CPU - Jeremy Hyler aka Spidey

[spidey]

http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/cpuposterweb.jpg
Heres the thread for it I'll add to it once asked. and when time premits.

Good As A Mugg Pictures and Binary Studio Productions


::CPU::
"Each Bounty Has A Price"

Sci-fi Film Noir Thriller

Shooting script. Different from film in some parts and no narration. RIGHT CLICK TO SAVE AS. (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/cpu/CPUfinal.doc)

Also here:
INSIDE THE STUDIO RECORDINGS (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/rossvocals.mov)
MODEL PHOTOS (http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=46484&page=11)
CPU what it could have been! (MODEL FUN!) (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/modelfly.mov)
Images of the gun, THE BETTY! (http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=46484&page=12)
CHRIS HURNS SOUNDTRACK PIECE INTO THE DARKNESS (http://chrishurn.com/Into%20the%20darkness.mp3)
CHINESE MUSIC No Vocals (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/chinese.aif)
OPENING THEME (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/opening.mp3)
THE CHASE. (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/runner.mp3)


Jeremy Hyler
Director/Writer/ Director Of Photography/Editor/ Producer/ Story Concept/ Story Board/
Model Desinger (drawing)/ Color Corrector and Green Screen Mapping

Matthew B. Moore
Writer/ Lead Editor/ Sound Designer/ Producer/ Craft Service/ Actor

Sophia Madalana Martinez
Production Desinger/ Set Desginer/ Wardrobe/ Producer/ Craft Service

Joe Lissi
Make up and SFX (analog)

Adam Ross
Model Desinger and Creator (hand Crafted)/ Weapon Designer and creator (the Betty)/ Vocal Recording for Score/ Actors

Digital Effects
Dog Gone Productions

Michael McQueen
Sound Engineer and titles

Catherine Cravens
Gaffer

Corey Doggett
Key Grip/ Dolly Grip/ KEY PA and Etc.

Chris Hurn/ Matthew B. Moore/ Retrofuse/ Jeremy Hyler
Composers

Ben Sakatos
Writer/ Actor

Actors

Matthew B Moore : Ryan
Ben Sakatos: Bart Summerfield
Laruel Ullman: Cyborg Hooker
Crystal Lrgen: Unknown woman

With

Nick Staryeu : Depositor Guy
J. Lublinkhof : Future Cop (cleaner)
Justin Khun : Cyborg number 2
Ed Moye : The Cyborg

and
Special Guest
Adam Ross Chinese Resteraunt Cook

Also Joe Lissi as Dead Guy

SPECS
BUDGET: $300

DVX100
Mike Dawson 35 Adaptor
nikon 50mm 2f
FCP 4.5 HD

3 day shoot Monday through wenesday Decemeber 19- 21
Scheduale

DAY 1
scene first and last
scene Drug in the bathrooom
scene Bart waking up
scene Out side Barts Apartment
scene Bar
Scene Battle with first cyborg

DAY 2
scene Industrial park out side
scene Industrial park indoors
scene hallway
scene crime scene
scene Burning Body
scene Bart Dream

DAY 3
scene Dispositor
scene Chinese Resteruant
scene Subway (cut)
scene Model Effects
scene Interior ship flying (cut)
scene Second Robot Death
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I'M proud of the crew I worked with.
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[spidey]

ok my film is up.

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[KOVAROVA]

ya spidey. interesting work. feels like it is a montage of a longer movie. really spicey stuff. plan on cutting a longer version?

[J.R. Hudson]

Jeez. I'm impressed. I'll throw down a more detailed and solid review later but this was iis in my top 5 currently.

Wow. Jeremy; you a skilly bizzle.

[J.R. Hudson]

Heh heh

Cyborg Hooker

[Kaz]

Yeah, this seemed like the first act in a full-length. Always leave 'em wanting more!

Great actors (especially the one eye), cool look & story. A couple of tiny negatives but nothing worth mentioning. You'll be getting some high marks from me for sure.

[spidey]

thanks :) i been dying to hear from people.

EDIT MORe pictures on the front pages will be here.

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[Filmjunkie677]

Spiderman,

This flatout rocked and has just taken over the NUMBER ONE postion as my favorite.

Your style is insane, the story twisted and dark... Right up my alley.
Whovever that actor was that played the guy with one eye, he's fantastic, perfect for the role.
Very intense imagery and cinematography, almost a "se7en" like feel to it. The shot of the body burning was awesome.
The dialogue was great as well.

It almost felt like a really long trailer for a feature. Good job, man. Nothing but high marks from me.:) :D

[spidey]

thanks man :) i was wonder what you thought. and se7en that makes my heart filled.

[KOVAROVA]

why did you choose to go with so many different color treatments?

[spidey]

Spidey is a god to us. CPU is the best thing in this contest. Bow down to Spidey.

SPidey - please, some director's comments.


A) Where'd you get actors from that were actually good?
(personal note) These guys show the difference between 'behaving' and 'acting'... nothing they do seems fake in any way. Great work!

"both of them are my best friends. we work together and I know how to write characters for them that they would like to play..... I think lol"


B) The opening shots in the rain.. how'd you do that??

"Sophia Martinez our production designer was good rain wrangler. Jut two water hoses. and back lighting it."


C) Congrats on the bitchen dialogue... very quotable.

"Well i Had the idea at first and the dialouge was there but matt and ben ( the two actors) I told them to have free will to modify it to were they felt comfortable saying those lines. I think its important to have both them work on it since they had to say it. and Ben, Ben is awesome."


D) I would greenlight this in a heartbeat ... You could re-do this with a little more budget and really make a classic short film of it ... even a feature maybe ... what are you plans with it??

"i've always wanted to make a longer verison of the in fact i had these character in this one idea but would be able to do it for this competetion. I would like to make a feature if money was there."


My only comment was that the WMV compression wasn't kind to the image... I really like to see some stills or something in full res. Maybe post some breakdowns and hi-res stills for our enjoyment.

"I'll try to get some on line soon :)"

[spidey]

why did you choose to go with so many different color treatments?


Depends where now on the green screen stuff i was going for strange look I want to show a mucky place they eat at and then they work of this overly clean looking place.

If you notice they get what they want from the mucky aweful place but the place that represents it self so perfectly they get nothing.

It's a dirty future.

now i lit the bar scene with greens and the gel I like to call Urine. I wanted it to be Like the go this place that doesnt look great at all a poohole if you will. so that where came from.

Now Ryan bathroom and home light is very dark. we dont really know where he lives.

Barts home life feel more depressing like people are trying to get to him.

Now the industrial park, well it over head lights were orangish red so i try to match it but more yellow green it was easier to look at.

CC was by me I thought some thing would look very interesting this way.

My favorite scene is the one where the first cyborg get it. it was fun to light but were out there and the equipment was freezing. and it was like 11pm.

hope this is helpful.

I'm glad to hear from you :)

[Blaine]

This took me by surprise. I don't know what I was expecting but... I really liked it. For me there was a definite noir feel coupled with desperation and hopelessness. I think you pulled off what you were going for. It almost came off to me as a long trailer for a bigger project, which I might say, I'd like to see. http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/images/smilies/beer.gif Job well done.

[spidey]

I glad you liked it :)

[KOVAROVA]

your play on colors works well. it is gritty and captures the mood of the environments. juxtaposing so many color treatments within a narrative is not easy. and you pull it off.. thumbs up. i have been through 2/3 of the films an you are def in the top 5. it must be great having best friends who are also good actors. best of luck.

[spidey]

Thanks I appericate what you said.

[Karl151k]

Reminded me a lot of Blade Runner (non directors cut version)... That's both a good thing (style) and a bad thing (too much voice over exposition).

[spidey]

:-p haha, I know what you mean.

[Karl151k]

Some overhead shots of the main character shooting himself up reminded me of Requium for a Dream. They looked semi-fisheye. Also, did you speed it up a little. Maybe I just remember it like that because of the jump-cuts. Nice ass on that robot chick, BTW.

[spidey]

haha i never seen requium for a dream. yes i used a fish eye on that shot. i can't remeber if that was sped up... i love jump cuts. haha yes.... butts :-D

[Brandon Rice]

Ok, this was just weird. I felt the story was really, really shallow, and even the twist with him killing the girl was obvious. I also really did not like the amount of cursing. I mean, a small amount isn't horrid, but you have to write dialogue, not just let people swear at each other. So, I'd try to give more thought to the script and dialogue next time, and make every word mean something. I really liked the look, it was very unique. Good job!

[spidey]

thanks I understand not everyone bag.

[spidey]

Jeez. I'm impressed. I'll throw down a more detailed and solid review later but this was iis in my top 5 currently.

Wow. Jeremy; you a skilly bizzle.


