Almost done ......

[Noel Evans]

Hey all, been working on this for awhile now. I think Im almost there. Its (c) so I dont theres a problem posting it here.

Anyway would love to hear some feedback. Its a short, so its rather quick to read.

Scarlet Runaway (http://www.scarlet-films.com/scarlet%20runaway.pdf)

Just a side note here... when they talk about currency they refer to Japanese yen. Dont worry this is the english version... no Japanese to read.

[Cinema-E]

I loved your dialog , and I think the most beautiful scene you have is when Shinichi deals with Yoichi’s family

[Cinema-E]

i am in love with japanese yakuza drama ,

say hi to takeshi kitano(watched all of his movies) and takashi miike(this guy is crazy man) ,

and dont forget asano tadanubo

[Noel Evans]

Hmm thanks Cinema-E. However if you have some criticism of bad points please let me have them!

Anyone else? Please :beer:

[Cinema-E]

the story , well it is a drama , and that’s what a real drama all about ,
you just enjoy it as scenes from reality , I really enjoyed it


The dialog was logically intelligent ,


About the scenario I have a question


A crowd flows in a wave triggered by
the beat of the traffic lights: teenage boys with yellow
spiked hair and loose fitting trousers; tanned teenage girls
wearing tight shorts skirts and heavy make-up; young women
dressed in the latest fashion; business jackets, shirts and
ties.


I don’t see why you are having people this way

I mean why teenage boys , girls wearing tight shorts, young women
dressed in the latest fashion!!

what is your point ?

[Noel Evans]

About the scenario I have a question



I don’t see why you are having people this way

I mean why teenage boys , girls wearing tight shorts, young women
dressed in the latest fashion!!

what is your point ?

Its made for non japanese audience and its an illustration of where the film takes place. They are fairly typical scenes here in Tokyo.

[Cinema-E]

i see

you got my message?

am i wrong ?