PD-150 Short Film I made

[windedsailor]

I've been reading you're guys post and watching your clips for months today I give back... I shot this on PD-150 and edited on Final Cut Pro let me know what you all think

http://s27.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=2BH38YG6PU4Q63H6R0X4LGHDTT

[jochem]

The last song, what's it called? I've been looking for that.

[windedsailor]

Ágætis byrjun by Sigur Rós

good band from iceland

[J.R. Hudson]

What a great short Windedsailor. I really enjoyed this and it held my attention completely. You have some really creative camera shots in this (I love the one at the dining room table as the camera pans down to shorts and then we see the same shot on reverse on the girl) and some humorous moments (running into the suv)...

Well done! And I'm liking what I hear from Sigur Ros as of late but give me The Soft Parade and The Doors anyday! (Haven't head that song in years). Bravo! Show us more work from you (This is why USC pays off I guess? lol)

And jochem? Thanks for the insightful comments on the short.

[taubkin]

Sigur Rós Kicks ass! I saw them in a live concert a few years back, they were great (although very few people got it...)!

Winded Sailor, that is a nice short, very well excecuted. Very well directed. I do think it has script problems though... I think the whole construction of his relationship with the wife was poor. there was not enough script time, scenes, dialog, for us to be actually affected by the girl leaving the guy. I know why she did it, and I take he didn't like it very much, but I could not relate to the character. Maybe this short should have been around 10 min, not 5...

Also, why was the guy hit by a car? It makes no difference to the story, man! I also have a student film shot on a PD 150 that has a lot of the same script problems... Basically both films, were too good scripts (I can say that about mine too because I did not write it...) for a too short screen time.

Either way, that was very well directed. How long you have had been in school when you shot it? ( I really doubt I wrote that sentence correclty...)

Good work, man!

[windedsailor]

i shot it last week, the assignment was a 5 minute film with no dialogue that's why there was none... the idea is that we learn to communicate a story visually, but i like the input, plus i kinda came up with this story on the fly, and i was writing it while filming it... i totally agree i would have had it a 10 minute film, i tried to pack too much into it... i'm currently a junior i made this last week i have to make 3 more this semester i will post them for you guys... i'm glad everyone enjoys the music, i pay a lot of attention to it

but i plan on learning to tell a story visually better, i still see lots of room for improvement

thanks for the input
rock on

[J.R. Hudson]

... I think the whole construction of his relationship with the wife was poor. there was not enough script time, scenes, dialog, for us to be actually affected by the girl leaving the guy. I know why she did it, and I take he didn't like it very much, but I could not relate to the character. Maybe this short should have been around 10 min, not 5...

I disagree. Anyone who has ever had a serious girlfriend/wife relationship can emphasize with this element. I don't need it explained or drawn out. You couldn't relate to that? Should we show flashbacks of the engagement and ensuing
marriage in order to better build the dynamic?

Also, why was the guy hit by a car? It makes no difference to the story, man!

It's called Comedy. Things like this happen all the time in life. I didn't have to almost bust my ass on my kids toy truck while bringing in the groceries a few days ago; but it happened and it had nothing to do with making spaghetti that night.

:beer: :thumbsup:

[taubkin]

I disagree. Anyone who has ever had a serious girlfriend/wife relationship can emphasize with this element. I don't need it explained or drawn out. You couldn't relate to that? Should we show flashbacks of the engagement and ensuing
marriage in order to better build the dynamic?

Not at all, I don't want to know the guys past. I know he lives with the girl, I can imagine how he got there, but, for instance, the girl leaving - why did she leave? The dinner scene was very confusing in terms of directing, it was IMHO the worst scene, but to be fair, it was the most difficult to be done. It had to quickly give a girl we don't know as a character motive to leave a man because of a pair of boxers. And this culminates to the guy giving up the underwear! Well if the girl is going to be the reason the guy is going to give up on the boxers, I'd like some more information. To the point i didn't even knew the guy liked the girl that much until he had the insomnia. You are assuming he loved her just because he lived with her, when in many cases this is not true. Uncertainty like this drew me away from the story more than once. Sure, I could make out the story in my head, but it could be better told, IMHO.



It's called Comedy. Things like this happen all the time in life. I didn't have to almost bust my ass on my kids toy truck while bringing in the groceries a few days ago; but it happened and it had nothing to do with making spaghetti that night.

:beer: :thumbsup:

Ah, I honestly did not get it. Now that I saw you posted this already before I did, so there you have it: I really didn't get it as a joke, I just kept waiting for it to payoff... :)

Well, that is what I think. I can understand if none of this bothers you John, but to me, that whole confusing aspect of the film called my eye...

[revolution summer]

any chance of getting the link back up?

[Derrick_SA]

Please get us the link up again, what is the size, I might have some hosting space for it.

Thanks,
Derrick

[windedsailor]

it's fixed... it's 14 megs... but i don't want it hosted because USC owns the copyright... i can only post it temporarily

[Derrick_SA]

I understand, don't you want to post it on another temp site then, please ?

- Derrick

[windedsailor]

it should be back up for now... meanwhile check out my new one... haven't gotten any feed back from it

[Derrick_SA]

no luck getting this one.

- Derrick