It's all fun and games until someone is exsanguinated.
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08-11-2008 05:59 AM
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08-11-2008 07:01 AM
liking it already!
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08-11-2008 04:55 PM
I'm a sucker for exsanguination. (nudgenudgewinkwink)
.gif "Drogar Vampire(DBG)")
"Women who seek to be equal with men lack ambition." ~T. Leary
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08-11-2008 07:52 PM
love the title, tag line, and pic!
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08-11-2008 07:55 PM
was the bad pun intentional? :p ;)
Originally Posted by nitramlehcar
I'm a sucker for exsanguination. (nudgenudgewinkwink)
isn't this bath tub guy cute?
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08-12-2008 08:03 AM
You know me too well.... Originally Posted by jamiejay
was the bad pun intentional? :p ;)
isn't this bath tub guy cute?
and yes, he's adorable."Women who seek to be equal with men lack ambition." ~T. Leary
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08-12-2008 08:03 AM
And that was an awesome pun, by the way.
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08-13-2008 06:17 PM
hopefully, the script lives up to the pic and tagline! Originally Posted by jamiejay
love the title, tag line, and pic!
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08-14-2008 09:18 PM
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Great writing! You can't go wrong with vampires... (not even in 30 days of night despite how ridiculous it was, it was still entertaining to me)... and you definitely have the Anne Rice thing down. The entire script flowed easily and it was easy to follow. I'm glad he felt remorse at the end. Using the title "Pawn" was great foreshadowing of how they used Claudius for their own agenda.
If you had more pages, it would've been great to Claudius and Fiona together before he is attacked to develop their relationship and to make his remorse even more apparent in the end.
Great work!
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