POSSIBLE CHARLIE - One Man's Loss is Another Man's Loss

[stinkpot]

THIS IS OUR FIRST DVXUSER FEST AND WE ARE PUMPED!

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Synopsis:

Charlie's life had been normal until the day he woke up in the street. With no help from the authorities, Charlie is forced to take action against the man who stole his life. With a little help from some friends he constructs a devilish plan which, if goes as planned, will reunite him with his wife.

Other various media coming very soon.

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----------- INTRODUCING THE CAST OF POSSIBLE CHARLIE ----------------

http://designographic.com/charlie/robin_web.jpg http://designographic.com/charlie/tom_web.jpg http://designographic.com/charlie/mark_web.jpg http://designographic.com/charlie/fallon_web.jpg http://designographic.com/charlie/tiffeny_web.jpg


----------------------------- FRAME GRABS -------------------------------------

Here are a few frame grabs (minor color grading but no cc)...

http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_02.jpg 1. http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_04.jpg 2.


http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_05.jpg 3. http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_07.jpg 4.

Okay... added some frame grabs from shooting day 3. Everyone worked hard to get the job done (not a Bob the Builder reference).

Stay tuned.

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---------------------- BEHINE THE SCENES ------------------------------

_______BTS shots from our first shoot_________________________

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Base camp with the crew hard at work.

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On set.

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It says here, "To start recording, press the red button".

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Between takes.


_______BTS from shoot #2_________________________________

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Bouncing light on a beautiful day.

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Setting up a shot.

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DVX100

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Getting down to business.

[ZazaCast]

Welcome & best of luck!

[John LaBonney]

Welcome and good luck. Do you think it will be a tight squeeze to fit that synopsis in six minutes?

[pauly_the_hitman]

Sounds interesting. Good Luck.
Pauly

[stinkpot]

Thanks all. I'm really looking forward this fest.

The synopsis does make it sound a bit like a feature but the actual script works for the 6 minutes. The real squeeze will come wrapping production and having everything edited, scored, output and uploaded by the deadline.

I'll try to toss the poster online tonight.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Very interesting. Good luck!

Mike

[stinkpot]

Thanks!

Everything is coming together nicely.

[Simon Höfer]

Thats good to hear! Welcome to the fest :) Have a lot of fun!

[ZazaCast]

Great poster too!!

[hoz]

i love the title and the blurb. simple and original! awesome.

[mark_Cray]

hey everyone, I'm Mark Cray and I have the fortunate pleasure of being cast in "Possible Charlie" and I just wanted let everyone know how excited I am to be a part of this short film. The script is awesome and I believe everyone will be in for quite a treat when they see the final product.

[stinkpot]

Thanks for the comments on the poster and blurb.

The cast pics have been posted. I am extremely excited to be working with this group of talented people (thanks for posting Mark)...

Stand by for BTS once we get on set!

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[Dustin R. Rogan]

Welcome! I'll be watching out for this one!

Rogan

[stinkpot]

Wow. I haven't visited this thread in a while... been too busy planning, shooting rough cutting and trying to work my day job to post.

Thanks for the welcome.

I have finally added some BTS pics and some frame grabs from our first shoot. Check 'em out... Page 1 of thread (http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=147351).

[Mike Manning]

Grabs look great...
You know you're shootin' movies when you got the EZ-Ups... hehe... good luck!

[mark_Cray]

The New BTS pics look AWESOME! cant wait to shoot this sunday.. should be a blast!

[Simon Höfer]

Yeah, grabs are looking good! And your location also looks interesting :)

[gabrielflorit]

Great grabs.

[stinkpot]

Thanks for the compliments guys. Hopefully I can switch up to some new grabs by next week.

Mark, this Sunday should be a blast... shooting two scenes fast and furious.
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[Anthony Pierce]

Grabs look great

[mark_Cray]

The BTS shots look great! it was a blast working on the scenes yesterday and cant wait to see how it comes out.

[RobinFrank]

This was a really fun shoot, great people to work with and a hell of a lot of dedication to craft was put into it. It should turn out to be cinematic and fun to watch. A nice, eery, Twilight Zone feel to the film's shoot with subtle messages and great shots. For a tiny and tight production, the director and writer/ PA did an excellent job pulling it all together while creating a unique vision.

Great work Sage and Peter! You're hellava good guys to work for.

~Robin

[jefflebowski]

I appreciate all the kind words (except Robin's rant). It was a fun filled event for me too. We were very fortunate to have found such talent. Thanks everyone!
Peter

[stinkpot]

Well, the rough cut is done and now comes the hard part... cutting it down to 6 minutes!

