Supermates - Alex DePew

[Alex DePew]

Here is my Herofest entry, Supermates. I would like to thank all the hard work that everyone put in to make this film happen.

Here is a link to the film. Please right click and save to your computer.
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STARRING:
Nick Marcotti as Capitano Justice
Alex DePew as Dr. Devious
Teju Prasad as Hostage
Tamar Schoenberg as Newscaster

CREDITS:
Directed, Edited and Produced by Alex DePew
Written by Jason Sheridan
Cinematography by Ryan Penny (Hybridcreations)
Original Music by Justin R. Durban (Edgen)
Original Artwork by Jason Sheridan
Special Effects by Justin R. Durban (Edgen)

Crew : Mark Harris (Desperatecomfort)
Steve Boling
Teju Prasad
Shawn Chittle (FlintMI)
Jose Britez
Paul O'Hara
Natalia Britez

SPECITAL THANKS:
To my Mom for the baked ziti.
Steve Boling who was an amazing help for all four days and helped in every capacity.
Nick Marcotti for an excellent acting job and for being a consummate professional.
Jason Sheridan for being a good sounding board as well as for the amazing art and story.
Dawn Um for the use of her apartment which unfortunately didn't make it into the movie.
Aram Bauman and Justin R. Durban for your help with After Effects after I spent hours and came up with garbage.
Jack Daniel Stanley for letting me borrow some of your equipment.
Owen Smith for the Chocolate Milk Productions logo.


I'd also like to thank the first weekend cast and crew. Even though we didn't get to use the footage,your work is really appreciated. Thanks Mark (desperatecomfort) for being the DP thefirst weekend. I'd also like to thank Michael Littner for playing Dr. Devious the first weekend. I hope your recovery is going well.

Enjoy the movie and let me know what you think. Criticism and critques are welcome.

[Aaron Marshall]

This one had me chuckling. The opening sequence with the comic book art was very well done. I like conversation about being the worst roommate ever. "That's hurtful" hahaha! good stuff

[Beat Takeshi]

Yeah, I really liked that opening sequence and when the hero kept changing his accent. The concept was very original also. The end fade to back to the drawings was a nice round off to the film.
Good job.

[Kholi]

Not a bad concept.

I think, for this piece, the cursing might've been a bit much.

Great go at the fight scene (aside from the toy... err that was just off). Must've been incredibly difficult to pull that off.

Great job!

[Edgen]

The guy under the bed cracks me up everytime! :)

"...umm.. Mort Mayer. He's Asian"

I find myself quoting lines from this movie throughout my day. "....I'm Dr. Devious. And I know you are El Capitano EJustisssss"

[Rasquachemedia]

This was funny. Dr. Devious looks like Billy Bob Thorton.

[Edgen]

This was funny. Dr. Devious looks like Billy Bob Thorton.

Bingo!! that's what I told Alex! (which.. Alex IS Dr. Devious :) )

Maybe its the grey side hair and cocky attitude?

/j

[Beat Takeshi]

I thought alex did a great job jumping in as an actor and he is photogenic. . He looks like Reed from the Fantastic 4 comics.

[conrad_johnson]

I liked the intro. It was interesting and well-done. I was also amused by the shot of the guy peeking out from under the bed.

The swearing was a little much, and the whole thing (cursing, ethnic references, gay jokes) came off as borderline offensive. Now, I can understand the humor in referencing these things and I'm not the PC police, but it didn't seem appropriate for this movie - wasn' t really well-placed. I think the references to the superhero/capitano as being gay would have worked IF he wasn't living with the bad guy (and if they didn't both know it to be so) - e.g. unsuspecting guy thinks his roommate is gay, but really he's a superhero. Then the jokes would have been appropriate, but here they felt a little off. Just my 2 cents.

Good work

[Mike McNeese]

I'm gonna echo Conrad. Language was unfitting...not sure, maybe delivery would have sold it better. I really liked the titles, but if you could have toned down the blaring purple dildo, I wouldn't have guessed what was coming.

The spanish accent was actually good...pretty funny. Nice job guys!!!

[Edgen]

Ooh. Alex, you really toned down that blast on the last scene. :) Audio levels on the music (uumm. ya... :) ) could have been bumped up a wee bit, but I liked the end result!

