Joystick Films Presents.......Hangman

[Richard J. Johnson]

A Joystick Films / M1 Films Production

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H A N G M A N

CAST
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Kylie------------Tyeisha Gibson
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Kendall---------Jace Nicole

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Bree------------Tiphany Johnson

Tagline: S_me w_men y_u real_y don't w_nt to f__k with.

Director: Richard Johnson
Assistant Director: Mike Davis
Director of Photography: Richard Johnson & Mike Davis
Written by: Richard Johnson
Story by: Richard Johnson
Spliced and Diced by: Richard Johnson

Production Date: 2/21/08
Location: Abingdon, MD

[Richard J. Johnson]

Reserved for BTS

[Richard J. Johnson]

I have some time until dead line so I figure why not shoot another. This film is fairly simple, 1 location, 3 actors, No VFX, Just Dialogue.

Just something fun that I put together for some friends who wanted to curse..A LOT.

2/8/09-Rehersals at my house. I need to have them know this front to back since most of the film is one take

2/18/09-Rehersal 2 is scheduled.

[jasonthewho]

What's with all the double entries this fest? You guys have too much time on your hands.

Great tagline.

[Richard J. Johnson]

LOL. Thanks. This film as it looks right now, does not seem like it will be to difficult to shoot. This film is really just us having some fun and we are trying to figure out how to shoot it in one take. It probably won't happen but I really want to do it. A 6 minute continous shot is tough to pull off.

[Lawsuit_Boy]

What's with all the double entries this fest? You guys have too much time on your hands.

Great tagline.

I was wondering the same thing. I like working on multiple projects, but my energy is going into one project this time.

Interesting info so far. I think I can sense where it is going. ;)

[Lawsuit_Boy]

LOL. Thanks. This film as it looks right now, does not seem like it will be to difficult to shoot. This film is really just us having some fun and we are trying to figure out how to shoot it in one take. It probably won't happen but I really want to do it. A 6 minute continous shot is tough to pull off.

Agreed. I did a 2:30 one once and that was hard enough. I guess if you REALLY map out every movement/setup/line to a T and adjust your lighting/sound around that, you'll be fine. And find a remote focus pull and someone who's good with a steadicam! :thumbsup:

[Richard J. Johnson]

Agreed. I did a 2:30 one once and that was hard enough. I guess if you REALLY map out every movement/setup/line to a T and adjust your lighting/sound around that, you'll be fine. And find a remote focus pull and someone who's good with a steadicam! :thumbsup:

The way it is looking now. We could possibly pull off about a 2 minute continuous shot. Anything beyond that would just be impossible for what we are working with.

I was wondering the same thing. I like working on multiple projects, but my energy is going into one project this time.

Interesting info so far. I think I can sense where it is going. ;)

We planned for months for the Puppeteer and things did not go as expected but it was fun and I learned a lot. But it was such a relief to have it done. I wanted to concentrate on something else. I just kept tinkering and tinkering around with it until it lost the vibe I was trying to get, then I had to bring it back.

And could someone please tell me how to quote text from multiple postings:beer:

[stinkpot]

Hey filthrich, I hope you get it done... the one-take thing sounds interesting.

Welcome to the fest (again).

:beer:

[Rodney V. Smith]

Dude, i'm a BIG fan of one take shots. The planning that has to go into that is exhausting, especially doing complex camera moves around the actor's blocking. Wow. I'll tell ya this: doing it on a dolly is easier than doing it on a dolly AND jib at the same time. Either that or Steadicam it... or if you have a good shoulder support rig and a nice setup, it can be so cool.

Last time on "The Trade" I had some 1 take shots, but there wasn't enough camera movement in the shot, although the actors and their blocking was great. As long as you have camera movement, even something small, liek a slow dolly move.. wahtever.. it will help the look of it so much.

Good luck with the next entry and let me know if you need a poster. I have some downtime on the weekend.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Dude, i'm a BIG fan of one take shots. The planning that has to go into that is exhausting, especially doing complex camera moves around the actor's blocking. Wow. I'll tell ya this: doing it on a dolly is easier than doing it on a dolly AND jib at the same time. Either that or Steadicam it... or if you have a good shoulder support rig and a nice setup, it can be so cool.