This has been a great experience for me as a filmmaker and as a person. I have learned a tremendous amount by making this film and plan to learn much more and make many more films in the future.

The cast and crew have been a real delight to work with. Everyone's dedication to this project and to the art of filmmaking was absolutely inspiring. Also, the generosity of our friends was indispensable to this project.

Stay tuned for more updates and get ready for POSSIBLE CHARLIE!
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[Simon Höfer]

Congrats for the rough cut! Good to see that others are also really enjoying this :) Looking forward to your entry!

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

Stay tuned for more updates and get ready for POSSIBLE CHARLIE!
:beer:I want some POSSIBLE GRABS! :beer:

[Simon Höfer]

I want some POSSIBLE GRABS! :beer:
Ah, yeah, forgot to mention that. GRABS! :D

[stinkpot]

I want some POSSIBLE GRABS! :beer:


Ah, yeah, forgot to mention that. GRABS! :D

Here's some grabs... (with some color grading) :beer:

http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_02.jpg 1. http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_04.jpg 2.


http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_05.jpg 3. http://designographic.com/charlie/PC_img_07.jpg 4.

Thanks for checking it out!

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

NICE! This is looking very good. Can't wait to see it.

Cheers,

Mike

[stinkpot]

1:25 AM Friday evening. I got it down to 5 minutes and 56 seconds without credits. 4 seconds of credits will be hard to read but we are THERE!
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[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

If you can fit all the credits on one frame I would do that. It was suggested to me.
Online the video stops on the final frame and stays there for as long as the video is left open. That way the credits don't fly by.

As long as you can fit everyone in on that one frame. Impossible for some, easy for others.

Cheers,

Mike

[stinkpot]

If you can fit all the credits on one frame I would do that. It was suggested to me.
Online the video stops on the final frame and stays there for as long as the video is left open. That way the credits don't fly by.

As long as you can fit everyone in on that one frame. Impossible for some, easy for others.

Cheers,

Mike

That's good point. Thanks Mike. Our list is sizable but we can definitely fit it within our 4 seconds especially when the last frame is stopped.
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[RobinFrank]

I Can't wait to see the final cut. You could to the traditional style of credits where they all appear in the beginning and are left out of the end.

[mark_Cray]

That is AWESOME about the final cut! glad to see we made it to the 6min mark and look forward to seeing it.

[stinkpot]

Special thanks to JJ for getting some musical mood added to this film!

Possible Charlie has been uploaded and is awaiting approval. I am very excited just to have it completed and in on time.

Great job and huge thanks to everyone involved!

Now it's on to editing the director's cut (which will be over six minutes :) ).

GOOD LUCK TO EVERYONE IN THE FEST!
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[Tim Joy]

Congrats on finishing!

Looking forward to it.

[alex whitmer]

Congrats on the upload. See you at the fest!!

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[gabrielflorit]

Congratulations on the upload. I like your grading work, subtle. Wicked backlight on the top-right grab. Was that the sun?

[ZazaCast]

This looks like quite the production... I wouldn't know what to do with all that help! Great BTS shots. Cool locations...and might I add the grab really pop! looking forward to this one too.

[stinkpot]

This looks like quite the production... I wouldn't know what to do with all that help! Great BTS shots. Cool locations...and might I add the grab really pop! looking forward to this one too.

Thanks man. There were plenty of times when I didn't know what to do with all the help... but for the most part, I'm glad I had it. I'm still somewhat new at making films (this being my first actual production).

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[Danielleus]

Hey,

Nice poster and grabs. Looks good and looks fun. Can't wait to see this one.

[mark_Cray]

YAY for us! "Possbible Charlie" is all approved and waiting for our viewing pleasure. *crosses fingers and waits for viewing day*

[stinkpot]

Hey,

Nice poster and grabs. Looks good and looks fun. Can't wait to see this one.

Thanks! :beer:


YAY for us! "Possbible Charlie" is all approved and waiting for our viewing pleasure. *crosses fingers and waits for viewing day*

Just saw it was approved. Phew! I'm stoked!

.

[Brian Parker]

Welcome to the fest. The story sounds infuriating in s good way. Nice grabs. Good luck!

[Jack Daniel Stanley]

Yep. Interesting synopsis. Makes me wanna see.
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[stinkpot]

Welcome to the fest. The story sounds infuriating in s good way. Nice grabs. Good luck!

Thank you.


