You did it!! Right on ... I like it; looks amazing. Cutesy and very 2/14 day! 8-D Giv' 'em bra . . .
Thread: The Camera
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02-14-2008 12:40 AM
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02-14-2008 01:08 AM
You did a pretty good job and had a nice story, but the technical problems really distract a lot, especially the jump cutting and sound jumping all over the place with every cut. On the story side, his dream about finding her with the other guy, wouldn't it make more sense to say... kill the other guy or do something driven by his emotion at that point? Getting hit by a car just comes out of no where and doesn't really add anything. That's telling the audience "hope these pictures aren't what they look like or the main character gets hit by a car in an unhappy accident". When really, the car accident can just as easily happen under any conditions.
The shot I liked most was the one of the bus taking off through the front window.
Acting was okay.I invented the "remove echo" audio filter. And only people that boom their actors closely get to use it.
Alex Donkle - Sound Designer -
02-14-2008 11:31 AM
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Do you have another cut of this with the technical issues fixed? I honestly wouldn't want to formulate thoughts and opinions when technical issues jump out like that. It's not fair to the content, to me.
I'll reserve thoughts til some stuff gets fixed on this one.
02-14-2008 11:55 AM
Totite, just watched your film.
I have to tell you that the sound is a real issue. There is dialogue out of alignment with the footage throughout and then there is the issue of only dialogue/sound coming from the left speaker! Very distracting.
The actual story is cute and worth watching. However, I feel that you could give your viewers a much more pleasant experience with some additional shots. Everything is a master shot. I would love to see some reverses. Get that camera on the peoples faces!
I don't know your experience at all. But I hope that you had a good time and learned a lot. It takes these experiences to really learn what the hell we are doing! LOL!
Lighting was very dark. Especially at the bus stop. I am sure that you probably shot this run-n-gun style... I just wish you found a bus stop with better lighting!
Lot's of thing for you to take away from this. The most important thing is that you made a film and submitted it! There are MANY who don't.
Congrats to you!
02-15-2008 06:15 PM
I would really just echo a lot of the above if I were to write a review. I think you know about all the unfortunate issues with this one. Some bad edits of the same shot as well. Shoot everything from different angles and mix and match.
Now... I did like a lot of your shot choices and I thought the ending was pretty good.
02-17-2008 07:58 AM
The audio was way off on my copy That really annoyed.
I thought it was cool that you filmed on the bus and I liked the street locations. I thought the two women actresses did a good job. That said, the story was a bit far fetched. And you need to find a way to sync the audio.
Thanks for filming.
02-18-2008 05:30 PM
audio and editing issues are there and already spoken about in previous reviews.
so... i love the bus scene idea. moving your film out and about is cool. and the lead wasnt all too bad. bumping into the stranger before the bus arrived didnt look too authentic though. and the story is okay, but what are the odds of finding his girlfriend's twin's lost camera? kinda hard to believe. maybe make it so the girlfriend left it at his apartment and he was on his way to return it or something? just my thoughts... congrats on your film! thanks.
02-18-2008 05:43 PM
Being Honest, It was very difficult to watch...Jump cuts really annoy me. I guess that me being a television technical director for a living. I also didn't believe the girlfriends acting, seemed fake and hard to believe. Audio on the bus was off. But I'll say that you completed the short and I could follow the story seemed kinda weak though.
02-21-2008 01:26 AM
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