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Tequilawoo
09-28-2013, 08:25 AM
A man working at home becomes very sick. The cause of his illness will change his life forever.....in the worst way possible.​

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Elton
09-28-2013, 12:48 PM
Welcome! Looking forward to it!

Chris_Keaton
09-28-2013, 03:46 PM
Sounds interesting!

ZazaCast
09-28-2013, 05:24 PM
Great! I still find myself repeating, "Get to the Chopper!" :happy:
Love your films.

Tequilawoo
10-03-2013, 10:16 AM
Script is finished and I'm finalizing a location. I'm excited about this one folks. Hoping to legitimately spook some people this year. :)

Brandon Rice
10-03-2013, 10:40 AM
Really looking forward to it :thumbsup:

JaceDaniel
10-11-2013, 07:22 AM
fantastic day of shooting yesterday, probably one of my favorites!

Tequilawoo
10-12-2013, 09:16 AM
A couple screen grabs posted up top!

Elton
10-12-2013, 11:20 AM
Righ on

ElmoRicketts
10-12-2013, 08:46 PM
This is to scary i think you missed the point

Charli
10-14-2013, 06:02 PM
Good luck!

Tequilawoo
10-17-2013, 03:48 PM
One more screen grab up top!

AJ Brooks
10-17-2013, 10:27 PM
I like the eye.

Marlon Ladd
10-22-2013, 02:27 PM
Man, those shots look pretty awesome!

Elton
10-31-2013, 09:12 AM
More commentary later but wanted to say I enjoyed it quite a bit!

joey46
10-31-2013, 11:00 PM
loved that opening shot.

Hawk Teflon
11-01-2013, 03:45 PM
SPOILERS. PLEASE STOP READING IF YOU HAVEN'T WATCHED THIS SHORT.

What I liked: Really enjoyed the story line. Kind of a The Fog meets The Happening, but, you know ... good. The atmosphere music really built well into the storyline, too. Main character's acting was a solid job as well. Whatever you did to make his hand up after he grabbed the door looked good. Very Indiana Jones reminiscent. Also, good ending.

What I didn't like as much (take these opinions with a grain of salt): I feel like your aperture might have been a little wide open for a lot of the shots. I know it was dark in there, but I'd recommend filling with more light so you can close your lens up a little so your DOF isn't that shallow. I felt like we were losing focus a lot. The scene when he's being chased back upstairs he reaches the top of the stairs and closes the door on the woman chasing him, then just says, "Stay right there, I'm coming to help." Even though he just ran from her as she was screaming "Help me." There was a strange transition from scared to relaxed at 4:50. I also felt like some of the sound effects were over used. Like the electronic distortion when things were going weird. The "if I say stop, or get out" scene at the end felt a little heavy handed. Almost explaining too much to us.

This one gave me a couple of 'jump' moments too, which is good for this genre. Well done.

Again, take these notes however you want, but it's just my 2 cents. I know it feels like I might have come down on this a lot, but your story was solid, and that's what matters most.

JaceDaniel
11-01-2013, 04:05 PM
SPOILERS. PLEASE STOP READING IF YOU HAVEN'T WATCHED THIS SHORT.

What I liked: Really enjoyed the story line. Kind of a The Fog meets The Happening, but, you know ... good. The atmosphere music really built well into the storyline, too. Main character's acting was a solid job as well. Whatever you did to make his hand up after he grabbed the door looked good. Very Indiana Jones reminiscent. Also, good ending.

What I didn't like as much (take these opinions with a grain of salt): I feel like your aperture might have been a little wide open for a lot of the shots. I know it was dark in there, but I'd recommend filling with more light so you can close your lens up a little so your DOF isn't that shallow. I felt like we were losing focus a lot. The scene when he's being chased back upstairs he reaches the top of the stairs and closes the door on the woman chasing him, then just says, "Stay right there, I'm coming to help." Even though he just ran from her as she was screaming "Help me." There was a strange transition from scared to relaxed at 4:50. I also felt like some of the sound effects were over used. Like the electronic distortion when things were going weird. The "if I say stop, or get out" scene at the end felt a little heavy handed. Almost explaining too much to us.

This one gave me a couple of 'jump' moments too, which is good for this genre. Well done.

Again, take these notes however you want, but it's just my 2 cents. I know it feels like I might have come down on this a lot, but your story was solid, and that's what matters most.

