Take - a porchwax film

[preston]

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watch it on vimeo right here: http://www.vimeo.com/3241886


hello all... i'm getting a late start, but i am now working on a short for lossfest.
it's called Take, and i can't wait to get it finished - hopefully in time for the deadline!

...thank you to all my friends who are helping me get this project done...

so far we've had only one evening of shooting, but it was rather productive.

good luck to all... :beer:

[preston]

cast:

john cobalt ( http://www.myspace.com/johncobaltmusic )

shannon donovan ( http://www.myspace.com/audionectar )

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[preston]

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[preston]

maybe some out-takes could eventually, if i find the time... :Drogar-Evil(DBG):

[Rodney V. Smith]

Welcome to the fray dude. It's not really last minute until it's the last week, so you got plenty of time. :grin:

good luck with the shoot.

[preston]

haha thanks...

[stinkpot]

Cool. Welcome to the fest. I'm trying to get my $h1t together for a last minute entry as well.

:beer:

[preston]

hey thanks, and good luck to you. :)

...poster added up top.

[preston]

update: 2.23.09

dark days... absolutely nothing was accomplished over the weekend, and it's my fault. sure my weekend was busy with -among other things- family obligations and grocery shopping and hauling dirty clothes to the laundromat, but i could have found the time. i could have wrangled together the people i need to put a shoot together. i could have scouted locations, planned shoots, written.. something, anything would have been better than nothing.

why? i'm not sure, except that i feel myself losing the desire to finish. i feel like i'm wasting my time, not to mention the time of my friends who have agreed to help me.

i look at what i've done so far on this project, and i am easily discouraged. i know it could have been a lot better, and again, that's my fault. i know i've rushed, been under-prepared, and inexperienced, and i'm using this as an excuse to second-guess the entire thing. i tell myself i don't know what i'm doing, i'm going to embarass myself.

so now, monday morning, i'm wondering if i'll make any calls, set up any shoots, charge the batteries. i'm not sure.

i'm just not sure.

[SparkyZa]

Take your time and do it right. There's always another fest to enter. That's what i'm doin'.

[tmpafilmer25]

update: 2.23.09

dark days... absolutely nothing was accomplished over the weekend, and it's my fault. sure my weekend was busy with -among other things- family obligations and grocery shopping and hauling dirty clothes to the laundromat, but i could have found the time. i could have wrangled together the people i need to put a shoot together. i could have scouted locations, planned shoots, written.. something, anything would have been better than nothing.

why? i'm not sure, except that i feel myself losing the desire to finish. i feel like i'm wasting my time, not to mention the time of my friends who have agreed to help me.

i look at what i've done so far on this project, and i am easily discouraged. i know it could have been a lot better, and again, that's my fault. i know i've rushed, been under-prepared, and inexperienced, and i'm using this as an excuse to second-guess the entire thing. i tell myself i don't know what i'm doing, i'm going to embarass myself.

so now, monday morning, i'm wondering if i'll make any calls, set up any shoots, charge the batteries. i'm not sure.

i'm just not sure.

Have you ever heard the story about the little engine that could?

[Mark Harris]

Wow, this is turning into one gloomy-assed fest...

[preston]

well the good news is... i made some calls, scheduled a shoot for tonight. so i'm gonna charge the batteries, plan out what i want to shoot, and do my best to get what i want.

if all goes well, one last shoot on thursday night should do it. then it's sequester-time for me, some coffee and adobe premiere.

hey noel, i'll audition any music that you're willing to lend to this film... :)

mark - you're right. we could call it Gloom-Fest.

good luck to all....

[preston]

the bad news is... tonight's shoot just got canceled, rescheduling for thursday.

damn.

[preston]

well, thursday has all but come and gone, and i'm happy to say... we had a good night of shooting! with the exception of a daytime exterior scene (to be shot saturday), we are pretty much done with photography. :)

thank you djm, your help is much appreciated.

i'm looking forward to digging in to this footage and seeing what i can make of it.

good luck to all...

[Marlon Ladd]

Hey, Preston. Read your thread. I see you've had a tough time. Glad you pushed through. We all have those same feelings - ah, the difficulty of indie filmmaking. Everybody can't do this (make films) or they would. Remember that and good luck to you.