I'm glad you liked it! I was hoping to hear from you John. I can't wait to hear you review :)

[disjecta]

Spidey,

Excellent film.

It reminded me a lot of Bladerunner which happens to be one of my all time favorite films. The atmosphere had an acidic and unpleasant feel to it, perfect for the story. The acting was first class and the world you created was very believable.

I thought the horror the character felt as he realized what he did at the end of the film was conveyed well and gave me good closure.

Editing was creative and seamless to me. This is in my top 5 so far.

Good work.

[spidey]

thanks disjecta. I really wanted this world to be be real. I real happy to heard you liked it :)

[krestofre]

The acting was first rate. Dialog was sharp and Tarantino-esq in that kind of hype-fast back and forth bouncing off of each other's conversation sort of way.

The color in the scene where they're talking about the big gun was really distracting to me. It looked kind of like an emboss effect turned all the way up. Aside from that scene I think your color pallet was very well thought-out and well executed.

[spidey]

thanks buddy. Yeah I did so color test before that worked better and they were LOST! so i had to like create close enough to it on the day it was dued. but im glad you enjoyed the acting and enjoyed the film.

[xl70e3]

I liked the gritty, dark atmosphere. Acting was good and story, while leaving me thinking that I only got to see part of it, held my interest. The movie did remind of Blade Runner, which is a great accomplishment in its own right.

Now, I had two concerns with it. First is CC - the scene in the bar and the scene where the guy wakes up from a nightmare looked plain ugly to me. It would have looked tons better if you used real color lighting: lit the bar green, put a blue lamp by the bed etc. (and btw it would have also looked more BR'ish this way).

My other concern is not really a movie's problem. It's just that I don't get why Ryan would work with Bart if the dude is a complete psycho. But that's just me... I could never understand people who continue working for the bosses they hate...

[spidey]

yeah. one idea i heard from my brother was. "god they hate one another but they joke around with one another." I capture alot of relationships like that to him he said. Like they hate then love then hate then they are ok then...... well who knows :-p

[Filmjunkie677]

Spidey,
a few quick questions...

What were your in camera settings?

Did you use any filters and/or a mattebox?

WHat program did you use for color correction?

[spidey]

lets see. I know i change some thing but i usually keep my master ped at around -10 and -6 i love contrast.

I didnt have a mattebox and i had uv filter on.

I used fcp4.5 hd. I used the system in there i love the three way!

[MojoTrancer]

Some of my favorite dialogue so far. The look of those first few scenes reminded me of Mamoru Oshii's Avalon. I was digging it. It's one of the more unique style-wise. When you making Part II? :)

[spidey]

part 2? heheh depends.... haha money i mean. :) I'm asian film lover. I glad to see you liked it. I liked yours as well Mojo!

[Matthew Bennett]

Thanks for responding to my questions this afternoon ...

Did you use Mike Dawson's adapter for this at all?

It's really good directing. The performances are such good examples of people "Behaving" like other people, instead of acting and reading lines. It seems that you really get that.

From the first second on, I was like "This V.O. kinda sucks.." but then I grew to like the delivery, it seems to be sort of purposefully loose and in-character ,, like the VO character doesn't really think too highly of his life or of the story. That aspect really worked for me. And of course the guy with the missing eye is just a bad-ass. The only other really cool character in this whole fest is the "Rodriguez" characater from Briceman's piece. But he's too good for everybody else in that piece so it's kind of awkward.. In yours, everything gels. Good work.

You know .. I bet you could take out your ending and your piece would still work. The success of it is more in the feeling than anything else.

You are one nihilist mother f**ker, keep up the good work. Please show me any scripts you have in the future. I'd love to read them.

I'm lazy so I'll post some other comments after I watch it again...
Later

[Blaine]

I'm kind of amazed at how much Matthew B. Moore looks like a young Peter Stormare in your short.

http://home.rixtele.com/~urdskalla/Skivomslag/Peter_Stormare.jpg

[spidey]

lol. blaine :-p

[spidey]

yes i used the Mike dawson adaptor it was awesome.

I wanted them to fight it out almost in fact onf of those takes we thought matt was mad for real cause he fell and hit his head on the columns. he was steamed but he was cool.

The v.o. I wanted to make you feel him a he thinks he agood but look at his own surroundings. he like a rookie who thinks hes a pro. lives in a shitty dark place and does drugs. i think he played it well both v.o. I just kept saying "can you say it more like edward norton did in fight club?" i like vo's when they are done well.

[PrestonH]

Loved the highly stylized imagery and editing. Acting was top notch and believeable. My only criticism was the excessive language. Always strikes me as lazy acting (or writing?). Nevertheless, a very well executed film. Gotta love android flicks.

[janzie]

that took me by surprise, because i expected a "robot in the living room"-movie and saw one of my favorites...i really dig the editing style (and CC)...first thing that came to my mind was "domino", and i mean that in a good way

i liked the characters, story was cool, but the editing really did it for me

...and i wouldn´t worry about the language-it worked well for me (but i´m european ;-) )

cool flick

[spidey]

Im glad you both liked it

Yes i like the look of domino! I really like tony scott I loved man on fire. :) i know many didint but i did like how he did things.

[janzie]

seems like you combined the two scotts in a pretty good way:

blade runner style with domino-editing...and i think you are right, man on fire was a beauty to watch

[spidey]

:) hmm i didnt think about it that way both scotts i forgot about that :-p

[janzie]

just remebered something:

the slide-and-shoot shot was one of the coolest things i´ve seen recently...did you come up with that ?

[spidey]

i came up with it on the spot with matt. the floor was complete hardwood and old. and it was smoooooth. so i was like lets get it. so we shot it that way. i think it adds to the cockiness to the character. then he finds out he messed up.

[ChrisHurn]

Hi Everyone, Chris (composer) here. I just saw this film, and wow, great stuff! I'm really impressed..great work all round. Loved the directing and editing especially. There were some really great acting moments, love the side chase scene too...awesome work.

I am really happy to have written some music for this film.



-Chris

[Luis Caffesse]

Damn Spidey.
Impressive.
I hate to admit - never having seen any of your work, I didn't think I was going to see something at this level -

I don't mean that as a slam - it was a bad assumption on my part.
I was incredibly pleasantly surprised.

Damn good work.

[CallaghanFilms]

Spidey...

There are twenty-six letter keys on my keyboard...
there is also a space bar and an enter button.
I am fumbling around right now, trying to find the right combination of keystrokes to form a written message that would, in turn, convey even a fraction of the respect that I have for you right now.

I just saw your film.
Holy poo poo, my man.
I am a writer who is now at a loss for words.

You just shot a hole in one IMO.
Technically everything clicked (hell, I didn't even notice most of the shots themselves.)
You really created a fascinating world and brought it to life.

As of right now, you are my favorite to win.

:beer:Cheers on an incredible job

[angrynerdrock07]

Too many comments. I'm getting lazy at this point as I am trying to give comments/criticism on all the shorts, so forgive me if I repeat a lot of things that have already been mentioned.

I thought this was a really slick, stylized piece. Reminded me of Darren Aronofsky's work. Loved the constant variations in color tinting. I also really liked the makeup work on Bart. Gave the character a lot of depth. Also helped that he was an awesome actor.

I guess my only real criticism was that it was a really highly compressed WMV. Would like to see it again at a better quality.

[spidey]

Damn Spidey.
Impressive.
I hate to admit - never having seen any of your work, I didn't think I was going to see something at this level -

I don't mean that as a slam - it was a bad assumption on my part.
I was incredibly pleasantly surprised.

Damn good work.


don't worry! It's been part of my life for a while. i dunno if its the age thing or what. and if you saw me in person i look like im 15. So i don't know. But i'm glad you liked it. :)

[spidey]

Spidey...

There are twenty-six letter keys on my keyboard...
there is also a space bar and an enter button.
I am fumbling around right now, trying to find the right combination of keystrokes to form a written message that would, in turn, convey even a fraction of the respect that I have for you right now.

I just saw your film.
Holy poo poo, my man.
I am a writer who is now at a loss for words.

You just shot a hole in one IMO.
Technically everything clicked (hell, I didn't even notice most of the shots themselves.)
You really created a fascinating world and brought it to life.

As of right now, you are my favorite to win.

:beer:Cheers on an incredible job

Hey Callaghan! I appericated those kind words. You being at a lost of words makes me lost for words. I hope to keep doing that to you in later projects. :)

[spidey]

Too many comments. I'm getting lazy at this point as I am trying to give comments/criticism on all the shorts, so forgive me if I repeat a lot of things that have already been mentioned.

I thought this was a really slick, stylized piece. Reminded me of Darren Aronofsky's work. Loved the constant variations in color tinting. I also really liked the makeup work on Bart. Gave the character a lot of depth. Also helped that he was an awesome actor.