Last time on "The Trade" I had some 1 take shots, but there wasn't enough camera movement in the shot, although the actors and their blocking was great. As long as you have camera movement, even something small, liek a slow dolly move.. wahtever.. it will help the look of it so much.

Good luck with the next entry and let me know if you need a poster. I have some downtime on the weekend.

We are gonna try some stuff this weekend to see if we can pull it off. I don't have a follow focus so I may have to run the HVX naked. Or just mount a 28mm and try our best. I think I have the blocking down. I have been drawing diagrams all day.

If you have time I would love a poster for hangman. Since mine is so amazing I have to take it down. It is blowing too many minds.

[Rodney V. Smith]

PM me your concept

[Richard J. Johnson]

Done.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Update: We are having a read on Thursday. I'm gonna block the actors and work out movements. We really want to shoot a 6 minute one-take shot. So I have to work out timing, camera moves, lighting, sound, etc. It's gonna be tough. But I have to try it. If not, no biggie, I can still knock it out.

[Richard J. Johnson]

This film is complete. Basically we just had fun and tried out some different things. I kind of let the actors just freestyle some parts and really let them throw ideas around amongst each other. It was more of an experiment for us. But it fit the theme.

We tried to one take the entire thing. But it proved more difficult on set than on paper. So we abandoned that and just winged it.

I'm not happy with audio at all. And this proved to me that I absolutely NEED a follow focus and a monitor if I want to shoot like this again. I enjoyed it but I need to learn a lot more about this filmmaking thing.

[Marlon Ladd]

Hey, man. Glad to see you in again. Look forward to see what you come up with.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks Marlon. We shot two for this fest. One is pretty good the other (this one) still needs work. And I don't know If I have time to ADR the thing.

[Marlon Ladd]

Well, I can't wait. You got some attractive ladies too I see. Glad to see you got uploaded.

[vnguyen972]

hey filthrich, i really enjoyed your Hangman short... lots of foul language but I like it! LOL
I kinda figured out who the guy before she called but other than that it's a very entertained piece. The audio is very clear too... what mic are you using? was that recorded on the set or ADR later?

[Zak Forsman]

watched it. awesome. thought it could have been paced a little faster but that's a nitpick. ignore it. my favorite line was "bitch you trippin, but i feel you though". that was a great little moment.

[Richard J. Johnson]

watched it. awesome. thought it could have been paced a little faster but that's a nitpick. ignore it. my favorite line was "bitch you trippin, but i feel you though". that was a great little moment.


Thanks Zak! And There is a lot to nitpick with this film.:beer: We shot it so quick and I will never ever try to shoot handheld with out a follow focus and no shoulder mount.

[Postmaster]

Well, solid amount of "french language" but that´s allright in my book for a film like that.

Personaly I don´t like handheld - even if it is motivated - but that´s just a personal fetish.
The framing could have bin a bit tighter and on a longer lens sometimes, but if you go handheld without shouldermount in a appartment I understand the problems.

Otherwise I really enjoyed this one Rodney - great job and nice twist at the end.

Frank

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks for checking it out. I totally agree with the framing. I am at work and it is KILLING me that I can't watch anything for another 4 hours!

[Postmaster]

To tense your nerves a bit further - I already watched 4 out of 6 zip containers of Loss Fest - and there are some real gems in there.

Have a nice day at work :evil: hehehe!

Frank

[Richard J. Johnson]

To tense your nevers a bit further - I already watched 4 out of 6 zip containers of Loss Fest - and there are some real gems in there.

Have a nice day at work :evil: hehehe!

Frank

You are a cruel human being.:crybaby:

[lordambrai]

Best plot so far! And I KNEW the ending man, it was sick. Awesome writting, loved the ladies. It was like the more "effeminate" pulp fiction with all the same attitude.

I'll mirror what the other guys said, framing. The location was kinda bleh, but at the same time it works in it's simplicity. It's not trying to wow you like that, but just tell a story. I liked the pacing too. It took it's time and every other line turns into a plot point.

Ultimately... awesome

[Zim]

That was good. Some good lines in there too. Nice work.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks for the comments! I really appreciate them. I was going for a kind of pulp thing. I really don't know if I achieved that as far a writing though.