Cheers to ya!
/j

[Alex DePew]

There seems to be a few people who thought the cursing was too mush. I am just wondering if it is that you don't like cursing in general or if you thought it didn't work in the context of the movie (i.e. didn't fit the characters).

I thought the opening sequence worked well too. It was in no small part due to the great art by my writer and the music by Justin (Edgen).

[Alex DePew]

And I guess looking like Billy Bob Thornton isn't too bad. He did nab Angelina Jolie.

I actually wasn't supposed to star in this movie. My Reed Richards/BB Thornton self was supposed to be behind the camera! But at 12:30 am on the Saturday of the SECOND weekend of shooting, the actor playing Dr. Devious calls me from the hospital and says he won't be able to make it. So the previous weekend's footage, which was shot at a beatiful apartment with a nice view of New York City was unusable and the entire shoot had to be condensed from four days to two, with me in front of the camera instead of behind it.

This film was produced through a collaboration of several NYC DVXusers (Hybridcreations, Desperatecomfort, FlintMI, Aram Bauman) and one from LA (Edgen). This board is a great place to meet helpful, knowledgeable people.

[Edgen]

And I guess looking like Billy Bob Thornton isn't too bad. He did nab Angelina Jolie.


Hell ya brother. That he did indeed. :)

and yep. Gawd bless the interweb.
:beer::thumbsup:

/j

[Story_of_Yesterday]

I liked it a lot. The cursing didn't offend me at all and everyone can take the PC and shove it out the window for this one because if it was all PC, then there'd be no story. That's what made this unique to me. A very down to earth roomie conflict with superhero undertones.

What really bugged me was that when the fists were flying at the end and they were to "connect" with body tissue, there were no sound effects. I would really like to have heard some swooshes and THWACK / THWUNKS.

[Rasquachemedia]

There seems to be a few people who thought the cursing was too mush. I am just wondering if it is that you don't like cursing in general or if you thought it didn't work in the context of the movie (i.e. didn't fit the characters).


I actually liked the cursing, especially when the hero is watching tv and says "bitches" Its perfect as a satire to whole superhero culture, where they can do no wrong. Maybe if that was the only scene it would have highlighted it more. What made it work was that it was so casual. Whereas billy bob's was had some anger behind it, which is good for the character, but doesn't lend itself for a satire of it.

Also I really liked the humor throughout (half naked men on magazines and the spanish accent) oh man that all really worked.

If I had to make some critical comments, on the compressed version we all say the first scene was a bit dark and for me the guy under bed, I didn't notice the face until a second viewing. It could be the compression but it is kinda dark, at least for me.

But what I love is how stupid the hero is for not realizing that his roommate is his arch enemy. That is friggen hilarious.

[MsManhattan]

Congratulations, Alex! I think you did a great job for your first outing as writer/director/producer. You showed great resourcefulness all the way through, and I really think you were meant to play Dr. Devious... ;)

ADDENDUM: Forgot to mention that I LOVE your opening credits. I think they are my favorites so far...

[Beat Takeshi]

Yeah that bitches line was great. The super hero gloating to himself was a nice touch.
I saw it as he was so into himself that he never saw that his room mate was the enemy even though their were people stuffed under his bed. I originally thought that was a ninja under there from the way their head shot up. It looked like he was just chillin under there.

[Edgen]

http://edgen.hostpaw.com/edgen_supermates.mp3 :)

(hope its ok to post this...)

/j

[Alex DePew]

I liked it a lot. The cursing didn't offend me at all and everyone can take the PC and shove it out the window for this one because if it was all PC, then there'd be no story. That's what made this unique to me. A very down to earth roomie conflict with superhero undertones.

What really bugged me was that when the fists were flying at the end and they were to "connect" with body tissue, there were no sound effects. I would really like to have heard some swooshes and THWACK / THWUNKS.

I'm glad that the cursing didn't offend you. And I listened to it the movie a few more times without the picture and I still don't think the cursing was out of place or forced. It fit within the context of the characters. They are real people who happen to have powers. They are not idealized versions of a hero and villain. And most real people curse.

