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    Tagline: Every contract has a loophole...even the Devil's.

    This is also going to be my TwilightFest entry.

    EDIT: Damn it all!!! I just scanned through my entry and towards the end, and once in the beginning...there are errors....OH THE SHAME! I messed up the Lord's prayer!!! Am I going to Hell for that?
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    I think you went a little over the page limit...
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    Page 665. Hmmmm. I wonder what's on the NEXT page?


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    looking forward to this one.


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    Actually, I DID go over...7 pages. Grrrrrrr.....D/Q me if need be.


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    Crap, dude, I didn't even think about the page limit... do you think you should upload the old version?


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    sounds interesting!


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    Its not a pre-nup is it? I hate to see satan have to give up half of hell.
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    Just got done reading this one. Well done on the drama of it all.

    I was gonna bring up the errors in the Lord's Prayer, but you already found that, so that's done with.

    The only thing didn't seem to mesh was the character of Satan. He seemed to have too many different emotions. I guess maybe I was expecting him to have a different kind of attitude at different places and he didn't. I thought at the very end instead of him laughing and clapping and acting happy, he'd be more quiet and angry because he was beaten. I still like the idea of him clapping, but in a more quiet and sarcastic manner, hiding his true anger that he was defeated again.

    Another thing is when we see Satan again in the bar all those years later, he looks totally different, as does Rice. How are we supposed to know it's them? Maybe give Satan some kind of marker, like a ring that he's wearing that we see in both time periods, or a certain way that his eyes glow for an instant. Just something to let the audience know that it's still him.

    Very interesting read!
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    I was just talking to our costume designer about that in an email...a token or trinket that Satan carries with him. In the film, it will be clear that they are the same actors.

    Satan's attitude is somewhat of a melody of emotion, as I want to give him the appearance of never being static, constantly changing, and always whimsical. He's a deceivver, thus his emotions never truly portray what he's thinking. The end clapping is more of a way for him to vent his anger, while still applauding [spoiler]a brain-splattered bar[/spoiler].

    Thanks for the feedback, and once again I apologize to the Divine for the prayer foul-up.


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