[preston]

that's true, not everyone can make a film. i'm just not sure what group i'm in...

officially, photography wrapped today. finally. unofficially, i wish i could reshoot everything. problem is, it probably wouldn't be much better. it's ok though, because i'm gonna finish this thing, and when it's all said and done, i'm gonna be a better filmmaker. still might never do it again though, haha...

i'm sick. editing is painful enough when i'm healthy, so this week should be absolute torture. ok, i'm done crying (for now) :crybaby: good luck to all...

[preston]

i am happy to announce our film is done. :)

[hoz]

great job, man!

[preston]

hey thanks! i hope you say that once you've seen it, haha...

UPLOADED!:Drogar-BigGrin(DBG)

[Zak Forsman]

glad to see you reached the finish line. looking forward to it!

[preston]

and i am looking forward to your film as well.

probably the most. because: Zak+D90=:)

[preston]

hey all... i just put up a few grabs on page one. (post#3)

i realized i've neglected to post some frames, and i know how much i enjoy seeing all the others - so here you go.

..............good luck to all.............. :)

[Richard J. Johnson]

Man that actor was spot on. Hell he made me sad. Sad ending, but perfect.

[lordambrai]

Yeah, I second what filthrich just said. Great acting. Pacing was a tad slow, but you can't really rush a theme like that. Good job

[vnguyen972]

This film is so sad. The pace is perfect and the actor is great. Though I wish I know more about him and how he lost the boy from the picture who I'm assuming his son? a well made film!

[preston]

Man that actor was spot on. Hell he made me sad. Sad ending, but perfect.


Yeah, I second what filthrich just said. Great acting. Pacing was a tad slow, but you can't really rush a theme like that. Good job


This film is so sad. The pace is perfect and the actor is great. Though I wish I know more about him and how he lost the boy from the picture who I'm assuming his son? a well made film!

thank you all; i hope you enjoyed the film. i will pass along the kind words to the actor. he's actually a musician, and you can check out his music at www.myspace.com/johncobaltmusic (http://www.myspace.com/johncobaltmusic) - he has a song called "take" that was a big influence for the film. give it a listen, it's a nice musical companion to the movie.

[Zak Forsman]

hey preston, i really enjoyed the melancholy rhythms of this one. event those little magical moments with the dog added another great layer. nice to see david jerome involved in another project. i was a fan of "ajar".

[Lawsuit_Boy]

Hey preston.

First off, nice work! The piece moved along with this rift of melancholy and longing for lost time, companionship, and happiness. I felt that the film was very languid in the best way, although I do feel that the scene in which he waits/contemplates began to grow a little repetitive with his actions. I also thought the dog added an extra element of dread and the end reminded me of a certain scene in Trainspotting.

The music seemed to work FOR the piece and not against it like music can sometimes. I'm usually apprehensive about films that spend any time in cemeteries (or at least those that over-do it) but yours didn't because you kept it simple and the actor really kept his performance consistent. I thought he did a fine job handling the voice over as well.

It was simple and heart breaking, which is, I'm willing to bet, what you were going for. My only "complaints" would be that one scene I mentioned being just a hair repetitive, and maybe some of the excessive blow-outs in the cinematography, but that wasn't distracting, so eh...haha, I'm having trouble finding anything to really critique.

Anyway, very nice work! :beer:

P.S. The dog was way cute.

[preston]

melancholy rhythms...

thanks, that's what this piece is about. i am interested in your opinion as to what didn't work for you - any constructive criticism would be much appreciated.

david's involvement was helpful in that he pushed me to finish the project. also, a fresh set of eyes/ears helped a lot when i was getting sick of staring at the computer screen for too long.... although he almost derailed the film when he suggested we do the whole thing from the dog's perspective, including the voice-over. haha..

[preston]

Hey preston.

First off, nice work! The piece moved along with this rift of melancholy and longing for lost time, companionship, and happiness. I felt that the film was very languid in the best way, although I do feel that the scene in which he waits/contemplates began to grow a little repetitive with his actions. I also thought the dog added an extra element of dread and the end reminded me of a certain scene in Trainspotting.

The music seemed to work FOR the piece and not against it like music can sometimes. I'm usually apprehensive about films that spend any time in cemeteries (or at least those that over-do it) but yours didn't because you kept it simple and the actor really kept his performance consistent. I thought he did a fine job handling the voice over as well.