I guess my only real criticism was that it was a really highly compressed WMV. Would like to see it again at a better quality.


Hey Angrynerdrock07, I understand commenting and watching alot of films. whooo- I'm almost done myself. You're the second to mention Darren Aronofsky.

Also The make up design was a personal thing I always wanted to do. I drew it out. then bought all the make up needed then gave it to my Make-up Artist, Joe Lissi, and he tested it out for a while then got it right.

A funny thing about make was Ben Hated contacts. I had to teach him how to wear them. eventually he got used to putting them in and he wore them all day so he could used to be before he had make up on him. he had to deal with DOP issues but I'm glad i was trying to get him used to the one eye vision for the role ahead of time instead of on the day.

Yes ben is awesome.

[CallaghanFilms]

seems like you combined the two scotts in a pretty good way...It was the wee small hours of the morning, and I forgot to concur with janzie in my review.

Janzie...well said!

That is exactly what Spidey did...he drew inspiration from both members of the Brothers Scott.

[Ought2bCommitted]

Hey Jeremy!

Just started watching the shorts. Watched yours first. Overall, very nice job. Oddly, it was exactly what I expected from you...which is good!

The two biggest drawbacks for me were:
1) lack of consitency in color correction. It lessened my believability in the world you created because it didn't have a specific look for each region or a look in general to unify it.
2) A little shoddy on the acting. A tad bit been there, done that in their deliveries and choices.

I LOVED the world you created. I believed it totally. The only thing that kept pulling me out of if was the lask of consistency as I said above. I felt like it was a self-contained piece, which is good. Ended nicely, very nicely.

Overall, I think you did a great job. Congrats! Nice movie!

Robert

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

ok this kicked ass

it really created a believable, consistant, dark, scary, evocative world that seemd ... well ... real!

And that's a gigantic accomplishment at any level but on what was presumably a shoe string budget, even more so.

I loved the look and feel of this and the acting was just top notch.

I think it should be recognized that not only did you do an above par job, you picked something very difficult to pull off. It's one thing to create a consistent believable world that's cheezy and fun, but to do one that is rooted so much in the darker side of the id (and again with little resources) well its just plain harder -- it demands an authenticity and unflinching honesty both behind an infront of the camer -- in otherwords, something like NARC requires a little more digging than say Men in Black -- so when comparing films in this "competition" I just think it should be pointed out that not only is this in my top very few films, its a three pointer as a opposed to a layup. Very impressive.

Now forget all that -- I just like watchiing it. The missing eye and scar were a great detail. Good foils in the hard seasoned older cop and younger careless cop. Nice flow, building tension, great composition.

Only criticisms are small. Comb through the gray in the actors hair so it looks like it goes to the roots. The only CC that bothered me was in the chinese restaurant and it could be the compression -- there were hard levels in the diffusion - instea of fading from white to sepia to black seemlessly the gradation had hard edges like looking at a topographical map - but you pulled off a Blade Runner feel -- damn, lastly then end complication seemed a little rushed - I know that a film wants to stay slightly ahead of the audience, but that arose and was over so quickly that it felt abrupt, which pointed out that the complication or twist wasn't overly sophisticated -- not a big deal and not sure if even problematic (the twist or plot complication at end), just the abaruptness of its introduction and resolution at the end of the film made it seem a little less fullfilling than the rest of the film -- it still worked -- not saying this was one of those movies that just ends and you're like ... ok why did I watch that - what was the event - that structure felt complete here (the event) just a tad rushed.

Ok so I'me verbose and it might seem like those criticisms are a big deal to me but they are not -- its a kickass film , and those were the only nits I could pick.

Q: where can I see more of your stuff - do you have stuff online or DVD I can order?

Jack.

[Steve Strickland]

Spidey, you did an amazing job on this. Nice gritty feel. Nothing I can say that wouldn't echo what's already been said. You should be proud of this one. I was a blast to watch.

[Matthew B. Moore]

Ok, this was just weird. I felt the story was really, really shallow, and even the twist with him killing the girl was obvious. I also really did not like the amount of cursing. I mean, a small amount isn't horrid, but you have to write dialogue, not just let people swear at each other. So, I'd try to give more thought to the script and dialogue next time, and make every word mean something. I really liked the look, it was very unique. Good job!

You should have heard the orginal version. It wasn't like we really wanted it to get that raw, it just sort of developed that way. The story kinds of lends itself to it.

We even started a thread on the rating issue because of our concern of the language.

[Matthew B. Moore]

I'm kind of amazed at how much Matthew B. Moore looks like a young Peter Stormare in your short.

http://home.rixtele.com/~urdskalla/Skivomslag/Peter_Stormare.jpg


You are freaking me out.

[sean90291]

Well done. One of the top two shorts in the fest. A more challenging short than most, but you really rose to those challenges: performances were authentic and interesting, great shots and well edited. A real story. And visually innovative. Congrats.

[Beat Takeshi]

Im blinded by the silicon implant frames!!!
I loved the color changes but the style changes from clear to almost cartooned bothered me. It makes it feel like you are missing something you might want to see in the background or something. The cast was well done I thought. Very natural dialog but I hated the amount of Voice ever. Just a tad here and there would have worked better I think. I couldnt hear some of it either. I really liked the skid he did right before he shot her. That edit was tight. The ending failed for me I thought. Maybe if he just sat up and said "oh sh!t, the bullet in her head", and then the line "did I tell you we are fcked" or what ever it was might be a little stronger? Just a thought.
Good job on this dude, I enjoyed it.

[spidey]

Hey Jeremy!

Just started watching the shorts. Watched yours first. Overall, very nice job. Oddly, it was exactly what I expected from you...which is good!

The two biggest drawbacks for me were:
1) lack of consitency in color correction. It lessened my believability in the world you created because it didn't have a specific look for each region or a look in general to unify it.
2) A little shoddy on the acting. A tad bit been there, done that in their deliveries and choices.

I LOVED the world you created. I believed it totally. The only thing that kept pulling me out of if was the lask of consistency as I said above. I felt like it was a self-contained piece, which is good. Ended nicely, very nicely.

Overall, I think you did a great job. Congrats! Nice movie!

Robert

thanks man glad to hear you enjoyed it.

[spidey]

Well done. One of the top two shorts in the fest. A more challenging short than most, but you really rose to those challenges: performances were authentic and interesting, great shots and well edited. A real story. And visually innovative. Congrats.


thanks I'm glad it was entertaining.

[spidey]

images are uploaded on first page :)

[spidey]

Im blinded by the silicon implant frames!!!
I loved the color changes but the style changes from clear to almost cartooned bothered me. It makes it feel like you are missing something you might want to see in the background or something. The cast was well done I thought. Very natural dialog but I hated the amount of Voice ever. Just a tad here and there would have worked better I think. I couldnt hear some of it either. I really liked the skid he did right before he shot her. That edit was tight. The ending failed for me I thought. Maybe if he just sat up and said "oh sh!t, the bullet in her head", and then the line "did I tell you we are fcked" or what ever it was might be a little stronger? Just a thought.
Good job on this dude, I enjoyed it.


im happy you liked it.

and the skid shot haha :-p

[darkfader]

Best film I have seen yet. I f#$@in Love it. Very Blade Runner meets Cyber Punk. Seriously cool. Good blood work too

Darkfader

[spidey]

thanks man!

[darkfader]

Damn,

I wish you lived by Chicago because I would love to work with you. So far in my book I think your film and editing takes the cake. The character creation was well thought and your actors were solid. Take a look at our peice "the upload" and tell me what you think? Oh and how did you guys do that cool computer screen where the computer screens rotate around that dude.

Darkfader

[Dahopafilms]

Spidey,

Great short. Edgy (I hate that word, but using it in relation to your entry redeems it somewhat). I wanted more.

Great script - beginning, middle and end.

Great relationship between actors (love/hate dynamic, all that jazz).

Really, really good.

Thanks for letting us see it.

Now go make more (please).

[ZFarms Productions]

i just watched your film spidey. i was blown away by it. i really liked it. loved the way it was shot and the editing and the acting. solid all around. one of my favs!

[spidey]

Damn,

I wish you lived by Chicago because I would love to work with you. So far in my book I think your film and editing takes the cake. The character creation was well thought and your actors were solid. Take a look at our peice "the upload" and tell me what you think? Oh and how did you guys do that cool computer screen where the computer screens rotate around that dude.

Darkfader


sure ill take a look (im a little under the weather toda) but i'll watch :)

The computer screen effect was designed with me and the effects guy. Took a while to get it right but was pretty good :)

[spidey]

Spidey,

Great short. Edgy (I hate that word, but using it in relation to your entry redeems it somewhat). I wanted more.

Great script - beginning, middle and end.

Great relationship between actors (love/hate dynamic, all that jazz).

Really, really good.

Thanks for letting us see it.