I agree about the sound effects. This is an area I will definitely look at fixing up. Althought the score does an excellent job of tracking the fight in terms of impact, the sound effects would definitely add to the scene.

Thanks,
Alex

[Alex DePew]

I actually liked the cursing, especially when the hero is watching tv and says "bitches" Its perfect as a satire to whole superhero culture, where they can do no wrong. Maybe if that was the only scene it would have highlighted it more. What made it work was that it was so casual. Whereas billy bob's was had some anger behind it, which is good for the character, but doesn't lend itself for a satire of it.

Also I really liked the humor throughout (half naked men on magazines and the spanish accent) oh man that all really worked.

If I had to make some critical comments, on the compressed version we all say the first scene was a bit dark and for me the guy under bed, I didn't notice the face until a second viewing. It could be the compression but it is kinda dark, at least for me.

But what I love is how stupid the hero is for not realizing that his roommate is his arch enemy. That is friggen hilarious.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. You nailed the idea of the satire. As to the compression, I've heard from people on mac's that it is darker than it is on a pc. I downloaded it to check it and it looked fine level wise on my pc at work and home. Is there a way to get it to look good for both pc and mac using one codec? Also, did anyone else have this problem?

Thanks for the comments,
Alex

[Alex DePew]

I'm gonna echo Conrad. Language was unfitting...not sure, maybe delivery would have sold it better. I really liked the titles, but if you could have toned down the blaring purple dildo, I wouldn't have guessed what was coming.

The spanish accent was actually good...pretty funny. Nice job guys!!!

Thanks for the comments. I'm happy to listen to all sides and learn what works and what doesn't for some people. I'd really like to know what about the language specifically you found unfitting. It would really help me get a sense of some of the reaction to the piece and why the cursing seemed to be distracting or out of place to some people.

As to toning down the purple dildo, do you mean in the opening sequence or at the end?

Thanks,
Alex

[Mike McNeese]

I'd really like to know what about the language specifically you found unfitting.

Alex, for me it wasn't the language per se, but the delivery and context. I think you were going for a casual use of the cursing, but the actors seemed a little too clean cut to be spitting it out like that...my take anyway.

But, I don't think it's a big deal...just something that stood out.

Well done!

[Alex DePew]

Alex, for me it wasn't the language per se, but the delivery and context. I think you were going for a casual use of the cursing, but the actors seemed a little too clean cut to be spitting it out like that...my take anyway.

But, I don't think it's a big deal...just something that stood out.

Well done!

Thanks. I had to replace the actor playing the villain and I think my inexperience acting was noticeable in the delivery. Next time I will only be behind the camera. One Billy Bob Thornton on the screen is enough.:)

[Blaine]

Your fight definitely fell flat due to the lack of sound effects. You really need the sound effects to "sell" the fight.

[sandra]

Great intro. Great script.
You could've probably used stronger actors--but the guys had a good "look" and were believable roommates.

The sound quality was pretty poor. A lot of the funny lines were lost due to a combination of sound level and delivery.

The people who didn't like the cursing need to spend less time with their mothers. Cursing is fine and often funny (though, it's true, the delivery did kill it a bit).

By the way, the last time I posted on this board, I was banned by an immature moderator who was afraid of open discourse (a fine killer of a forum's potency).

Hopefully, this post won't be deleted.

-Jason

[sandra]

The guy under the bed cracks me up everytime! :)

"...umm.. Mort Mayer. He's Asian"

I find myself quoting lines from this movie throughout my day. "....I'm Dr. Devious. And I know you are El Capitano EJustisssss"


I laughed in the same places. :costumed-smiley-047

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

Alex nice script. I think its better than the short but I liked the short nonetheless.
Lots of funnyh stuff here and a nice original idea. Would have liked some rediculous super hero costumes to come in at somepoint -- like they rip off their regular clothes and ubdenearth are spandex and what not.

Again, funny stuff.