Yep. Interesting synopsis. Makes me wanna see.
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And thank you.

I am looking forward to each of your films as well Champloo and Jack. Since downloading is open... let the viewing begin!

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[Zim]

I liked your film. Good ending.

[stinkpot]

Thanks!

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[hoz]

first off, your movie has the coolest name!


SPOILER DOWN BELOW!!!!!






loved the beginning where the bum goes off into describing what happened to the charlie. great look and music to it, it really worked for me. i wanted to see what would happen!

i also loved how you used the 6 minutes! it felt like a much longer piece ( and i mean this in a strong way, you paced out your movie in such a good way )

charlie's acting was really good! the bum was good too, as stated before he was great with his beginning statement, but his stare seemed a bit off, too concentrated onto charlie maybe, a guy who may have also lost it all would be a lot more lost or angry or something, but not only on charlie and his problems. of course im not sure what the bum was exactly!

awesome shot at 3.44 where charlie comes back to the bum wanting answers. this really worked for me.

also loved the fake charlie's answer to charlie after charlie pulls the gun on him. fake charlie acted real well and the dialogue was strong here too!

liked the ending! wish we had more time to see what was going and why charlie? ( i think this is a huge compliment because i want to see more! )

great work!!! do you have an extension for this movie?

[stinkpot]

Thank you hoz for the extensive feedback. I'm really glad you enjoyed our movie. The shot-specific comments really help!

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[clarkage]

I really enjoyed this entry! I haven't finished watching all the fest entries but this one is definitely in my top 5 so far! I am really impressed with how this came out and may i just say the acting in this was great! Awesome job and keep up the good work!

[galbach]

Looking forward to watching this one... Need 50 posts to vote...

[Richard J. Johnson]

GOOD film. I agree the shot with the bum sitting against the brick wall was nuts. Good film. I Thought the real charlie did a decent job. I really wished it could have been longer so we could see how the life theft was done.

[ZazaCast]

Very good film! Good acting all around, but the bum was best. I notice a little sound trouble here & there...wind and handling noise, etc... but no biggie. I don't know if the story is completely clear and I was a little lost on the end.

Great job to all involved!

[chstick]

I'm a little more than half way through the films and am sad to say a lot of filmmakers have missed the whole "Twilight Zone" point.

However, you guys NAILED IT. Good story. Well done.

[Michael Anthony Horrigan]

I think I saw these actors last fest, or I'm having a weird dejavu. :)

I loved this one!
You really got me at the end. I asked myself... "How did I not see this coming?"
That means you did your job very well. I thought the acting was pretty good, especially the lead.
A little noisy in spots but not terrible.
Nailed the theme as well which is nice to see.

Great job, man.

Mike

[stinkpot]

Clarkage, thank you for the compliments and I am really happy you enjoyed it. I will pass the compliments along to the cast.

Galbach, I hope you like it. Thanks for check out the thread :)

Filthrich, I agree, doing something further with his life being stolen would add an element of excitement that's hard to capture in six minutes.

ZazaCast, the sound was my own biggest gripe. I definitely learned some lessons in capturing sound the hard way.... which "the hard way" is the only way I learn anything. I'm glad you enjoyed it over all. As for the clarity of plot/end, we had to chop several lines of dialog to get it down to six minutes that may (or may not) have explained a little more.

Chstick, thank you! There are many good films this time around (I'm still in the first 1/3rd of the list working my way down)... so your compliment means a lot. Thanks for watching it.

Mike, as far as I know, this is the first time our cast has been on DVXuser so I think the dejavu is real. I'm happy that the ending worked! Thanks for watching our film and the kind words.

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[hawaiiirish]

I'm looking forward to viewing your film. Good luck with Twilight Fest. Screen grabs and locations look interesting to me.

[Tim Joy]

You succeeded where many others were weak- a real Twilight ending that leaves you thinking.
I was a little confused for a second afterwards, but when I wrapped my brain around it, I came up with "my" answer to what happened and it was really cool and unexpected.

Another place you succeeded was the beginning. You established the story and the "problem" early on. I can't tell you how much I appreciate this, because too many of these movies make you wonder what it's about until 5:39... or worse... never.

Call it formulaic if you will, but I think a 6-minute movie has to establish the story within the first minute or so, take you on a journey to find a solution for a few minutes, come to a climax and end with a twist or a bang. (literally in your case) Yours did all of those, and with some nice camerawork in there too.

I liked the dolly move at 2:00 when he walks away to go home the first time. I also like the move when the bum hands him the gun. i thought you could've continued up to see his hesitant reaction instead of cutting, but the intent was there.