Now go make more (please).

im really happy you enjoyed it. I love the character, and BART! come on hes cool. I want to make more with him . :)

[spidey]

i just watched your film spidey. i was blown away by it. i really liked it. loved the way it was shot and the editing and the acting. solid all around. one of my favs!


haha when i see your icon i just can't help but think im talking too SS. I'm happy you got to view it and you enjoyed it and one your favs :).

[BrianV]

Again, a unique look, and for that it stands out for not being "standard."

*thumbs up'd*

[spidey]

yea i hope it was visaully interesting to watch. thanks :)

[spidey]

updated first post with specs.

[Luis Caffesse]

don't worry! It's been part of my life for a while. i dunno if its the age thing or what. and if you saw me in person i look like im 15. So i don't know. But i'm glad you liked it. :)

Probably the age thing for me, and the stuff you post, usually a lot of joking around
(like me sometimes)
- I guess I have to get used to the youngsters whipping me talent-wise.

Like I said - it was a bad assumption on my part.
I just never expected the same guy that gave me the phrase "Butt Water" came out of the gates swinging like that....You've got my respect.
Nice work.


(and by the way - thanks, now you've got my wife saying 'butt water' everytime she sees something crappy on TV - "damn, that show looks like butt water!")

Hahahah
http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/images/smilies/thumbsup.gif

[spidey]

lol i forgot all about the butt water. lol your wife use it alot :-p?

[WilderWorks]

I like your tone, I like the way the VO interplays with the dialogue. I enjoy most Sci-Fi that makes the world feel lived in, taken for granted, a place where regular, sometimes sub-regular, guys live. It becomes about how humans adapt to wild changes, and yet remain just as messed up as ever.

Now and then, the actors had a bit too much "glow" around them, I assume from background replacement, and that damaged the reality you'd established. Also, the V.O. sounded quite tinny and hallow compared to the other dialogue, almost as though it were recorded on a computer desktop microphone. (I mention this because I did that, and it went badly).

My largest critique, however, would be that the movie doesn't establish its dilemna until it's almost over. The actual problem happens, is solved, and then UN-solved, in less than the last third. What happens is great, but it doesn't get fair chance to happen. Too much time is spent on setting up the world, which would be better set up DURING the dilemna. It would be much more exciting to have the two leads fight over an off-color comment about an ex-wife WHILE going to kill the metal hooker to cover up a crime.

Great movie, just needs a little restructuring to make it really compelling. Fun characters. I love seeing a filmmaker having fun onscreen. It's infectious. :)

[Matthew Bennett]

This would be a really good short bit of a longer 'compilation' movie .. like a 'Heavy Metal' type thing, where you had numerous short stories about the future.

That's the way I see this film fitting in the best.

Spidey, any plans for a longer script? It would interesting to see.

You should seriously re-edit this thing a bit. Just tool around with and see what other places it might go, just to see. You never know what you could come up with.

You could win... what will do with the camera?? (jarred's DVX)

[Luis Caffesse]

lol i forgot all about the butt water. lol your wife use it alot :-p?

She uses it enough for me to be able to say 'hey, remember the "butt water" guy? You gotta check out his Sci Fi short"

She thought it was cool too.
Now she knows your name - so I think you won't be called "the butt water guy" anymore.
http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/images/smilies/thumbsup.gif

[spidey]

This would be a really good short bit of a longer 'compilation' movie .. like a 'Heavy Metal' type thing, where you had numerous short stories about the future.

That's the way I see this film fitting in the best.

Spidey, any plans for a longer script? It would interesting to see.

You should seriously re-edit this thing a bit. Just tool around with and see what other places it might go, just to see. You never know what you could come up with.

You could win... what will do with the camera?? (jarred's DVX)


GAh if i won the camera im not sure what i do.

I have an Idea for a longer script but only a treatment.

I will reedit this after a little RnR.

I would like to do a feature film but i'm strapped for cash. :-p.

[spidey]

She uses it enough for me to be able to say 'hey, remember the "butt water" guy? You gotta check out his Sci Fi short"

She thought it was cool too.
Now she knows your name - so I think you won't be called "the butt water guy" anymore.
http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/images/smilies/thumbsup.gif


Yay! I'm glad she didnt find it butt watery!

[spidey]

More pictures posted on the the front pages have to scrool to see them all. I put one of the Chinese Resteraunt one up and it looks be on dvd than wmv.

[hienben]

Awsome! My favourite so far by a long, long way. Oustanding in every area. The CC worked fine for me. The best thing about it was the two main actors and the beleivable dialogue, really brought the film to life and sucked me into their world. One example was when the guy said something like 'do you know any human that could have done this?' very natural and well executed. Stunning!

[Matthew B. Moore]

Best film I have seen yet. I f#$@in Love it. Very Blade Runner meets Cyber Punk. Seriously cool. Good blood work too

Darkfader

That's our man Joe Lisi III kicking ass in the make-up department. It was his first show
as head make-up artist. I think he did a fantastic job.

[Matthew B. Moore]

Some overhead shots of the main character shooting himself up reminded me of Requium for a Dream. They looked semi-fisheye. Also, did you speed it up a little. Maybe I just remember it like that because of the jump-cuts. Nice ass on that robot chick, BTW.

I wasn't shooting up, I was doing NOKE. Like it matters. I can still never show my mother this film.

"Why can't you ever make anything nice?" she always says.

[THX-1138]

It's hard not to like this one.

Very creative writing and solid acting. Interesting and effective CCing as well.

I love that it begs you to watch several times.

Something that struck me...

Title sequence was too quick and confusing. Could'nt read all the names and could'nt figure out the title was CPU ....it just went away too quick for me. It was a beautiful sequence though and I loved the numbers 10101010101010101010!

and the language....tisk tisk... Their has to be a better way to tell this without so much swearing. Just Kidding...I know you watched mine already.

Definately one of the top!

Kip Kubin

[lookatmeimbender]

Hi I just joined, I trying watch all the movies and I've seen most. This one was so cool. Everything seemed to stick and was simply beautiful. I like that you have all the elements of an adventure drama film. Kept me entertained. I would like to see more. Make more movies, I want the whole collection. Top of my list. I hope to be able to get to all the movies to vote.

[spidey]

Awsome! My favourite so far by a long, long way. Oustanding in every area. The CC worked fine for me. The best thing about it was the two main actors and the beleivable dialogue, really brought the film to life and sucked me into their world. One example was when the guy said something like 'do you know any human that could have done this?' very natural and well executed. Stunning!

I'm really glad you love every bit of it!

[spidey]

It's hard not to like this one.

Very creative writing and solid acting. Interesting and effective CCing as well.

I love that it begs you to watch several times.

Something that struck me...

Title sequence was too quick and confusing. Could'nt read all the names and could'nt figure out the title was CPU ....it just went away too quick for me. It was a beautiful sequence though and I loved the numbers 10101010101010101010!

and the language....tisk tisk... Their has to be a better way to tell this without so much swearing. Just Kidding...I know you watched mine already.

Definately one of the top!

Kip Kubin


Haha Well I'll try to slow it down next time :-p haha I'm glad the swearing didn;t bother you so much.

[spidey]

I wasn't shooting up, I was doing NOKE. Like it matters. I can still never show my mother this film.

"Why can't you ever make anything nice?" she always says.


Yeah i showed my parents last night dad said pretty damn good and mom said not for grandma or anyone I know...

LOL

[spidey]

Hi I just joined, I trying watch all the movies and I've seen most. This one was so cool. Everything seemed to stick and was simply beautiful. I like that you have all the elements of an adventure drama film. Kept me entertained. I would like to see more. Make more movies, I want the whole collection. Top of my list. I hope to be able to get to all the movies to vote.


sweet man thanks alot for your support. and welcome!

[spidey]

Updateed with more specs and Script. you'll see the differences and lack of narration. enjoy!

[EditPhish]

I might be in the minority here, so take my criticisms for what they're worth ;)

I liked your use of color, but at times it really felt forced, gimmicy or like you were covering imperfections. The overall gritty look was good, but the color just went overboard for me at times.

You seemed to have some sound issues... not a lot, but at times the dialogue of the characters was hard to hear. Especially right in the middle (at about 3:25).

Some of the editing felt a bit awkward... and again, like you were covering up for lack of something else (maybe not enough coverage?).

Framing and cinematography were mostly good, though there were spots I couldn't quite tell if the shot being out of focus was intentional.

You did a good job with locations and practical effects. Some of the greenscreen and CGI (spaceship near 5:18) weren't so hot.

I didn't really feel drawn into the STORY... it kinda just went along for me. I didnt' feel it was boring, but I didn't really get into it either and I can't exactly put my finger on why. I also hated the end... it just felt cut-off to me, like you ran out of time.