Thanks Hawk for the review and the completing of my acting! I dont act often so it was a good exercise for me being so used to being behind the camera all the time.
Also, funny you should mention the hand... that was literally mustard and ketchup from the kitchen that I just squirted some on my hands lol

Tequilawoo
11-01-2013, 08:42 PM
SPOILERS. PLEASE STOP READING IF YOU HAVEN'T WATCHED THIS SHORT.

What I liked: Really enjoyed the story line. Kind of a The Fog meets The Happening, but, you know ... good. The atmosphere music really built well into the storyline, too. Main character's acting was a solid job as well. Whatever you did to make his hand up after he grabbed the door looked good. Very Indiana Jones reminiscent. Also, good ending.

What I didn't like as much (take these opinions with a grain of salt): I feel like your aperture might have been a little wide open for a lot of the shots. I know it was dark in there, but I'd recommend filling with more light so you can close your lens up a little so your DOF isn't that shallow. I felt like we were losing focus a lot. The scene when he's being chased back upstairs he reaches the top of the stairs and closes the door on the woman chasing him, then just says, "Stay right there, I'm coming to help." Even though he just ran from her as she was screaming "Help me." There was a strange transition from scared to relaxed at 4:50. I also felt like some of the sound effects were over used. Like the electronic distortion when things were going weird. The "if I say stop, or get out" scene at the end felt a little heavy handed. Almost explaining too much to us.

This one gave me a couple of 'jump' moments too, which is good for this genre. Well done.

Again, take these notes however you want, but it's just my 2 cents. I know it feels like I might have come down on this a lot, but your story was solid, and that's what matters most.


Hey Hawk. Thank you for the great feedback. Much appreciated. Had a great time filming with very little resources. Horror is probably my favorite genre because of the challenge/difficulty to keep a good plot line going with the scares so I am very happy to hear you got some enjoyment out of the story. Also liked the critiques. Thanks again!

Matthew B
11-05-2013, 01:22 AM
An interesting concept, that seemed to be popular this fest. The idea of demons within. But it was definitely an interesting take on it. I will echo a lot of what Hawk said in regards to your cinematography and way too shallow DOF.
The biggest draw back from me would have to be the acting, not particularly the lead, but everyone else. The demons/visions all looked and felt like friends and family put up to do it and the paranormal investigaters scene was really on the nose (I think the scripting was the biggest issue here). But, like I said an interesting concept.

Chris_Keaton
11-09-2013, 06:44 PM
And the best liberal use of a smoke machine goes to..... Okay, not sure I got this and it was the ending up until the zombie attack I thought the guy was just tripping balls because of the smoke. If so why did the ghost crew get effected so quickly? I'm not fond of the SD image, unless it's a stylistic choice, there is no excuse for anything but HD. Overall a good short.

JaceDaniel
11-09-2013, 08:43 PM
And the best liberal use of a smoke machine goes to..... Okay, not sure I got this and it was the ending up until the zombie attack I thought the guy was just tripping balls because of the smoke. If so why did the ghost crew get effected so quickly? I'm not fond of the SD image, unless it's a stylistic choice, there is no excuse for anything but HD. Overall a good short.

You can watch it at 1080p HD on youtube.

Jack Daniel Stanley
11-11-2013, 10:28 PM
Pretty fun original concept. Works in and of itself, but practical filmmaking-wise kind of let’s you do THE FOG on a smaller interior scale. Smart.

Nice shot around 1:50 with all the smoke and the color temp of the outdoor light.

Ah man you have a basement. Jealous. Great for horror.
Well shot too!

Really nice in the basement once the whispering starts.

The lady that comes out and screams didn’t work as well for me - just seemed to human / normal - didn’t see what she needed help from. Seemed like a missed horror beat to not have her very pale or do something with the shutter speed or something.

Great when the mist comes through the vent at the end. Nice editing and sound. Kind of Evil Dead in a good way.

Now once all the people are coming out from everywhere in the house they’re all stylized and tweaked. Works well. With the lady in the basement maybe you wanted her to seem more natural to give yourself somewhere to go, but still needed to be just a little heightened.

Love that you stay focused on his friend’s feet while he drags him back - cool shot, conveys a lot.

No backwards smoke or did I miss it? Maybe it’s played out, but (unless I missed it) it’s an easy technic I’m surprised you didn’t use. You know - you could show the smoke hiding back in the basement by playing the footage backwards so the mist goes back into the vent. Or have the actor come out of his mind controlled state by having the fog roll away from him in one shot.

Nice classic horror vibe with this one with a lot of great shots!