There was a little trouble blowing out highlights and shots matching between one another. Some issues looked like the difference between clouds blocking the sun, and then not for other angles. A tough thing to work with anywhere else but 367-days-a-year sunny southern Cali. I would suggest you always have the zebra stripes on and make sure you don't see them, if you already don't use this feature. The other matching problems were just color correction issues, easily fixable.

I liked the character of the bum, but felt that you're guy was a little "clean". Movie bums are always the drunk, extra dirty, you-can-smell-them-through-the-screen, stumbly, nutcases with tans that many are in real life. I think if he had some dirt and some drunkeness it would've sold better, because we should think he's really crazy, that way when the guy comes back to him for advice it has a bigger impact and realization moment. As an idea to add another layer to the story, you could hint that the bum was conspiring with the other Charlie, especially in the moment he passes the gun??? That idea might suck...

The only other criticism I have was that the music could've done a lot more for you. It was nice and simple, but could've played more on the Twilightness and been a bit bigger. Just as an excercise, you might try placing music from The Exorcist or similar over your ending especially, but even the Charlie scenes and see what it does to elevate the tension and mood.

Overall a solid journey, interesting story, some good visuals, and an ending that creeped me out. Good job!

[Brian Parker]

I can't figure out who your lead actor reminds me of but as soon as he spoke, I thought of another actor...maybe Michael Madsen...

Anyway, I can see that you really embraced the Twilight theme here and it worked. Great twist at the end.

SPOILERS:
My favorite shot was the closeup of the main character at the end. The DOF and lighting on that one was awesome. I also liked the way the I.D. theft guy walked away at the end, saying his line. Pretty cool.

There is only one thing that bothered me and it really is just a nitpick. I feel almost bad mentioning it but in the interest of giving a well-rounded, honest feedback, here goes. When the homeless guy was listing off everything the main character stood to lose as a result of his identity being stolen, it seemed to go on forever. "You house...your wife...your life...that little credenza you stole from your third year college roommate...everything." That's my only thing. Told you it was a nitpick.

Great work. Enjoyed it.

[stinkpot]

Yeehaanow, I can't thank you enough for this review! The extensiveness and constructiveness of your post is greatly helpful to me. You are correct about the variable lighting due to cloud cover, etc. These are thing that I definitely need to work on. I agree that we should have dirtied our homeless guy up quite a bit more ;)

Champloo, we wanted to do a lot more with that ending shot than we had time or lighting for. I'm really glad that you liked it and got the feel off from it. Don't feel bad about critiquing the film... this is the stuff that I want to hear so I know the kind of things to improve upon. It's not a nit pick, I see what you are saying about that shot. We even had to do our dolly push way slower there.

Thanks for the feedback! I am going down the list in order and I look forward to checking out your films as well.

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[pauly_the_hitman]

I thought the story rocked and I got it right away. Good job.
Pauly

[RobinFrank]

Tim Robbins, not Michael Madson, Tim Robbins, that's who I remind you of, or, Robin has a step father named Tim, heh! Thanks for all the feedback so far on my performance. I think Sage did an excellent job pulling out good takes on such a tight schedule. Being my own worst enemy I can see the points where I did less than decent and where I could have concentrated more. It was a great learning experience and working with Sage and Peter helps an actor really become more comfortable in scenes. (Except when they have to say "Megan" 25 times. hah! sorry, I'm a ball-buster.)

[Mile Bozicevic]

Nice flick, I loved the twilightishness in it.

At the beggining, Charlie tries to leave the homeless guy going on one side, but after more conversation, he leaves on the other side. That kinda confused me, and I guess it could be judged in two ways-
1) he wanted to go to police, then after the conversation he left for home
2) he actually didn't know where he is so he left randomly
3) you didn't think od it:D

The end also confused me-why the man(second Charlie) suddenly started to look feared when Charlie took out the gun? He stated clearly that there' no more comeback for Charlie, yet he tried to help him at the end, and here I can't find logic. What's the use to him if he helps him? Is he just playing or I misheard something?

Beside that, I think there's not too much to say here. Great story, very good performance, and I like the end.

And of course, I wanted to know more about the homeless person (you could put some tiny things that point to his former existence), and it is a little weird he had a gun. Well, nothing is really weird in Twilight zone i guess...

:D

[John LaBonney]

Very clever story. Enjoyed it. Nothing to mention technically that hasn't already been said, but I really did like the bum character. He's visually interesting.