Thanks for sharing your film -- it was visually different than everything else in the fest and while I didn't get into it all that much, it was intesting to look at the things you did to bring the whole thing to a completed piece.

[spidey]

well its not everyones movie. glad you watched it.

[EJ Pennypacker]

I LOVE Bladerunner. And so far, this is the film that comes close to that gritty look. Well done for that.

EJ

[spidey]

thank you!

[Norm Sanders]

Spidey, I'm more than amazed. This has become an INSANELY tight contest, with all of the top entries (in my book) being the best in their game on different levels.

Yours had a VERY dark, Sin City feel to it. Yours and jdanstan's also had very similar vibes, except his was more light hearted comic book, and yours was dark graphic novel.

The make up FX were beautiful ... the best in the fest, bar none. Too bad there's not an award for it ... you'd take the cake, in my opinion.

The cinematography was great, lighting, story, dialogue, acting, etc. I'm sure if I really looked I could try & nit pick this thing to death ... like any movie, if you look hard enough you can find SOMETHING to gripe about. But nothing stands out to me to comment on.

One of my favorites ... and the funny thing is, I'm getting REAL sick of saying that ... meaning there have been at least 7-10 films I want to call my favorites, all completley different in their own way.

Excellent, excellent job. Didn't know you much, so there was nothing to tell me I didn't think you could do this, but wow ... I had no idea you could do this.

So are you in Hong Kong or NC? Where'd you film?

[Norm Sanders]

Okay, I just saw a post above that questioned focus/framing a little. Now that I think of it, that probably popped into my mind as well, but this was such a messy, gritty film (in a good, unique way), that it almost felt purposeful and artistic.

[spidey]

Hey thanks man :-p

I surprised there wasnt many films with pratical SFX.

I'm in North Carolina at the moment. Eden.NC.

I'm really pleased you liked this film. I hope the best for your as well :) sorry if I havent gotten around to reviewing it. Been under the weather.

Hope to hear more from you and others :)

[spidey]

You did a good job with locations and practical effects. Some of the greenscreen and CGI (spaceship near 5:18) weren't so hot.


That wasnt CGI it was a Real model. :-p I dont have the time or the abliity plus I like old school model work. That was my first time shooting models I hope to be able to do this later. I'll submit photos of the model later tomorrow.

[spidey]

Forgot to say Easter Egg is in the movie related to DVX.

[ChrisHurn]

No comments on the score yet? :P Actually it's a little hard to hear, because of the heavy dialogue/sound, so I'll post a track for anyone who is interested. I'll get the others uploaded too, soon.

http://chrishurn.com/Into the darkness.mp3

This is the track for the final sequence in the film.

-Chris

[Slimothy]

Wow. I just got to this one tonite. It is my new favorite. Great job. There were some technical issues (looked like some dirt on the lens during some of the EXT. scenes) but I hardly cared. One of the few films I wish was a feature.

[spidey]

Wow. I just got to this one tonite. It is my new favorite. Great job. There were some technical issues (looked like some dirt on the lens during some of the EXT. scenes) but I hardly cared. One of the few films I wish was a feature.


Your new favorite!!! THANK YOU :)

[spidey]

No comments on the score yet? :P Actually it's a little hard to hear, because of the heavy dialogue/sound, so I'll post a track for anyone who is interested. I'll get the others uploaded too, soon.

http://chrishurn.com/Into the darkness.mp3

This is the track for the final sequence in the film.

-Chris

Chris,
If you notice the sound track is there it the underlining force. drving it. Some projects scores sometimes get in the way of the dialogue i didnt want that :)

[Matthew B. Moore]

[QUOTE=THX-1138]It's hard not to like this one.

Very creative writing and solid acting. Interesting and effective CCing as well.

I love that it begs you to watch several times.

Something that struck me...

Title sequence was too quick and confusing. Could'nt read all the names and could'nt figure out the title was CPU ....it just went away too quick for me. It was a beautiful sequence though and I loved the numbers 10101010101010101010!

and the language....tisk tisk... Their has to be a better way to tell this without so much swearing. Just Kidding...I know you watched mine already.

Definately one of the top!

I wish we could have done more with the titles, but after widdling time out of the thing for 3 weeks (trying to get it from 11min down to 6) we had to start slicing. The credits seem the most logical one to take the fall. Spidey is real big on creative credits, so it was a bit of a battle.

[spidey]

Well I wanted to have something interesting visually with the titles i know they go by fast but its not tooooo bad. But i will slow it down later. Yes I wanted to make interesting titles. :-p

[Matthew B. Moore]

Well I wanted to have something interesting visually with the titles i know they go by fast but its not tooooo bad. But i will slow it down later. Yes I wanted to make interesting titles. :-p
Stop yapping on the internet and get your ass to work.

[spidey]

Heres some photos of the model!
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model1.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model2.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model3.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model4.jpg

[spidey]

continued
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model5.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model6.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/model7.jpg

[thartley]

This has to be one of the best stories so far for me. I loved it. The acting was superb, the main guys played off each other really really well. I liked the editing style alot, too. Really fit the telling of this story.

Score...wonderful again! I hate you all! :p

I dont know what you did exactly to make this pop, visually, so well for me. If it was in camera settings, your lighting, cc in post....whatever, it worked brilliantly for me.

Great job! Loved it!

[spidey]

I'm glad you found it an enjoyable story :) thank you for your support.

[spidey]

BTS: How we did musical recording for the Vocals in the Chinese Resteraunt we had a blast. Coming from Asian and enjoy everything in that culture I though I wanted that theme to be in my movie.

Ross knows no Asian Languages, But he gave it his best shot. but it underlays well under the movie. enjoy!

INSIDE THE STUDIO RECORDINGS (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/rossvocals.mov)

[spidey]

Ok this is some test shot with the model... the movie... how it could have been.

YOU have to see this...

CPU what it could have been! (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/modelfly.mov)
Enjoy!

[Nobody356]

You own me! and make me feel absolutely horrible about what I can do with the camera(I'm on the brink f tears).....and I mean that in the best way possible!

This really rocked and I can't wait to see anything else you've done. I think most anything I say now would be repeating something someone else has said, but I just felt I needed to tell you how impressive I found this to be. I'm really jealous of your skills haha.

Only thing I wasnt crazy about was that the first real dialogue scene seemed like it was partially greenscreened, and if it wasnt...the edges looked funky. But thats my only real complaint

Congrats on the awesome movie

[spidey]

appericiate those kind words. I just watched a bunch of films study films and what look the best. OH and had a good teacher (matt.)

But i painted and drew alot used to do comic books 3 years ago. I still do work like that on the side I guess i've just had perspective and rules of third and all that jazz like a given. if camer work is a problem study films and story board its a pretty good excercise.

[macgregor]

Forget Robert Rodriguez! Spidey is here!

[spidey]

Thanks Macgregor! :)

[spidey]

Here's images of the gun THE BETTY! You may notice young Bart in the stills :)
Enjoy

http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/gunstills1.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/gunstills2.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/gunstills3.jpg

[spidey]

Continued.
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/gunstills4.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/gunstills5.jpg

[Matthew B. Moore]

Our man, Adam Ross on the gun constuction. It started out as a riot gun until I was swinging it around and busted it. It's actually a mini riot gun.

[spidey]

Yeah it looked like this originally till matt broke it.
http://upload.netook.com/2005/04/17252/82711.20050723220115720.jpg

[Joey Render]

[QUOTE=THX-1138]It's hard not to like this one.

Very creative writing and solid acting. Interesting and effective CCing as well.

I love that it begs you to watch several times.

Something that struck me...

Title sequence was too quick and confusing. Could'nt read all the names and could'nt figure out the title was CPU ....it just went away too quick for me. It was a beautiful sequence though and I loved the numbers 10101010101010101010!

and the language....tisk tisk... Their has to be a better way to tell this without so much swearing. Just Kidding...I know you watched mine already.

Definately one of the top!

I wish we could have done more with the titles, but after widdling time out of the thing for 3 weeks (trying to get it from 11min down to 6) we had to start slicing. The credits seem the most logical one to take the fall. Spidey is real big on creative credits, so it was a bit of a battle.
The titles were great, and so was that scene with the floating monitors, I wonder who did them, haha. Good job Spidey, and thanks for letting me create material to put on my demo reel.

[Brandon Rice]

Upon watching again I feel I should submit another review. I thought the style was cool (gritty, flashy), but I could never take the dialogue or story seriously. It was written almost too natural. Could just be me. I did like your CC, but felt the subjects were too washed out sometimes. This is for sure a low level story about the dark side of life. It depicts that very well, and that is an accomplishment in and of itself. I paid a closer attention to the score and sound mix this time too and you did a good job in both respects. The ending was pretty abrupt for me, but given 6 min. I understand. Overall it's a well done piece. I don't enjoy it when I watch it, but I respect the skill and talent you have in creating it. Well done.