I was not totally happy with this one in terms of audio and focus, But I decided to enter it anyway just to get some input on what I did right and what I did wrong.

I get off in 15 minutes and 23 seconds and I can't wait to get home and start watching some movies.

[warau]

I bet this was a fun one to shoot! I liked the characters you created. Nice payoff at the end. Not bad for a quick short!

[Chris Messineo]

I thought this was fun.

I especially liked the opening sequence. It had a great energy and pace to it.

You characters and dialogue were cool, as someone else mentioned, it reminded me of QT's style.

I didn't see the end coming until we got there and I thought it was a clever twist.

[timbook2]

nice plot!

I didnt like the lingo, it came over too artsy IMO

Quentinish as hell...:Drogar-Love(DBG):

[seductivepuppy]

some very cool work. i really dug your three leads. they worked great when onscreen together. though, to nitpick, i woulda liked a more meaty gun shot effect.

[Marlon Ladd]

Man, nice work! I really liked this one. I liked the story and I think the girls did a wonderful acting job. This was very professional and I'm impressed with it. The only thing I think you can improve would be the sound fx, the gunshots and the phone dropping. If you ever need any sound fx let me know, because I have a full library. The other small little minor thing that I noticed was that the blood on the sheet looked a little pink and maybe there wasn't enough of it. I really liked how you pulled everything off without really having to actually show it, like the gunshots.

[MrKilloran]

It was a good short, some definite chemistry with your leads, really liked the "shit my bad" exchange but pacing in the middle seemed... off.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Man, nice work! I really liked this one. I liked the story and I think the girls did a wonderful acting job. This was very professional and I'm impressed with it. The only thing I think you can improve would be the sound fx, the gunshots and the phone dropping. If you ever need any sound fx let me know, because I have a full library. The other small little minor thing that I noticed was that the blood on the sheet looked a little pink and maybe there wasn't enough of it. I really liked how you pulled everything off without really having to actually show it, like the gunshots.

Thanks for the comments. ANd my SFX library does indeed suck.:( I am glad you liked it. Your film was very cool. There was no thread for it though.

[Richard J. Johnson]

I thought this was fun.

I especially liked the opening sequence. It had a great energy and pace to it.

You characters and dialogue were cool, as someone else mentioned, it reminded me of QT's style.

I didn't see the end coming until we got there and I thought it was a clever twist.

Thanks chris. I'm glad you checked it out.

[armisiano]

I loved this. The opening sequence was really great, cutting that together between the title cards is perfect. I love that it managed to be funny surrounding such an awkward and dark situation. The gal with the slightly fairer skin, Jace I believe, sexy hair. I know that's random, but hey, sexy hair never hurts a movie. (she needs new headshots, the one on the fist post doesn't do her justice) Anyway, back on topic. There were a couple things you can improve on, just technical execution, but it was a really fun and entertaining short, and the twist at the end I didn't see coming, the END END, I saw as soon as she picked up her phone, but the real twist I had no idea. Nice job. Go ComedyFest.

[Lawsuit_Boy]

It's interesting the way you sort of bring up the idea of gender bending and LGBT in this piece (although in a way that sociologists would have a field day with). It added humor to the already funny situation.

The dialogue was delivered fairly well by your leading women. They were really fun to watch and the scene when they're down in the living room (after the first event) was really a delight to watch most of the time. There were a few moments when character seemed to be broken, but it wasn't too distracting.

The sound was very solid all the way through and the music was a nice accent. I actually feel like I enjoyed this one more than The Puppeteer. You've got a solid sense of comedic timing and direction of scenes. The gun shot should have been louder. It would have been ringing in such a room as that.

The only other thing I could comment on was the sudden shift from darkly humorous to a melodramatic edge. It felt like too much of a throw the other way to me. I feel like you could have made a very tensely dramatic and intense film by the way it ended, or made a film made entirely of dark comedy. it didn't seem to hit a balance.

Fun viewing though. Great effort! :beer:

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thank you for the feedback. It just makes me realize that I need to look deeper into my own films and really decide how I want the audience to feel.

And SEXY never hurts a movie. check Jace out on facebook. You would like her pics.

