Forced Suicide

[egproductions]

Here the latest short I put together.

took me about 2 days from script to finish.

Forced Suicide (http://eden.rutgers.edu/~egabor/Transfer%20Folder/Forced%20Suicide.wmv)

[MatthewRyanMCK]

The bathroom scene could use a more dramatic lighting scheme. It just seems too flat for the mood. Other then that very nice shots.

[egproductions]

yeah i actually set up 2 point lighting but its was such a cramped bathroom and everything was white so it was difficult. couldnt find a better location on such short notice.

[MatthewRyanMCK]

from my experience with lighting with dramatic scenes is less is more. I would have had just used one light to give some harsh shadows. bring the mood down to the level of the subject matter.

[egproductions]

what do people think of the storyline?

[MatthewRyanMCK]

I think it works well. I didn't feel confused by it so it has to have something going right!

[BryD959]

new jersey whats up

I like the story however the ending didnt give me enough closure. I wanted him to live and save the girl and kill the thug.... so the reason he was trying to kill himself was becasue he lost his girl?

Where did you get that music? I've heard it in another film from a film festival?

The use of those editing flashes were a nice touch. I wanted to see more of that.

I probably would have went with at least a knife instead of a toy gun...

nice short

[egproductions]

the music was composed of a bunch of diffrent instramental tracks from one of those roaylty free music discs

[cannon]

Do you happen to use Soundtrack Pro for sound? I believe I've heard some of those loops on there.

I really liked the idea. It seemed comical to me at times (was it supposed to?). But 2 days is very impressive. I have nothing but respect for you. Great job.

[skrott]

i thought the story was cool the shots look ok, But Music is just as important as Picture. You really need to spend as much if not more time with sound and music, I did not hear any background at all and that loops from soundtrack are way over played, check out newest garge band they have some new hip loops. Good luck man

[ngraha3]

Suicide is a tad cliche... a large tad. Then the ending is a tad like, 'Uh what the hell just happened here?' The guy said Dave way too much, but just a tad.

[vincent_price]

Interesting... But I don't like the photography... was it shot on xl2?