[spidey]

It was written almost too natural.


Isn't that a good thing?:)???

[Brandon Rice]

Isn't that a good thing?:)???

Yeah... most of the time that's true... but I couldn't take the character's seriously (which I felt I should have).

[spidey]

Sorry tried our best, Can't please them all.

[Brandon Rice]

Sorry tried our best, Can't please them all.

I know you did your best, and it shows. Like I said I really respect your talent as a filmmaker, and respect this film in many aspects of it! Good work!

[Captain KickAss]

I don't know if anyone else on this forum is or was a GWAR fan, but everytime I watch this film, the protag's voice over reminds me of the song "Obliteration of Flab Quarv 7."

But maybe that's just me.

[spidey]

Thanks I guess thats good :-p

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

Spidey -- anyone PM you on your easter eggs yet?

the two in Odd Squad have been spottedhttp://www.dvxuser.com/V6/images/smilies/thumbup.gif

[spidey]

not yet :-p

[Matthew B. Moore]

No comments on the score yet? :P Actually it's a little hard to hear, because of the heavy dialogue/sound, so I'll post a track for anyone who is interested. I'll get the others uploaded too, soon.

http://chrishurn.com/Into the darkness.mp3

This is the track for the final sequence in the film.

-Chris
Chris,
I never had the chance to tell you good I thought your score was. I was really impressed when Spidey brought it to the office. Sorry we had to chop it all up.

Thanks

[spidey]

poster now available NOW!

http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/cpuposterweb.jpg

[Filmjunkie677]

Sweet poster, man.

Definitely capture the feel of the film.

Hook me up with one!

[spidey]

haha I will when I hook myself up.

[Kaz]

Nice!

[Kholi]

Cool short, Spidey. You made good use of what you had and what you didn't. I watched it all the way through.

[spidey]

glad you watch it.

[ChrisHurn]

Chris,
I never had the chance to tell you good I thought your score was. I was really impressed when Spidey brought it to the office. Sorry we had to chop it all up.

Thanks

Thanks! Great work on the film...you should be really proud. No, no problem at all about it - if the music was any louder it would be overpowering, it was well mixed. :) I would love to collaborate with you guys on another project.

Awesome poster! (erm, add me to the 'hook us up with a poster' list lol..thats awesome)

-Chris

[Daniel Skubal]

Hey man! Just got a chance to see yours!

I loved it! I think your only weakness was the monologue being too low. What type of mic did you use?

Everything else was top notch, the story, the atmosphere, the cinematography... it was all great!

I don't know if this has been asked already, but what was the ballpark figure of your budget? It looks like you went all out for this piece.

Excellent work man! I enjoyed this one a lot

[spidey]

Thanks! Great work on the film...you should be really proud. No, no problem at all about it - if the music was any louder it would be overpowering, it was well mixed. :) I would love to collaborate with you guys on another project.

Awesome poster! (erm, add me to the 'hook us up with a poster' list lol..thats awesome)

-Chris


Haha thanks man,

I'll get a poster to you once the the contest is over and i can kind a place to print them.

[spidey]

Hey man! Just got a chance to see yours!

I loved it! I think your only weakness was the monologue being too low. What type of mic did you use?

Everything else was top notch, the story, the atmosphere, the cinematography... it was all great!

I don't know if this has been asked already, but what was the ballpark figure of your budget? It looks like you went all out for this piece.

Excellent work man! I enjoyed this one a lot


we uses a 416 mic. we smothered matt with foam and sounbd blankets and i played back the movie on the computer.


THe ball park figure for the movie was 300 dollars mostly on food. then after that was make up and wardrobe

[Matthew B. Moore]

Spidey...my son...you forgot the gas, the time, the wardrobe, the make-up, the guns, and at least a meal or 2. Oh, and lets not forget all those visits to the Buscuitville.

$300.00 Ha! Ha! I say, "Ha"!

[Daniel Skubal]

we uses a 416 mic. we smothered matt with foam and sounbd blankets and i played back the movie on the computer.


THe ball park figure for the movie was 300 dollars mostly on food. then after that was make up and wardrobe

Hahaha That's how I've done my VO's before... mobile recording studio :-p

[spidey]

Spidey...my son...you forgot the gas, the time, the wardrobe, the make-up, the guns, and at least a meal or 2. Oh, and lets not forget all those visits to the Buscuitville.

$300.00 Ha! Ha! I say, "Ha"!

like I said The ball park figure for the movie was 300 dollars mostly on food. then after that was make up and wardrobe

I mentioned all those. the guns we had or borrowed, and biscuitville is outside cost during post. thats different. :-p

[Matthew B. Moore]

like I said The ball park figure for the movie was 300 dollars mostly on food. then after that was make up and wardrobe

I mentioned all those. the guns we had or borrowed, and biscuitville is outside cost during post. thats different. :-p

Don't you go gettin' gully with me.

[spidey]

Hahaha That's how I've done my VO's before... mobile recording studio :-p


well it gets the job done. :)

[spidey]

Spiderman,

This flatout rocked and has just taken over the NUMBER ONE postion as my favorite.

Your style is insane, the story twisted and dark... Right up my alley.
Whovever that actor was that played the guy with one eye, he's fantastic, perfect for the role.
Very intense imagery and cinematography, almost a "se7en" like feel to it. The shot of the body burning was awesome.
The dialogue was great as well.

It almost felt like a really long trailer for a feature. Good job, man. Nothing but high marks from me.:) :D


You and other have mention imagery simularities to David Fincher Ridley Scott and Tony Scott. I actually did draw on those as inspriations.

David Fincher: (se7en) Fincher is my favorite american director. I love all his films (I enjoyed panic room but it not something would watch again and again.) His compsitions and story line are what i enjoy about his movies.

Ridley Scott: (Alien, Blade Runner) I didnt even watch Blade runner before i started shoot but I watched all the Aliens films. I was studying his composition and his pacing. Now i knew i could do tthat in 6 mins but i study his approached to acting and justy let it flowed. If i saw somethign was aproblem I stepped in to tell them.

Tony Scott: (Man on Fire and Domino) The visual style and editing was awesome and the use of color. I loved MOF.

My other influences were Chan Wook Park (OLDBOY, Sympathy for mr. Vengence and JSA) the structure the art to film, imagery, cinematography and character development was awesome. He's my favorite director.

Those are my major influences.

[Filmjunkie677]

Have you seen the Fincher's directors cut of Alien 3 that is in the box set? That is awesome and so much better then the theatrical version.

[spidey]

YUP thats what what i meant by I just watched them all recently. man it was different but it was better. I still like the theatrrical cut verison too. i dunno his visuals do it for me.

[manglerBMX]

i'm still pissed you havent seen reqiuem for a dream. i'm gonna bring it up to the office for you to peep.

[spidey]

lol i just saw a spoof on it on drawn together. but yeah i need to see it.

[John C Lyons]

Oh man! Seriously this is one of those kind of movies that ticks me off in a way. This is SO my style of movie but then there's a couple aspects to it that turn me off to it overall and taint my high praise. But you deserve high praise for your efforts here.

Visuals. Top Notch. What the hell else can I say? I sure everyone is raving about it here and I am not the first poster by far, so I will just say I loved it! Very "Domino" to me, and I LOVE that. Great lighting, great work with the camera. Can't say enough. It helpde bring me into that world and it felt real. Great work on most of the effects as well!

I think one of the leads (scarface we'll call him) did a great job, the other I felt had a lot to match up to and he didn't pull it off. I also felt his voiceover was weak which leads to ... audio. The audio was all over the place here. One second I could hear what someone was saying, the next I had to reach over to the volume knob, and then it got loud again. Really inconsistent. This didn't hurt you too too much, and I am sure you just ran out of time for submitting to the movie and you'll be able to fix it rather easily.

Also one of my main beefs, I know its cool to have swearing in a gritty, dark movie. But this just seemed like swearing for the sake of it, and I didn't buy it. There isn't a swearing award here but you would have won, hands down. Even tough guys have more to say than "f*ck". I'm not a prude, I just like hearing characters convey their feelings and for me this style of dialogue is a cheap way out of any real creativity. This was the weakest aspect of your film to me.

So........ you're a visual genius. But a visual genius who needs more practice with audio and screenwriting, and hey, that ain't too shabby! Nice work man! Tony Scott would be proud, we just gotta get you a hand crank!

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

I must be a friggin sailor, cuz I never even thought twice about the fucking laguage, lol

[spidey]

yeah people seem to be a little put off by it. but i say;

Please see Pulp Fiction. :-p :) no one seems to mind cursing in that.

[Ramon Boutviseth]

Spidey,

I watched this last week, I remember alot of colors, nice comps, and unforgettable characters! I can tell by watching your flick you guys had fun making it. There are are a few things.. audio are weak on some parts and I remember not being able to follow the story. But man, CPU is definetly a visual spectacle.. you got skillz.

[spidey]

thank you, hiro.

[John C Lyons]

couple more comments after reading through everyone's posts:

i am all for swearing when its believeable/real. tarantino is believeable to me in that regards. i talk like he writes and so do my friends. but i think you hit the nail on the head for me when you said you let the actors run with the dialogue. i feel you should have tightened up a bit as a director because it shows lack of understanding and/or comprehension on the actors as far as the dialogue/script. when i said i see this as a weakness i didnt mean because its offensive (i dont offend easy) i mean it hurts your show because it brings it down a huge level because of the seemingly lack of writing.

another style similarity i noticed someone else mention was "avalon"! right on! especially during the food scene towards the beginning, very nice there (see that movie if you havent). was the restaurant a floating style one like in "fifth element"? i noticed the background moving independently of the foreground, just wondering if maybe you cut out some sky-food vehicle scene or something to meet time.

SFX-wise, when they are typing on the laptop, i didnt understand the effect you were going for there with the screen as its obviously a laptop and the image overlay is too big. just wondering if thats supposed to be a hologram or something, did you try erasing out the real laptop screen from behind it and it just didnt work?

thanks ahead of time for your answers!

[spidey]

no your not the only one who commented on language, I just dont see a the problem of language

the laptop is hologram project off if i had time you wwere supose to see hmm scan through it by finger. minority report style. but time was short.

[spidey]

Here the original concept picture i drew back in november. It took me a while to find it. I plan on getting more bts up by this weekend. story boards interviews etc.
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/bartimage.jpg

[Cory_Doggett]

spidey...

I have to say overall you did a great job.I love the way you color corrected the bar scene that was pure genius! the way you did that green halo thing was amazing, but I do have to say the rest of the movies color was a little off for my taste.
if your interested I have a movie you should check out for some ideas...try looking at "....... ...." You shoud get some really awesome directorial and color ideas from that one .I found this movie riveting and moving all at the same time.....especially the beer drop...... talk about art!


I also found the language in the movie fitting; in fact, I believe it could have used even more cussing.....then It would have felt like the real world.have you ever heard real cops speak these days? it horrible! of course it will worsen in the future so i liked the way you depicted it. thats the way I see it being... if not more!. Nice directorial decision I must say.
The way you adapted the script to the characters was also just amazing. I was literally drawn to it.... you had me at F*ck you.

The gripe I had about the dialogue though is that you didnt have enough studders and pauses between words.If you just made it stumble out a little bit more you would have been golden.

but like I said earlier the movie rocks my socks,and so does your crew.they did an amazing job, and honestly you are my favorite to win.... plus the two hotties you have in the lead roles dosnt hurt either.

good luck and god speed

[spidey]

Lol im glad you finally got around to watching it cory. :)

[spidey]

heres the original sketch fo the vech in the movie. its more detailed than it came out to be due to time but you can see where it came from.
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/modelsketch.jpg

[spidey]

The titles were great, and so was that scene with the floating monitors, I wonder who did them, haha. Good job Spidey, and thanks for letting me create material to put on my demo reel.

haha I Apperciate your hard work on ths film I hope to do more work with you later joey.

[spidey]

Added new Sound track pieces you can find them on the front page as well. enjoy!

CHINESE MUSIC No Vocals (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/chinese.aif)
OPENING THEME (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/opening.mp3)
THE CHASE. (http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/runner.mp3)

[Brandon Rice]

NICE! Downloading the music now.

[spidey]

Found one of my story boards that I came up with my mind from the start. heres a comparison. enjoy!

http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/scistorystill0.jpg
http://bustedbubble.entopia2002.com/stillbutt.jpg

[Z B Brox]

Man, it's late and I don't think I can face 150+ comments before I respond here, so please forgive me if I repeat or anything.

I've just got two words, really.

Bad. Ass.

Okay, maybe I can do three.

F@!$ing bad ass.

I loved the way this looked. I loved the dialogue. I loved the acting. I loved that you gave me a POV character who I simultaneously thought was a dick and still kinda rooted for 'cause he seemed like kind of a dick because he's weak and fallible and just not a very good guy, not because he's actually malicious. I loved that you managed to make me buy totally into the world you created without beating me over the head with futuristic gadgets. I loved that this was a world and a plot I have no trouble believing will eventually happen givne the state of our society now.

The only criticisms I have, and they're minor, are these: First, while I enjoyed the story, it didn't smack of a whole new concept. I'm sure you know Blade Runner and similar, so that's no surprise. This isn't so much criticism in the sense of "this is bad", more of a "maybe this could be better if." You've got a damn fine movie here, but if I saw it in the theatre (and I'd love to) I might wonder if Ridley Scott was getting royalties. Second, the end: I appreciate the suddenness, I enjoyed it, but I think stopping outright there jarred me a little too much. I don't think I wanted more story or more dialogue, I think all I wanted was an ending credits sequence. Just to let me mentally cool down. We always have to make choices with time, of course.

So, you know, A+ work, man, I'm really impressed.

[kimko]

I LIKED THIS ONE, GRITTY, CHARACTER DRIVEN GREAT DIALOGUE, THE ACTORS WERE GREAT, NOW IN THE BEGINNING THE GUY TALKING HIS VOICE HAD CHANGED BECAUSE IN THE BEGINNING IT WAS MORE HMM.... WEASLEY AND RASPY WHICH I REALLY LIKED KINDA LIKE IGGY POPISH, BUT THEN IT CHANGED TO A HIGHER PITCH NORMAL.(i too had a problem with my voice) but then the other character started to shine good chemistry i like. THIS ONE WAS GOOD ALL THE WAY THRU, WELL PLANNED AND EXECUTED! GOOD CONTINUITY.

[conrad_johnson]

Sorry if this is a repeater - too much to read in this thread.

You're obviously quite talented - good work!

The acting made the short.

The color correcting was over-done.

I agree with one of the first comments that said the story was shallow. The story wasn't very engaging, so it was hard for my mind to keep following what was going on. It felt like you were focusing more on making the short look good than to tell an engaging story.

Makeup/costuming/sets/other visual stylings were very good.

Cinematography was awesome - this is definitely, definitely you're strong point.

Did anyone mention this looked like BLADE RUNNER??? :) Just kidding - never seen it.

You did a good job of making the short "feel" exciting, but then there wasn't much substance to back it up. Maybe you could focus more on the story next time. If you had done that, I think you would've had this one nailed.

Good job -

[spidey]

lol thanks glad you enjoyed it I actually didnt see Blade Runner till last year, so thanks for the complement. Glad you enjoy it and yes ridey scott is awesome!

jeremy


Man, it's late and I don't think I can face 150+ comments before I respond here, so please forgive me if I repeat or anything.

I've just got two words, really.

Bad. Ass.

Okay, maybe I can do three.

F@!$ing bad ass.

I loved the way this looked. I loved the dialogue. I loved the acting. I loved that you gave me a POV character who I simultaneously thought was a dick and still kinda rooted for 'cause he seemed like kind of a dick because he's weak and fallible and just not a very good guy, not because he's actually malicious. I loved that you managed to make me buy totally into the world you created without beating me over the head with futuristic gadgets. I loved that this was a world and a plot I have no trouble believing will eventually happen givne the state of our society now.

The only criticisms I have, and they're minor, are these: First, while I enjoyed the story, it didn't smack of a whole new concept. I'm sure you know Blade Runner and similar, so that's no surprise. This isn't so much criticism in the sense of "this is bad", more of a "maybe this could be better if." You've got a damn fine movie here, but if I saw it in the theatre (and I'd love to) I might wonder if Ridley Scott was getting royalties. Second, the end: I appreciate the suddenness, I enjoyed it, but I think stopping outright there jarred me a little too much. I don't think I wanted more story or more dialogue, I think all I wanted was an ending credits sequence. Just to let me mentally cool down. We always have to make choices with time, of course.

So, you know, A+ work, man, I'm really impressed.

[spidey]

I LIKED THIS ONE, GRITTY, CHARACTER DRIVEN GREAT DIALOGUE, THE ACTORS WERE GREAT, NOW IN THE BEGINNING THE GUY TALKING HIS VOICE HAD CHANGED BECAUSE IN THE BEGINNING IT WAS MORE HMM.... WEASLEY AND RASPY WHICH I REALLY LIKED KINDA LIKE IGGY POPISH, BUT THEN IT CHANGED TO A HIGHER PITCH NORMAL.(i too had a problem with my voice) but then the other character started to shine good chemistry i like. THIS ONE WAS GOOD ALL THE WAY THRU, WELL PLANNED AND EXECUTED! GOOD CONTINUITY.

lol thanks kimko! I loved your performance as well, thank you for watching!