"GO comedyfest" LMAO.

[Mark Harris]

The actors were wonderful. All seemed to play off of one another nicely and be really really natural on screen. I don't know how much directing you did, or if they just got there and played off one another, but the end result was really nice.

I felt like I wanted something more out of the story though. Like you start with a really pregnant situation. So I would love to see you use something like that to explore more options for it. Right now, it plays a little like a Tarantino rip-off. But the world is full of those. So why not next time look at the premise and see where ELSE it can go. I mean, this situation can take you into soooo much fun, dark comedy. Which you seem to have an eye for.

You def have the chops and the talent on your team. Now just keep pushing yourself to get better, explore more, dig deeper.

Good work!!!!

[ramsaur]

Great acting, great plot, and wasn't expecting the twist at the end. Great job!

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thank you for the critiques and compliments. For you to not think my movie sucks is a wonderful thing.

I totally agree. I wanted to go pulpish. And since I read your post. ideas rushed into my head about som other places it could have went. I will get better for sure.


The actors were wonderful. All seemed to play off of one another nicely and be really really natural on screen. I don't know how much directing you did, or if they just got there and played off one another, but the end result was really nice.

I felt like I wanted something more out of the story though. Like you start with a really pregnant situation. .

You def have the chops and the talent on your team. Now just keep pushing yourself to get better, explore more, dig deeper.

Good work!!!!

[Blaine]

I enjoyed it. I think it could have been better but it was still fun. The opening held so much promise that wasn't quite delivered on. There were a lot of good lines of dialogue but this started to feel like talking heads as it went on.



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I think you telegraphed the ending the first time the friend was going to call her husband.

I think it would have been a great to explore how she dealt with the friend after the ordeal. She obviously knew and I would have thought she would have played that up.

[jasonthewho]

This was a really fun film. Dark and funny. The three actresses are all great with some great lines.

There was some repetitiveness, with the one girl asking why she's got a dead body in her living room way after they've already been talking about it for several minutes.

I think it would have been cool if the shot of the three girls looking down at the dead body had from a low angle. I kind of saw the girls as the Macbeth witches. Is that weird?

The end was effective, especially the way the music comes in.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks for checking it out. In hindsight and reading some of the comments, I could have done so much more with this film. Now if only I could go back in time.


This was a really fun film. Dark and funny. The three actresses are all great with some great lines.

There was some repetitiveness, with the one girl asking why she's got a dead body in her living room way after they've already been talking about it for several minutes.

I think it would have been cool if the shot of the three girls looking down at the dead body had from a low angle. I kind of saw the girls as the Macbeth witches. Is that weird?

The end was effective, especially the way the music comes in.

[singleframe]

i enjoyed it..kept me intrigued all the way through...nice twist at end.
great opening sequence!

gooo Maryland! that's my home state.

[Richard J. Johnson]

MD stand up!! Glad you liked it.


i enjoyed it..kept me intrigued all the way through...nice twist at end.
great opening sequence!

gooo Maryland! that's my home state.

[sean90291]

Right on. I finally get to see some of your work, and I'm really impressed. Felt like an original voice. Great characters and great direction. Loved the choices of shots and what you choose to reveal/hide. I felt the subject matter was incredibly powerful (and I liked how you're using humor to explore it). It's topical and worth exploring, but the film let me down a tad in that the treatment of it all was a little bit superficial. And I don't mean the ending--that did surpise me--I loved it. What I mean is that you're dealing with an explosive topic, which is exactly what the art of filmmaking is made for. So you could have fine tuned the treatment of the topic so it had a more definite point of view that lived up to the strength of your direction. If you'd done that, this short would get quadruple the amount of attention! Because you nail the rest.

[hawaiiirish]

There were some funny parts in this; I laughed at the interactions between the three ladies. Not sure about the ending - I understood it, just not sure about the motivation for the final action.

anyway, good work!

[Spear670]

This film wasn't for me. I'm glad there are people out there who liked it though. Nothing personal, I like that it was made for friends who just wanted to swear a lot, I always support that.

[Robbie Comeau]

Nice!

Good acting, that really helped with this, although SOME dialog bugged me.

