozcrews.tv/

    ECHOES ON THE WAVES - IN EDIT http://www.facebook.com/home.php?sk=...643079268&ap=1


    Reply With Quote
     

  10. Collapse Details
    #30
    Senior Member DarkElastic's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2008
    Location
    Perth, Western Australia
    Posts
    843
    Default
    Well done, good script well written. I agree some actions aren't with her character, but I would argue they are more real, as she needed to get out to fight another day, the only way revenge would be had. Good stuff.
    Gets slightly confucing when she is talking and they are still discussing the guitar playing and I got slightly confused with which thug was where when one got kicked in the nads!


    Marshall Dean

    Writer/Producer


    Reply With Quote
     

Page 3 of 6 FirstFirst 123456 LastLast

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •