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AdrianPetrosian
03-30-2015, 10:55 AM
Hey Everyone!
My name is Adrian Petrosian and I'm a 18 year old film student from St. Louis. I have been working with the blackmagic production camera for the last few months and have made a few shorts for my film classes. I would love to hear some feedback and things to work on. My directing theory teacher had us do a lot of scene remakes the last month.

Psycho Scene Remake: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CR2uzTwykS8

The Shinning Scene Remake: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YliH85MZsGw

My (not) French New Wave Short: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kfkmPe4LkGk

Apple Pie Action Short: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L5a-tCT_dMU

Landon Dale
03-25-2016, 02:57 PM
Honestly, I could only get around to watching the first two, so here goes:

Psycho: It wasn't bad, though I felt that you used a lot of the same camera angles and methods as Hitchcock, which didn't really do it for me. It was creepy though, and the whole piece (combined with the music and cutting) was good. One complaint though: It needed something done with color. To me, it looked way too desaturated.

Shinning: Nice use of the camera --- but again it felt very much like Kubrick's exact same camera moves.... I felt little originality here and more copying. The last part of it didn't really work for me, as I felt the sudden amount of cuts and scare-tactics was off-kilter with the clip as a whole. What made Kubrick's version so scary was the lack of over-the-top scare tactics, opting instead for subtle scares and even more so a general 'creepyness'... On a bright note, the colors in this one are spot-on.

Conclusion: Don't take any of these as me saying the works are bad. They are very good, but you did ask for critique, so I'm calling out the parts I viewed as not all that great.