Neat story as well, and I'm glad it ended off negative/sad.

I'll give a godo rating for this!

Robbie

[Rodney V. Smith]

Dude that was seriously screwed up.. I had to listen to that with my headphones on. My wife turned and gave me "the look". I see you let your actors go completely wild with the swearing. And now come to think of it, I really didn;t even hear that much swearing for the entire fest. Your actors may have more than made up for what the rest of us didn't get in.

This pieces wasn;t as bad as you let on. It was actually competent. It had a beginning, middle and and end, with a conflict to be resolved. Sure there were some technical and stylistic issues with it, but I watched it all the way through to the end.

and yes now that I have a kid i've turned into some kind of swearing prude.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

I think I like this better than your other entry. :)

The story works for me, as messed up as it is. I could see the ending coming just before the girl went to take a look under the blanket but that didn't ruin it at all. The performances were also spot on. It just worked.

Get your blood looking real (in both entries) and you won't have me falling out of it.

Very nice work!

MAH

[SMarston]

This film had me laughing from beginning to end. really well played out.. and the man being gay as the twist was great! my only concern is that im not exactly sure how the title plays into the actual film.

:)

[Imaginate]

Great story premise. I like the idea of doing something simple but high impact with a good twist at the end. Your choice of music at the beginning and seemed too comedic right after she kills her friend... Your actors did a great job, but they all seemed to have the same voice and the same set of rules that they were motivated by. The language is great... but the impact is weak when all the characters have that same voice.

I think its more interesting when each character have different rules that govern their behavior... like one of them stutters or one remains silent .. or only answers in one word responses.

[Norm Sanders]

This had some GREAT laugh out loud moments, especially at the beginning (heck, even the credit of ONE TAKE MEL got me). You actually had some good writing/dialogue in some of those spots, and I DO realize some people swear that much in every sentence, but I'm not used to it personally and so did find it disruptive.

I WONDERED if it was one of those women's husbands that was under the sheet, and knew it when she was going to make the call. Other than her friend being a complete lunatic, not sure why she called them over unless she was planning to kill them all anyway, since she was actually wanting their help with the body on the couch, etc.

Overall, I feel THE PUPETEER was a stronger film for you.

[Brian Parker]

Wow man...lol...nice film. I laughed out loud a couple of times. You touched on a topic that isn't really seen that much. The three women did have some good chemistry. Are they friends in real life?

On the technical side, you got some good stuff going here. Nice shot composition and pacing and having seen the story, I see why you wanted to go with the 6 minute continuous take. My two nitpicks have been mentioned...get some real boom to the gunshots and some dark red blood...dude would have been leaking after two shots.

It seems to me like you kind of considered this your secondary short and I haven't watched Puppeteer yet but this one can stand on it's own. Good job man.

Oh, and Jace......oh yes.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks for the compliments and especially the critiques! They are valued and taken seriously.

I really thought that EVERYONE would hate this film. My AD convinced me to actually send it in. I am glad some of you like it. There are plenty of mistakes on this one and some of you are very kind souls for looking past them.:Drogar-Evil(DBG):

As far as the cursing goes, I knew it could turn some people off but Me and my wife swear so much all of the dialog sounds normal to us. :) I really wanted to write something fun and raunchy that the girls could run with.

[Richard J. Johnson]

I think I like this better than your other entry. :)


Very nice work!

MAH

Man, I did not think ANYONE would say that. that is great to hear.

[Richard J. Johnson]

This had some GREAT laugh out loud moments, especially at the beginning (heck, even the credit of ONE TAKE MEL got me). You actually had some good writing/dialogue in some of those spots, and I DO realize some people swear that much in every sentence, but I'm not used to it personally and so did find it disruptive.

Overall, I feel THE PUPETEER was a stronger film for you.

I had never met Mel before that day. And had no idea what his last name was. He just kept getting everything in one take, and kept yelling "one take Mel"!! so I just ran with it.

Glad you liked it.

[Sprocketboy]

Hey, Richard. I like your funny dark side. I also liked all your actors. They all had very different voice. Much of your dialogue paid off. There are some issues with DP/Cinematography that could have made the film more powerful. There was a moment when the camera swung around like a home movie camera, not like a camera intentionally working with the actors to tell a story. You're smart guy. You know what I'm talking about. The sound went hollow a couple of times. It took me out, but I stayed with it. I like where you placed your quiet moments. You created a nice pace.