[HybridCreations]

Just wanted to pop in here and congratulate Alex. You did a great job with all the hurdles that were thrown at you and it came out pretty damn good. I'm sure we could've made it a little tighter and smoother if you didn't have to look at the monitor while acting in the scene:) Anyway, the things that I think could have been better (besides my shooting, because God knows that could've been....anyway) were the sound (because we had no sound man and very little room to work with stands) and the compression. Perhaps it's the fact that we shot in 30p and was put in a 24p timeline. I think perhaps we should have only done that for the sequences that we knew we were going to slow down. I think I used too much shutter for the fight scene as it is, but all the motion looks a bit too strobey/interlacey to me... those are the technical, industry terms btw;). Anyway, you really did pull it off quite well. It was a pleasure working with you and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
-Ryan

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

...perhaps it's the fact that we shot in 30p and was put in a 24p timeline....
Whoa! why the heck would you do that?

[HybridCreations]

I think we both got a little confused about using the 30p for slo-mo. I just starting to learn more about the editing side of things and I haven't really done any slo-mo before so I shot the whole thing in 30p thinking that Alex might want to slow a lot of different parts down....What I didn't think about AT ALL was what kind of timeline that would have to go into. We should have just done the parts that we knew were going to be slowed down. So for my own knowledge, this should've been edited on a 30p timeline? Would we have been able to slow anything down that way? Is there anyway to pull down 30p footage so it's less strobey? Sorry for letting the cat out of the bag Alex...but hopefully we'll both be educated by this.
-Ryan

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

30p on a 30p timeline is way less stoby than 24p.

How it should be done ... shoot 24pA for most of your project.

The shots you want slo mo shoot 30p or 60i.

You then convert that footage to 24p which will automitically slow it to 80% for 30p or 40% for 60i, dop that in your 24p timeline. Deintrelace and you are good to go.

I know you were downloading bonehand a few minutes ago ... but all of the stuff in the cemetarty was 30p slowed to 80% at 24p except her smile I think and then her walk off transformation at the end was 60i slowed to 40% on a 23.976 timeline. and it all plays dandy on 24pa.

What I would do now is export the finished edit from a 30p timeline, seperate the audio, and convert the video to 24p (which will slow it down 20% to 80%) then drop the video onto a 24p time line and speed it up 25% and it will sync with the audio and play smoothly.

here's the math at a factor of 100

100frames slowed by 20% = 80% or 80 frames
80 frames increased by a factor of 20% (16 frames) would only equal 96 frames.
so to get back to 100 frames increase by a factor of 25% (20 frames)

[HybridCreations]

See you're just way smarter than me....I think all that math made my brain throw up. On a serious note, thanks for the tips. I didn't realize how much extra work shooting the whole thing in 30p would require.

[conrad_johnson]

I may be wrong, but I'll bet the word dildo appears in your thread way more than any of the others.

Do you think Jarred will let us add a category for most effective use of a sex toy?

[Alex DePew]

I may be wrong, but I'll bet the word dildo appears in your thread way more than any of the others.

Do you think Jarred will let us add a category for most effective use of a sex toy?

I wish there were a category for cursing too! I'd win hands down! and yup I think this thread has the exclusive rights to mentions the word dildo. :)

[Alex DePew]

Whoa! why the heck would you do that?

Cause...... What ya gotta have a reason to do something knuckleheaded?:(

[Alex DePew]

it's the fact that we shot in 30p and was put in a 24p timeline. I think perhaps we should have only done that for the sequences that we knew we were going to slow down. I think I used too much shutter for the fight scene as it is, but all the motion looks a bit too strobey/interlacey to me... those are the technical, industry terms btw;). Anyway, you really did pull it off quite well. It was a pleasure working with you and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
-Ryan

Ryan,
You signed a contract saying you wouldn't give away my secret to strobey/interlacey shooting!

Thanks for the comments. Yeah there were a lot of hurdles to getting this short done. But isn't that true of every film! Hopefully though the next ones will be less complicated in terms of people management. Even with everything that conspired to shut this project down, I am still happy with the result. I learned a ridculous amount and my next short will definitely benefit from the lessons I learned on Supermates.

Thanks Ryan for the excellent work you did on this short. And stop bashing yourself. You did an excellent job and I'd be happy to work with you again.

As for the 30P. That mistake won't happen again.