It was simple and heart breaking, which is, I'm willing to bet, what you were going for. My only "complaints" would be that one scene I mentioned being just a hair repetitive, and maybe some of the excessive blow-outs in the cinematography, but that wasn't distracting, so eh...haha, I'm having trouble finding anything to really critique.

Anyway, very nice work! :beer:

P.S. The dog was way cute.

wow, thanks for the review. it's a good feeling to know people are enjoying the film. i learned a lot while making this, so to me it is a success. i'm glad i'm not the only one who feels that way... thanks again.

[david jerome]

I heart little Pedro.

[preston]

http://c3.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/27/l_a159fa87a7544687b7d7cc5ab18827fa.jpg

little pedro :)

[alex whitmer]

Hey Preston, nice melancholic mood to this one. Everything seemed in sync here.


Really enjoyed the bathroom scene. Great 'geeky-awkwardness' to your character.

The dog was a nice touch, kinda like 'A Boy and His Dog' gives up in the end.

Nice film.

alex

[Chris Messineo]

You did an awesome job establishing the mood and tone. I like a slow melancholy pace, but I think this might be a tad too slow.

Still, this was sad and effective. I wish you the best of luck in the fest with it.

[preston]

thanks, Chris. i appreciate your feedback, and i'm glad you liked it. i will experiment with the pacing and see what my options are.

[Blaine]

Preston, you did a pretty good job setting the tone of your film. Music worked well with the acting. I thought the character was believable BUT a person suffering that kind of depression probably wouldn't be such an immaculate house keeper. To me it's just a touch that felt out of place.

Loved the dog, too.

[MrKilloran]

Not the biggest fan of your color/lighting choices and the film is kind of slow.

Great set up of tone and was really complimented by the music. The ending is depressing, in a good way... if that makes sense. Your actor is spot on and amazingly consistent, really sets the mood and its just heartbreaking to watch him.
I thought the character was believable BUT a person suffering that kind of depression probably wouldn't be such an immaculate house keeper. To me it's just a touch that felt out of place. I can see Blaine's point of view but also maybe thats just the way this character deals with it, he's extremely melancholy and lackluster about everything else but why not be a little OCD about appearance it could be believable... maybe?

Thank god he said "dogs" because I was thinking ... that dog is completely different. Yet adorable at the same time.

[preston]

hey guys, thanks for watching and commenting.

one quick word about the clean house/washing dishes - i wanted it to look like he was preparing the place, so whoever eventually found him (like his mom or sister...) wouldn't have to clean up his mess. it's for this reason he uses the pills instead of the gun - less messy.

thanks again for watching :)

[warau]

You really set the mood with the music and color choices. I agree with others, a tad slow moving, but it did fit story. Very depressing. (good job..)

[Geoff_R]

Preston, this was good man. I like how you set out to construct a character piece. Good acting by your lead, he did a fair job of portraying a man with nothing left to really live for. I like that you had the dog involved, it made the movie sadder in some ways.. at least for me because it reminds me of my dog.. but yea, liked his performance and he did a solid job on the voiceover.

My only critical thoughts are maybe it could have been a little shorter. I don't think you need six minutes to get that message/feeling across. I think it'd be more impactful if the story was condensed to maybe four minutes or something. All in all, I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

[SMarston]

So i get that he lost someone close to him and that he misses her, but all i could think about the whole time was what happened to her. maybe im missing the bigger picture but i was distracted by that one thought. over all though i think it touching and real

[preston]

So i get that he lost someone close to him and that he misses her, but all i could think about the whole time was what happened to her. maybe im missing the bigger picture but i was distracted by that one thought. over all though i think it touching and real

well i wanted to focus more on how it affected him, rather than give details about what happened to the child. it could have been a tragic accident or a disease or whatever, but i wanted to show the emotional impact instead.

thank you for watching and taking the time to comment. i hope you enjoyed it.

[preston]

Preston, this was good man. I like how you set out to construct a character piece. Good acting by your lead, he did a fair job of portraying a man with nothing left to really live for. I like that you had the dog involved, it made the movie sadder in some ways.. at least for me because it reminds me of my dog.. but yea, liked his performance and he did a solid job on the voiceover.