The language is heavy, but real. I would keep the curse words, but remove a few to make it funnier. I know this amazing Australian DP who could curse circles around those girls. I'm going to start following you in this forum. You have amazing potential. Keep them coming.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thank you for watching it. The sound was not good on this one. And yes I know exactly what you're talking about. LOL. If you know a girl that could out curse these 3 then you have someone real special on your hands. I am glad you could look past the flaws and enjoy it. thank you


Hey, Richard. I like your funny dark side. I also liked all your actors. They all had very different voice. Much of your dialogue paid off. There are some issues with DP/Cinematography that could have made the film more powerful. There was a moment when the camera swung around like a home movie camera, not like a camera intentionally working with the actors to tell a story. You're smart guy. You know what I'm talking about. The sound went hollow a couple of times. It took me out, but I stayed with it. I like where you placed your quiet moments. You created a nice pace.

The language is heavy, but real. I would keep the curse words, but remove a few to make it funnier. I know this amazing Australian DP who could curse circles around those girls. I'm going to start following you in this forum. You have amazing potential. Keep them coming.

[alex whitmer]

Vast difference from your other entry.

The attention to detail on the set here is very painterly. The use of the three basics of red, black, and yellow mixed with the gorgeous and warm skin tones makes this one of nicest set and character collages in the fest.

What really works next is to have this warm and inviting atmosphere act as a dichotomy to the FU bitch and the violence. I love the incongruous nature of it.

Really enjoyed the film a lot. Beautiful to watch, and a solid story to support it, and visa-versa.

Well done ...

aw


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[Richard J. Johnson]

Thank you for the comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Man, I had to look up some of those words. Just make sure you actually did like it. : )

[Ryanrjack]

Thank you for the comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Man, I had to look up some of those words. Just make sure you actually did like it. : )

LOL! I found myself doing the same thing after reading Alex's post!

But anyway, I thought this was effective, but I saw the ending coming. I liked it, but not as much as The Puppeteer.

Ryan

[Marlon Ladd]

As far as the cursing goes, I knew it could turn some people off but Me and my wife swear so much all of the dialog sounds normal to us. :) I really wanted to write something fun and raunchy that the girls could run with.

I wouldn't even worry about the cursing. That's just how we get down sometimes. We say "f*7k" and "motha' f@#Ka' and mean that sh*t!

[Marlon Ladd]

Thanks for the comments. ANd my SFX library does indeed suck.:( I am glad you liked it. Your film was very cool. There was no thread for it though.
No, man. I got a thread! I don't know why they didn't put it up. Click on the link below and give me a critique.

[Richard J. Johnson]

No, man. I got a thread! I don't know why they didn't put it up. Click on the link below and give me a critique.

No doubt. Thanks.

[Will Clegg]

Richard, this was funny as hell. I was laughing from the get go - those ladies are great. There were a few moments where their reactions were not quite believable, but they were so funny that I was willing to overlook it.

I think I would have liked a more specific look to this film - maybe something a little darker and more contrasty since the comedy is so dark. Overall, great job.

[Geoff_R]

That was a cool twist at the end. Liked how you took a well-known plot and made it your own and changed it up. It had a lot of funny moments! Yea, the SFX and location sound could have been improved but it didn't distract me from following your story. You had a lot of dialogue but it came across naturally and effectively. Nicely done!

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks Will. I am glad you enjoyed it.

I am still working on my grading skills and I must have tried 5 different grades on this film and ended up using the very first one.

I am just trying to stay out of sucktown.


Richard, this was funny as hell. I was laughing from the get go - those ladies are great. There were a few moments where their reactions were not quite believable, but they were so funny that I was willing to overlook it.

I think I would have liked a more specific look to this film - maybe something a little darker and more contrasty since the comedy is so dark. Overall, great job.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Geoff I am happy you looked past the flaws and stayed with it. considering how well made your film was that is just a great compliment. Thanks for checking it out.