Thanks,
Alex

[Alex DePew]

Alex nice script. I think its better than the short but I liked the short nonetheless.
Lots of funnyh stuff here and a nice original idea. Would have liked some rediculous super hero costumes to come in at somepoint -- like they rip off their regular clothes and ubdenearth are spandex and what not.

Again, funny stuff.

Thanks Jack. I am just now getting to comment on all the movies. Bonehand is next up on the list.

I agree that the short could have been funnier. I learned a lot about the importance of pre-planning and comedic timing. And I also learned that I need to be behind the camera and not speaking words and making facial expressions on the business end of the camera.:crybaby:

[MsManhattan]

I may be wrong, but I'll bet the word dildo appears in your thread way more than any of the others.

Do you think Jarred will let us add a category for most effective use of a sex toy?

Hmmmm... Then I guess my next SuperHero film would be... "The Rabbit."

[Alex DePew]

Hmmmm... Then I guess my next SuperHero film would be... "The Rabbit."
http://img523.imageshack.us/img523/3808/bugsasgroucho5ms.jpg

[Slimothy]

This one had some kinda funny parts. I couldn't take it too seriously, but the drawings really kicked ass. I actors seemed to speak their lines too much. I know it was sort of a joke on the genre, but overall I didn't care for it too much. Some things that would have helped are some sound fx during the fight, some better dialogue and maybe a more interesting location. my .02.

[MsManhattan]

http://img523.imageshack.us/img523/3808/bugsasgroucho5ms.jpg

And sometimes a cigar is just a cigar. Ba-dum-bum!

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

Hmmmm... Then I guess my next SuperHero film would be... "The Rabbit."

T.M.I. http://www.smileys.ws/smls/speechless/00000011.gif :laugh:

[Alex DePew]

This one had some kinda funny parts. I couldn't take it too seriously, but the drawings really kicked ass. I actors seemed to speak their lines too much. I know it was sort of a joke on the genre, but overall I didn't care for it too much. Some things that would have helped are some sound fx during the fight, some better dialogue and maybe a more interesting location. my .02.

I agree about the sfx on the punches. That will definitely be added. The acting from my part was not so good. I have acted only once before and also under duress. I was forced to play Dr. Devious when my actor fell ill. And yeah the drawing did kick some serious arse. I especially like the second panel with Capitano Justice falling towards Dr. Devious.

And it wasn't so much a joke on the genre (a small part of it was), but more of a regular roomate story with superheroes.

And I completely agree about the location. I made my life easier for my first film by setting it in one location. And my one location for the first weekend (none of the footage was usable when I had to sub in for the actor on the second weekend) was an awsome apt in Manhattan with a great view. But my next film will definitely be in a more interesting locale than an apt.

I do disagree about the dialogue. The script was funny as hell. It may not be everyone's cup of tea but I thought it was hilarious and blame my delivery on many of the lines falling flat.

Thanks for the comments,
Alex

[MOVIE STUNTS]

Is this a sequel to Brokeback Mountain... Yikes!!!

[TC]

I'm all about swearing in screenplays, but it really didn't seem to fit this piece. It almost seemed childish, but at the same time it worked for the characters, so I'm torn.

Overall it was a great concept, I love the fact that he's just such a nuckle head that he has no idea of what's going on.

Jack already went into more detail on the technical aspects than I would like to touch.

The intro was great, and tying it in at the end worked really well.

The acting was hammy at best.

Good entry, even if I felt it came up a bit short overall.

[Slimothy]

I agree about the sfx on the punches. That will definitely be added. The acting from my part was not so good. I have acted only once before and also under duress. I was forced to play Dr. Devious when my actor fell ill. And yeah the drawing did kick some serious arse. I especially like the second panel with Capitano Justice falling towards Dr. Devious.

And it wasn't so much a joke on the genre (a small part of it was), but more of a regular roomate story with superheroes.

And I completely agree about the location. I made my life easier for my first film by setting it in one location. And my one location for the first weekend (none of the footage was usable when I had to sub in for the actor on the second weekend) was an awsome apt in Manhattan with a great view. But my next film will definitely be in a more interesting locale than an apt.

I do disagree about the dialogue. The script was funny as hell. It may not be everyone's cup of tea but I thought it was hilarious and blame my delivery on many of the lines falling flat.

