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    Picture Perfect Memories.


    Forget your past...




    ...or lose your future.

    Logline: A grieving man discovers a gift that allows him to step backwards into his own past, but this gift comes with a price....
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    sounds like a night at the clubs with a tall glass of strong Haitian rum and coke soda


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    Finally came up with a logline (to go with tagline)


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    Sean, good job on both the tagline and the logline. Never easy to come up with (at least for me), but you've got my interest.
    Nice pic too. Looking forward to reading more of your work .
    the writer formerly known as "Conlan Forever"

    Need a short script?
    Have an idea? Want to collaborate? Contact me.

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    Thanks.

    Hopefully I can do the idea justice....


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    OK. I'm done. Six pages ain't easy. But happy with it...


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    Tag and Log most definitely pique the interest.

    Looking forward to it.

    Alex


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    thanks
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    OK - will upload later. So many ideas, so little time.
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    Just read this one.

    I'm with you on getting it down to 6 pages. It's hard to do when you have stuff that really helps out the story that you can't put in.

    This was a good concept, but the ending seemed a little abrupt. I can see the motivation for going back to see his dad, but not really going back to be trapped with an old prom date. I would have had him decide to stay with his family again, only with him going back knowing what he knows now, history would have somehow changed, and he had his life to re-live again with his family.

    The script had a cool Butterfly Effect kinda feel to it. From what I've read so far, your script has more potential than that movie. Lots of things you can do with this idea to make a feature.
    "...and knowing is half the battle. The other half is violence..."


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