It's funny to me that I have been a recording engineer since the 90's and sound is one my of weakest areas on film. It is totally different than sitting behind a console and sliding faders.



That was a cool twist at the end. Liked how you took a well-known plot and made it your own and changed it up. It had a lot of funny moments! Yea, the SFX and location sound could have been improved but it didn't distract me from following your story. You had a lot of dialogue but it came across naturally and effectively. Nicely done!

[Gbaez]

wow.. the shot where the three girls were looking at the body was funny, well played. the language is heavy,but it added a sort of realism for me, given the situation. the opening music was a great choice.

i had a hunch something was up when she said the other body was upstairs
i thought: why didnt she say that until now? why would she drag him all the way downstairs and sit him up? but the end somewhat answered it for me.


overall.. this is a great short....

[Richard J. Johnson]

Thanks G I'm glad you enjoyed it.


wow.. the shot where the three girls were looking at the body was funny, well played. the language is heavy,but it added a sort of realism for me, given the situation. the opening music was a great choice.

i had a hunch something was up when she said the other body was upstairs
i thought: why didnt she say that until now? why would she drag him all the way downstairs and sit him up? but the end somewhat answered it for me.


overall.. this is a great short....

[ZazaCast]

THAT was fun! Great story idea... well executed (pun intended)!!!
Keep these jewels comin'. The girls did a great job.

[Richard J. Johnson]

LOL. Thank you Zaza! I'm glad you liked it.


THAT was fun! Great story idea... well executed (pun intended)!!!
Keep these jewels comin'. The girls did a great job.

[orchidsofwrath]

That was awesome! With a really great ending. Easy to follow (which shows good continuity and plot flow). Very entertaining I enjoyed it. I thought the acting was pretty damn solid. It wasn't dubious for a moment (accept for the whole context in general of them being that calm considering the situation but it worked for the film) I don't know anyone who says the F word that much though. Even in stressfull situations. I think I would have tuned it down just a bit.

[Richard J. Johnson]

Very cool! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Me and my wife curse so much it seems norm to me, which aint a good thing, LOL.
Coming from you it means a lot. Thank you


That was awesome! With a really great ending. Easy to follow (which shows good continuity and plot flow). Very entertaining I enjoyed it. I thought the acting was pretty damn solid. It wasn't dubious for a moment (accept for the whole context in general of them being that calm considering the situation but it worked for the film) I don't know anyone who says the F word that much though. Even in stressfull situations. I think I would have tuned it down just a bit.

[hoz]

really liked this flick! liked the quick pace you gave it. dialogue and acting were strong. the curses worked so i'd keep em in. the killer is too cool, she's really good! story was perfect for a 6 minute limit, just enough to have a blast with. parts of it ( esp the shot with the 3 looking over the shot guy ) were very tarantino to me. the women being calm added to it as well, good choice. it made them look much more experienced in all sorts of things and added to the story.

i liked it a lot! good work!!

[Richard J. Johnson]

really liked this flick! liked the quick pace you gave it. dialogue and acting were strong. the curses worked so i'd keep em in. the killer is too cool, she's really good! story was perfect for a 6 minute limit, just enough to have a blast with. parts of it ( esp the shot with the 3 looking over the shot guy ) were very tarantino to me. the women being calm added to it as well, good choice. it made them look much more experienced in all sorts of things and added to the story.

i liked it a lot! good work!!

Thanks Hoz! Very cool you enjoyed it. The pulpness was kind of intentional. I didn't want to stroll into Rip-off land just tip toe around the borders.:beer:

Thanks again for checking it out.

[John LaBonney]

Looks like something you did quick and fun, and looks like you got something out of it. I did enjoy the actors playing off of one another.

[Richard J. Johnson]

You called that exactly right. Thanks for checking it out. :laugh:


Looks like something you did quick and fun, and looks like you got something out of it. I did enjoy the actors playing off of one another.

[Luis_]

I did not like it

[Chad_from_Chad]

Hmm, I like the story and all, I didn't understand why she kept shooting everyone though. Not only why was she still holding the gun, but why didn't anyone try taking it from her, or make her put it away? Fun dialogue though, I liked the performances.

[Richard J. Johnson]

I did not like it

This one was definately not for everyone. It was fun to shoot though.