Thanks for the comments,
Alex

Yea, I know what it's like to have to step in front of the camera last minute. Good job on still completing it. That's more than I can say for myself :).

[Norm Sanders]

Hey Alex, sorry I've not been able to comment until now. I'm also not able to take the time to read the other posts, so mine may just be redundant, but I at least want to post my thoughts.

LOVED the opening shots with the comic book frames. Great drawings. This is something I was confident would be in many of the films, but yours looked really good.

I don't know if it was the lighting or the color correction, but something left me wanting more out of the image.

The mic's either too close or the gain up too high ... it's picking up all the nose sounds as the evil guy breaths in between lines ... also has that too close to the mic boom sound.

Lead guy is HUGE, and has a great accent when talking on the phone. I love that he's an idiot & has no idea about his room mate, and that the room mate simply takes advantage of this.

At 04:13 when the bad guy jumps into frame, it looked quite cool, but we're seriuosly missing SFX in all the hits/swings during the fight.

Overall, good concept & I liked the script, though I'm not a huge fan of some of the humor (i.e. my kids keep wanting to watch what I'm watching so I have to be cautious), a lot of the things still worked in here & could have worked even better if the delivery was improved a little more (i.e. acting, etc.).

[FatBird19]

Do I see signage with the Coke can or did you just kind of put it in there? :Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)

[Cryogenic Filmworks]

Cursing did not bother me. Liked the intro (wish I had done that). Needed some sound effects but you know that. What did bother me was the "toy" and the dialouge regarding it. Personally I thought it brought your movie down from what it should have been. The dumb superhero roommate idea was good though.

[prezorg]

Hey Alex,

I thought your fight choreography was really nice. It's a really solid foundation for some foley work, if you ever get a chance to add any. I thought the purple dildo was funny, but would have been funnier if the images in the beginning hadn't given away that the superhero used a glowy dildoy thing. For example, if the art had showed the hero with a purple lightsaber thing, and then we see a dildo it might have caught audience members more off guard.

The pointless spanish accent always cracks me up. Too bad about your first shoot. Wouldn't mind seeing some shots from the nicer apartment. Overall, nicely done. Can't wait to see what you do next.

~Ian

[prezorg]

What I would do now is export the finished edit from a 30p timeline, seperate the audio, and convert the video to 24p (which will slow it down 20% to 80%) then drop the video onto a 24p time line and speed it up 25% and it will sync with the audio and play smoothly.


I hate to disagree with you Jack, but I think your math may cancel itself out. If you convert 30p to 24p with 80% speed it will look smooth although slower, I agree. But once you use your NLE in a 24p timeline to speed up those frames it may be the exact same effect as dropping the 30p movie into a 24p timeline in the first place. The only advantage may be to have field/frame blending on the speed up, instead of frames being dropped to conform the frame rate.

30 x .8 X 1.25=30 That being said, I didn't find the find the frame rate in this film too distracting.

~Ian

[Alex DePew]

I'm all about swearing in screenplays, but it really didn't seem to fit this piece. It almost seemed childish, but at the same time it worked for the characters, so I'm torn.

Overall it was a great concept, I love the fact that he's just such a nuckle head that he has no idea of what's going on.

Jack already went into more detail on the technical aspects than I would like to touch.

The intro was great, and tying it in at the end worked really well.

The acting was hammy at best.

Good entry, even if I felt it came up a bit short overall.

Thanks. Next time I won't be dragged by the director (me) in front of the camera!:nads: That would have made the delivery and hamminess issue dissapear. That being said I thought Capitano Justice (Nick Marcotti) did a great job of playing his role. But the script hinged on a strong performance from the villain.

Thanks for the comments,
Alex

[Alex DePew]

LOVED the opening shots with the comic book frames. Great drawings. This is something I was confident would be in many of the films, but yours looked really good.

Thanks. The artwork was done by the writer and they came out great.

I don't know if it was the lighting or the color correction, but something left me wanting more out of the image.

Please expand on this, I would really like to know what you thought was lacking. I didn't do any color correction, barring slight work on the tv flicker scene. I thought the colors popped and the lighting was appropriate for the scenes. But please let me know. I am trying to learn and any help is greatly appreciated.