My only critical thoughts are maybe it could have been a little shorter. I don't think you need six minutes to get that message/feeling across. I think it'd be more impactful if the story was condensed to maybe four minutes or something. All in all, I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

wow Geoff, thank you. i am glad you enjoyed my film, and also that you took the time to give feedback. i had no idea how it would be received, so to see that it worked for talented filmmakers like you and the other guys on here is a big relief.
thanks again for your comments.

[jamiejay]

i loved this. great colors, lighting, and mood. the actor was terrific and your editing was well done. you really have a good eye for details. a couple of really great angles in there. also, the music went with the story perfectly. nice work!

[preston]

thanks jamie. you know i'm a big fan of yours. :)

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

I dug this. Maybe a tad heavy/long. Liked some of the shots, pretty interesting stuff.
Liked the dog as well. I do think the edit could be cut down in length though.

The music was great! How did you go about getting it? I have no idea how to get permission for that sort of thing.

Good work.

MAH

[preston]

thanks for watching, Micheal. here's the info about the music:

Creative Commons (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-nc-sa/3.0/us/) and ghosts.nin.com (http://ghosts.nin.com/main/faq)

hope that helps!

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Saw that in your credits and decided to have a look for myself.

Thanks!

MAH

[tmpafilmer25]

Good work Preston, maybe you should give yourself less than a month to do your next film also, you seem to work well under pressure:)

[Morox]

Definitely "felt" it. The dog added a nice touch as well. Made it even sadder.

Great job though. I really dug it.

[Norm Sanders]

Though slower at the beginning, it really started to pick up for me as he was struggling & delaying with taking the pills, and LOVED the elapsed effect you had going on as time passed & he basically paced around the idea of doing anything (really loved the shot of him praying).

In the end, however, since we never SAW him take the pills, and since he only had one bottle in his hand (the other looking undisturbed), it wasn't clear to me if he had simply fallen asleep after a mentally & emotionally exhausting day, or if he had downed a bottle & was now dead?

Solid outing, regardless, and enjoyed it for a slower paced, dramatic & depressing ending. :)

[preston]

Definitely "felt" it. The dog added a nice touch as well. Made it even sadder.

Great job though. I really dug it.

thank you for watching. i'm glad you felt the character's loss.


Though slower at the beginning, it really started to pick up for me as he was struggling & delaying with taking the pills, and LOVED the elapsed effect you had going on as time passed & he basically paced around the idea of doing anything (really loved the shot of him praying).

In the end, however, since we never SAW him take the pills, and since he only had one bottle in his hand (the other looking undisturbed), it wasn't clear to me if he had simply fallen asleep after a mentally & emotionally exhausting day, or if he had downed a bottle & was now dead?

Solid outing, regardless, and enjoyed it for a slower paced, dramatic & depressing ending. :)

Norm, thanks for your reply... you're the first to touch on something with your "however" response.
we shot a "happy" ending where he gets up and answers the door. a few days later, we shot what i call the "ambiguous" ending, where it's exactly what you said - is he dead? sleeping? does she get help? i decided to go this route, because i thought it was more powerful, and less traditional. and less defined as well.

i'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for your review.

[Robbie Comeau]

The lead did a great job.

All I can say.

Not bad pacing either.

Robbie

[Nick_Lee]

Definitely "felt" it. The dog added a nice touch as well. Made it even sadder.

Great job though. I really dug it.

agreed. the dog definitely adds something.

I thought the yellow indoors worked really well. Especially the bathroom when he's taking the meds. Awesome. Only complaint is the dreamy looking outdoor stuff. Which is just an opinion. So otherwise good job dude!

[Brian Parker]

I feel what you were going for with this but I couldn't quite connect. It felt a little clinical like "this is the end result of losing someone you care about" if that makes any sense. I wish that their had been a little more meat on it.

That being said, there aren't a lot of technical issues or anything. The yellow image cast was effective and you got some strong images. The actor's performance fit and the dog did add an extra element to it.

If I sound like I didn't like it, I don't mean to. There was some good stuff here. I just needed to connect with the character more. Thanks for sharing it!