[iSTy]

I liked the distortion in the faces and the make-up. Despite what I thought was rather gross, I did think it was rather good. I was so wrapped up in watching it I almost thought I was watching a series.

[Matthew B. Moore]

There will be a 12 min. version...on dvd. When ever we get time to put all that stuff together.

[spidey]

I liked the distortion in the faces and the make-up. Despite what I thought was rather gross, I did think it was rather good. I was so wrapped up in watching it I almost thought I was watching a series.


lol im glad you enjoyed it

[lookatmeimbender]

theres a 12 min verison done already? if so sign me up. I know you've heard this, but can you get me on of those posters?

[spidey]

its done yet, but i gonna take a break then work on it with a fresh mind. yes I'll get a poster to you as soon as I can get one :-p.

[MojoTrancer]

Put me down for a poster too. No doubt :)

[spidey]

Put me down for a poster too. No doubt :)

Hey thanks man, I will :)

[spidey]

I plan on collected more bts type items this week if you have any requests please send them in. and I will try to get you some stuff!

[spidey]

This a Thanks to everyone who voted for me. :) I glad you found it important to be valuable to watch. Thank you eveyone. This was a great contest. if you have any question I'll try to answer them!

[KOVAROVA]

way to go spidey and congrads to your cast! keep the movies comming!

[Matthew Bennett]

Congratulations!!!
This was my favourite.

Keep us posted on any re-edits or more stories that you are doing.

[iSTy]

CONGRATULATIONS!!!! Look forward to the series ;o)

[kimko]

hey spidey Chad, Slimothy, and i loved your short! but i must confess i voted for Chads 1, kRESTOFRE 2, THEN YOU,

[dakotapod]

Congratts on a much deserved win Spidey!

Outstanding work - Very, very well done. :thumbsup:

Pulling this off for $300 is an amazing feat!

Again, way to go - :beer:

[Filmjunkie677]

Congrats Spidey,

Your film kicked major ass and deserved the top spot!

Keep up the good work :kali: :kali:

[macgregor]

http://personales.ya.com/elfabrica/bush.jpg

[EditPhish]

Congrats!

[darkfader]

I knew it. I have new faith in this forum because this was by far my favorite piece in the fest. Go spidey, Go spidey it's your birthday. LOL Hey you have to tell me whats up with your makeup person. Do you use liquid latex?

[Matthew B. Moore]

http://personales.ya.com/elfabrica/bush.jpg
Maybe a picture of Satan would have been a little more apealing.

Thanks a lot. You guys did rock the house. Sorry the rules pulled you out.

[macgregor]

Wait a second Matthew, isn´t your president the proud of your whole country???

[EditPhish]

Wait a second Matthew, isn´t your president the proud of your whole country???

Funniest thing I've read all day...


okay, off of politics... now back to your regularly scheduled program...

[J.R. Hudson]

No Mac ; but our country kicks ass

But alas NO POLI in here ! Back on topic please.

[Matthew B. Moore]

Wait a second Matthew, isn´t your president the proud of your whole country???

He isn't. Many of us think he is a douche.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Douche

There is your word for the day.

PS. I was cool with you until you fired on my boy Spidey.
If you did some thing wrong, own up to it and be cool. Don't take the anger you have for yourself out on others. If you didn't, let me be the first to say, "I'm sorry." Your behavior seems to point to otherwise.

Your Bush sarcasm was so beautifully covered with sour grapes...I just got all red in the face...You know what, you are clever...and that makes me smile..

[macgregor]

PS. I was cool with you until you fired on my boy Spidey.
If you did some thing wrong, own up to it and be cool. Don't take the anger you have for yourself out on others. If you didn't, let me be the first to say, "I'm sorry." Your behavior seems to point to otherwise.

Your Bush sarcasm was so beautifully covered with sour grapes...I just got all red in the face...You know what, you are clever...and that makes me smile..

I absolutely did not understand a word of what you wrote. hahahaha

Please, speak to me in "idiot mode" so i can understand it. ;P

[iSTy]

LOL, that makes so much sense macgregor, lol I totally agree with you. :)

[Matthew B. Moore]

Basically,
I'm defending my friend against, what seems to be a sarcastic shot a him and the rest of us over here.
I was disapointed with what happened to you. I don't (and still don't) know the facts. I do know that when I went to the link for CPU to continue reading the words of the voters, I saw your post and suddenly changed my mind about you. Your sarcasm pushed me into the tread in a negative way. It also said to me that you have some anger that you don't know what to do with, so you lashed out at the one who beat you. We played it by the rules. Not all Americans are what you think.
You seem to be defending yourself against all kinds of attacks today. I didn't want to be one of them. Sorry. I hope to meet you on another playing field again. You were quite worthy.
The question posed to you is - How did you think Spidey would react and why?

[macgregor]

hey hey Matthew. You are absolutely wrong with me.

No sarcasm here. really.

I have Spidey in the msn and i talk with him sometimes. I truly loved his film long before you guys won. We allready spoke about his wonderfull style.

Dont get offended with the picture. It doesnt have anything in common with the electoral votes. You see, i was searching for a "thumbs up" picture to include in the post. So i went google, and Bush appeared as the 2nd picture so i though it would be funny to have the president congratulating you guys. Nothing more than that.

I trully dont have any anger. The fact that i was out of the contest doesnt mean in any case you dont deserve the prize. Why should i think that? Even not being DQ i dont know if we even had the chance to get to the 10 top list.

[Matthew B. Moore]

LOL, that makes so much sense macgregor, lol I totally agree with you. :)
Sorry, I just learned to read.

[macgregor]

i can use this instead:

http://www.skphoton.com/albums/GA-Tech-Friends/james_thumbs_up.sized.jpg

[Matthew B. Moore]

hey hey Matthew. You are absolutely wrong with me.

No sarcasm here. really.

I have Spidey in the msn and i talk with him sometimes. I truly loved his film long before you guys won. We allready spoke about his wonderfull style.

Dont get offended with the picture. It doesnt have anything in common with the electoral votes. You see, i was searching for a "thumbs up" picture to include in the post. So i went google, and Bush appeared as the 2nd picture so i though it would be funny to have the president congratulating you guys. Nothing more than that.

I trully dont have any anger. The fact that i was out of the contest doesnt mean in any case you dont deserve the prize. Why should i think that? Even not being DQ i dont know if we even had the chance to get to the 10 top list.

Oh, you were in the top 10, no question. I have no problem telling you that. I was very impressed with your work. You have technique, style, and a damn good eye. Your story telling abilities are very sharp. Your choise of music was fantastic. Your film truely speaks for itself. "Quality" is the word that comes to mind.

As far as Spidey goes, he's my employee and my friend. I will always jump to his defense first and ask questions later. That's the "Pirate Code"

[kimko]

Come On Guys Lets Kool Our Jets, Hey Matthew Look At Macgregors Avatar, The Man Is Mellow.......hail! He's Stoned!:Drogar-BigGrin(DBG) IN MY BOOK WE'RE ALL WINNERS:love4:

[MojoTrancer]

Kimko, I love your avatars dude.

[kimko]

mojo you got my idle on your avatar

[J.R. Hudson]

The poster just became my new background !

[Shawn Murphy]

Congratulations and thanks for raising the bar and giving inspiration!

[spidey]

:) hey everyone thanks for all the comments and thank you guys, you guys inspired me.

[Cinestarproductions]

I'm just now giving my feedback. When I first saw this one before the winners were announced it definitely left a solid impression with me. Especially the boobies! Seriously, though, it's a great short. Awesome make-up and special effects. The lighting is also very well done. Thanks again for this short film. Can't wait to see what you do next.

[badassmofro]

Dude,

Your film was pure awesomeness. Congratulations on the big prize. Do you have a website, I would love to check out more of your stuff.

[Matthew B. Moore]

I'm just now giving my feedback. When I first saw this one before the winners were announced it definitely left a solid impression with me. Especially the boobies! Seriously, though, it's a great short. Awesome make-up and special effects. The lighting is also very well done. Thanks again for this short film. Can't wait to see what you do next.

Word up to Lawrence, KS. OG Kansas folk.

We will be in the hero comp. We will also be finishing Redneck Samurai 1 in about a week. RNS 2 is in the machine and waiting to be edited. We are releasing our "Best of" Volume 1 in about 2 weeks. Hold tight and you can see all kinds of crap.

Thanks for the good words.

We'll start linking everybody up pretty soon.

[manglerBMX]

www.kingcoyote.net

there isnt much on it as of now, but we have a lot that needs to be done.

[Matthew B. Moore]

Right on, Mangler

[deepthought21]

Incredible work on the film!! Beautiful visuals, and a frickin awesome story! LOVED IT! :D