The mic's either too close or the gain up too high ... it's picking up all the nose sounds as the evil guy breaths in between lines ... also has that too close to the mic boom sound.

The sound didn't come out too clean. The mic was actually too far away in many scenes. We had a small crew and the mic was held by a C stand. Next time I get a sound guy! I have a lot to learn about recording sound and this will be a priority before my next film.

Lead guy is HUGE, and has a great accent when talking on the phone. I love that he's an idiot & has no idea about his room mate, and that the room mate simply takes advantage of this.

Thanks. Nick's (Capitano Justice) acting was very good and I was quite happy with the way he performed.

At 04:13 when the bad guy jumps into frame, it looked quite cool, but we're seriuosly missing SFX in all the hits/swings during the fight.

Overall, good concept & I liked the script, though I'm not a huge fan of some of the humor (i.e. my kids keep wanting to watch what I'm watching so I have to be cautious), a lot of the things still worked in here & could have worked even better if the delivery was improved a little more (i.e. acting, etc.).

Yup. I am going to add in some sfx for the landing and the punches. I hope to also be able to work with the audio.

The script is very strong and the humor is obviously not for children.

Thanks for the comments and get back to me on the image issue. I'm very interested.

Alex

[Alex DePew]

Do I see signage with the Coke can or did you just kind of put it in there? :Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)

Yup. Got $20K for that product placement! And I spent it all on getting Dr. Devious. But Christopher Walken just took the money and ran so I had to sub in.

[Alex DePew]

Cursing did not bother me. Liked the intro (wish I had done that). Needed some sound effects but you know that. What did bother me was the "toy" and the dialouge regarding it. Personally I thought it brought your movie down from what it should have been. The dumb superhero roommate idea was good though.

I will definitely put in the sfx. What about the dialogue regarding the "toy" didn't work for you? I thought it worked well so I am interested.
Thanks,
Alex

[Alex DePew]

Hey Alex,

I thought your fight choreography was really nice. It's a really solid foundation for some foley work, if you ever get a chance to add any. I thought the purple dildo was funny, but would have been funnier if the images in the beginning hadn't given away that the superhero used a glowy dildoy thing. For example, if the art had showed the hero with a purple lightsaber thing, and then we see a dildo it might have caught audience members more off guard.

The pointless spanish accent always cracks me up. Too bad about your first shoot. Wouldn't mind seeing some shots from the nicer apartment. Overall, nicely done. Can't wait to see what you do next.

~Ian

I see what you are saying about the dildo. When I screened it for several people they were unsure about the ending. So I tried to make the end tie into the begining better and make the dildo's appearance less confusing.

Thanks for the comments on the choreography. I agree about the sfx. I think it will make the scene work much better.

[Mark Harris]

Hey man, I'm sure there is nothing I can add that's not being addressed on a technical level. I just wanted to say you should feel very proud to actually get a movie in the can, and to achieve the most basic thing of all, which is to make a series of images tell a story. That in itself is quite hard to accomplish.

I'm down for the next one. You doing Horror-Fest? I am and thinking about trying to coordinate some folks schedules to all work on each-others' so we all have good crews.

[Alex DePew]

Hey man, I'm sure there is nothing I can add that's not being addressed on a technical level. I just wanted to say you should feel very proud to actually get a movie in the can, and to achieve the most basic thing of all, which is to make a series of images tell a story. That in itself is quite hard to accomplish.

I'm down for the next one. You doing Horror-Fest? I am and thinking about trying to coordinate some folks schedules to all work on each-others' so we all have good crews.

I'm definitley down for Horrorfest. Sounds like a good plan to get everyone helping each other out.

And it feels great to have the first one in the can. But I still have that itch that I could have done 543 things different to make it better. I have a feeling that doesn't go away though.

[Mark Harris]

I'm definitley down for Horrorfest. Sounds like a good plan to get everyone helping each other out.

And it feels great to have the first one in the can. But I still have that itch that I could have done 543 things different to make it better. I have a feeling that doesn't go away though.

Ha ha, no matter how many you do, there will ALWAYS be 543 things to do differently, trust me.

:)