[orchidsofwrath]

definetally felt it. Started out slow but I soon became interested in the character. Love how the dog was pawing the pills. I felt sometimes the shot comp wasn't perfect but still an outstanding job. Couldn't tell if he was asleep or dead in the end though? thought i heard breathing?

[Will Clegg]

This was a nice piece. I wish it wasn't so yellow though... Did you add that color grade or is that how you shot it? You really used the music and the dog very well to help the story along. I would agree with some others that it could have been a bit shorter, but it was still very strong.

[Mobie540]

Spoiler: Suicide shorts, the cliche that is all cliche. so I'm gonna be harsh with my review.

When I saw this two words come to mind, emotional masturbation. I read a script for a short which is very similar and used the same type of voice over and gave the same review. I'm sorry I'm being so harsh but it has to be said in order to stop more of these.

You could've saved 5 minutes, 30 seconds by filming the following.

INT. BATHROOM - NIGHT

MAN looks in mirror and puts gun to head. He pulls the trigger. Blood splatters (or pools. Whatever your style is).

FADE OUT. THE END.

Story: - 1 million
Visuals/edit/sound: pretty good

[preston]

Spoiler: Suicide shorts, the cliche that is all cliche. so I'm gonna be harsh with my review.

When I saw this two words come to mind, emotional masturbation. I read a script for a short which is very similar and used the same type of voice over and gave the same review. I'm sorry I'm being so harsh but it has to be said in order to stop more of these.

You could've saved 5 minutes, 30 seconds by filming the following.

INT. BATHROOM - NIGHT

MAN looks in mirror and puts gun to head. He pulls the trigger. Blood splatters (or pools. Whatever your style is).

FADE OUT. THE END.

Story: - 1 million
Visuals/edit/sound: pretty good

i hadn't seen any of your other reviews, so i was curious to see what you had to say about the other films in the fest. looks like mine is the only one you've reviewed...

so why is that? why choose my film, and why such a useless, mean-spirited review?

i expected bad/critical reviews, but this just seems out of place and kind of rude.

but thanks for watching, i guess.

[preston]

http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=165177&page=8
There you go mate - your review/feedback is in :)

thanks, i'm listening now...

the breathing - glad you caught it, not many did. it's what i call the 'ambiguous' ending. yes, it is there intentionally, and i went back and forth on the decision to put it in there. the answer is - the film ends before the story does. it's up to the viewer to interpret.

now as for romantic loss, it's not that at all, really. it's the loss of a child due to death. that is much different than lamenting a lost lover, as you can imagine. especially when guilt is a factor, not to mention a year of drug abuse and depression. all of this is presented in the film. subtly, sure, but it's there.

so does he live? does she find him and save him? or does he sit there for a few more days/weeks, and invite the flies? good question...

thanks for your review. great idea to record them.

preston

[lawriejaffa]

Ah the loss of a child - well thats perhaps a little too obscure for some then as I missed that myself - but is perhaps (though it might not seem like it at first glance) less relevant than you may think to the strength of your film. Which is the redemptive recovery of our hero amidst the grief (whatever its cause may be) when the story plays (to cliche that would normally lead to the expected demise of the character).

As you will recall from my blethering - this in my book lifts the aspiration of your film beyond what that gimp remarked (about emotional masturbation) which is what it becomes if your not getting any *ahem*

[Mobie540]

I'm not being harsh on your filmmaking skills what so ever. I thought it was shot well, sound design was fine, color was a little too yellow in some scenes but maybe that was what you wanted.

I'm mostly a writer so I am harsh on the story. I hate suicide shorts. Sure you allude that you leave it up to the audience if he killed himself. Why the voiceover? Maybe the source could be from a note or something...doesn't matter. In suicide shorts, the protagonist kills themselves in the end, sometimes the beginning, death is so final, there's no story in such a short amount of time. Nothing personal just trying to stop more suicide shorts. I'm not voting on anyone's this fest so don't worry about getting a bad rating.

Now what will happen is the next dvxfest will be suicide fest.

[lawriejaffa]

Haha well Mobie if you hate suicide shorts check this one out - this was my first ever short film i made (i was a student back then doing acting) and i borrowed my mums cam to make a *drumroll* suicide short! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fYF_KXZtwxs

I would so have ended up entering this into Lossfest If I was still yooooung... *looks distant* for i was young.... once...

Suicide shorts (my goodness are they a subgenre now - probably) are tough but not without merit!! As suicide is a story -worthy issue and the main character being the victim also is perfectly reasonable.

The challenge is to bring something new to it - and obviously a purpose to the story. Mobie have you seen the classic 'Meshes of the Afternoon' by Maya Deren - that is a perfect example of a very creative film relating to suicide.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YPi9i3gfSAM

[Rodney V. Smith]

Been meaning to come around, et voila! Talk about ambiguous endings dude. I definitely got the sense of loss you were going for and some of the contrast that you might have been deliberately trying to cast. Especially with the outside shots, so full of color and life... and then inside, muted yellow tones. Even his clothing is muted, so I'd like to think that was all deliberate.

All in all it was a very depressing piece and you left me wondering if he had indeed taken the pills. He has been planning this for a while now, thinking about it. Oh: loved the journal entries as voiceover. Very effective and not overused at all.

A couple of dolly moves would help a piece like this, especially with the tone, so that might be a small investment for you too make. Build it right and it doesn't have to be very expensive at all and the flexibility you'll have with your shots will be increased.

Watch for your handheld shots. IN a piece this somber and quiet, a good tripod will be your best friend, since you really don't want to distract from what's going on.

[preston]

The lead did a great job.

All I can say.

Not bad pacing either.

Robbie

haha, i hope that's a good review. either way, thanks for watching and commenting.


agreed. the dog definitely adds something.

I thought the yellow indoors worked really well. Especially the bathroom when he's taking the meds. Awesome. Only complaint is the dreamy looking outdoor stuff. Which is just an opinion. So otherwise good job dude!

well the outdoor stuff was flashback/daydream, so i wanted it to have a different fell from the rest. thanks for your comments; glad you liked it.


I feel what you were going for with this but I couldn't quite connect. It felt a little clinical like "this is the end result of losing someone you care about" if that makes any sense. I wish that their had been a little more meat on it.

That being said, there aren't a lot of technical issues or anything. The yellow image cast was effective and you got some strong images. The actor's performance fit and the dog did add an extra element to it.

If I sound like I didn't like it, I don't mean to. There was some good stuff here. I just needed to connect with the character more. Thanks for sharing it!

thanks for your review. lots of good comments on the actor - i'll be sure to let him know.


definetally felt it. Started out slow but I soon became interested in the character. Love how the dog was pawing the pills. I felt sometimes the shot comp wasn't perfect but still an outstanding job. Couldn't tell if he was asleep or dead in the end though? thought i heard breathing?

ahh, the breathing. interpret as you see fit! ;)


This was a nice piece. I wish it wasn't so yellow though... Did you add that color grade or is that how you shot it? You really used the music and the dog very well to help the story along. I would agree with some others that it could have been a bit shorter, but it was still very strong.

thanks for the review. yes, i graded the film to look kind of... sick, i guess. i wanted it to feel yucky. the footage was just too alive with color.


Been meaning to come around, et voila! Talk about ambiguous endings dude. I definitely got the sense of loss you were going for and some of the contrast that you might have been deliberately trying to cast. Especially with the outside shots, so full of color and life... and then inside, muted yellow tones. Even his clothing is muted, so I'd like to think that was all deliberate.

All in all it was a very depressing piece and you left me wondering if he had indeed taken the pills. He has been planning this for a while now, thinking about it. Oh: loved the journal entries as voiceover. Very effective and not overused at all.

A couple of dolly moves would help a piece like this, especially with the tone, so that might be a small investment for you too make. Build it right and it doesn't have to be very expensive at all and the flexibility you'll have with your shots will be increased.

Watch for your handheld shots. IN a piece this somber and quiet, a good tripod will be your best friend, since you really don't want to distract from what's going on.


yeah, there's some green, brown and of course yellow in the house, and i tried to mute them. i let the actor choose his wardrobe, according to how he felt the character would dress. he did a fine job. i'm always looking forward to ways i can improve, and the biggest two are 1- time, and 2- planning. i guess a dolly would help too, heh heh.
thanks for commenting.

[preston]

at this time, i would like to formally concede... haha, thanks everyone for your feedback.

Take is now up on vimeo right here: http://www.vimeo.com/3241886