[stinkpot]

Pauly, I'm glad you enjoyed our flick! Thanks for checking it out.

Robin, thank you for clearing up the whole "who you sound like" thing. :)

Mile, number 1 is the correct answer. It played out well in my head but when I went to cut it, it did strike me as kind of odd too. It would flow better to have let him leave the same way but I was too anxious to try out that pivot shot. Oh well. As for the second Charlie, we did not intend for his character to be completely evil and void of compassion. He was just supposed to be a two-bit opportunist... he didn't want anyone to die. Thank you for the extensive feedback. I do appreciate it!

John, thanks for watching! We definitely had fun with that character.

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[Mike Insane]

I have to say i liked the story. I think there are a few audio issues that distracted me but all in all I really enjoyed the film.

[stinkpot]

I have to say i liked the story. I think there are a few audio issues that distracted me but all in all I really enjoyed the film.

I have to hand it to our writer (Peter). He really came through.

The audio issues are my biggest gripe as well. Huge lesson learned for me. Thanks for watching our flick.

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[Dick Campbell]

yeah, I thought I didn't get the ending at first, then resolved it. good story well presented.

[ilauzirika]

I must say that this is a great film! Loved the story.

[leteeci]

Just stopped by, to say that I like your movie very much!!

It is very Twiligh-tish and it have an unexpected twist, so it fits all the parameters of this fest!!!

Photography and acting is very good!!


Congratulations,

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[stinkpot]

yeah, I thought I didn't get the ending at first, then resolved it. good story well presented.

Thanks man. There were a few more things we were going to do with the ending which would have made it a little more clear but we totally ran out of time.


I must say that this is a great film! Loved the story.

Thanks for checking it out!


Just stopped by, to say that I like your movie very much!!

It is very Twiligh-tish and it have an unexpected twist, so it fits all the parameters of this fest!!!

Photography and acting is very good!!


Congratulations,

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Hey thanks! I'm glad someone likes the photography as well as the story! :)

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[Horncastle]

A very good little story. There were a few technical flaws as mentioned already, but if these were ironed out and with a stronger score, this could be a solid film. Well done, especially for a first entry.
Jason

[Bryce A]

Great concept. It was fun to watch how it played out and wonder what was going behind the scenes. I love the mistaken/stolen man/identity stories…. The concept was a lot to fit into a 6 minute short and you succeeded for the most part. My biggest gripes are the scale of the production. Having basically 2 locations was just not enough for the story. I felt like we spent way too much time with Homeless Bob (Tom Oravec?). I didn’t feel he was nearly as compelling as the story you were telling. If you’d shown more of the situation instead of having everything explained it would have been more enthralling. But of course... How to do it on a shoe sting budget? How to show it without showing up scenes we’ve seen 100 times before? …easier said that done. The ending was right. Fun. Piece.

“We’re way past hurt.” Heh, great line!

[stinkpot]

A very good little story. There were a few technical flaws as mentioned already, but if these were ironed out and with a stronger score, this could be a solid film. Well done, especially for a first entry.
Jason

Thanks for the feedback. Technical flaws?!?! You mean, like when I kicked the tripod accidentally during our best take? ;)


Great concept. It was fun to watch how it played out and wonder what was going behind the scenes. I love the mistaken/stolen man/identity stories…. The concept was a lot to fit into a 6 minute short and you succeeded for the most part. My biggest gripes are the scale of the production. Having basically 2 locations was just not enough for the story. I felt like we spent way too much time with Homeless Bob (Tom Oravec?). I didn’t feel he was nearly as compelling as the story you were telling. If you’d shown more of the situation instead of having everything explained it would have been more enthralling. But of course... How to do it on a shoe sting budget? How to show it without showing up scenes we’ve seen 100 times before? …easier said that done. The ending was right. Fun. Piece.

“We’re way past hurt.” Heh, great line!

Solid feedback Bryce A. I appreciate the time you and others have taken to give honest and useful critique. This is greatly useful! Thank you.

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[lawriejaffa]

Yep just to add to the general praise of this film, i enjoyed this one too. Decent acting, story, and production value.

I think a brief montage of our guy and his forgotten identity going about, being unrecognised by folks he approaches might have added to the impression of his dire situation. As the two locations and the 'bum' character was limiting in representing the full scope of your idea - however it does work like this effectively enough!

[jojopop]

Great job with this one guys. Actually very reminiscent of an episode of the Lone Gunmen - but that's not a bad thing because I think the two are vastly different in their execution.

Your lead ('charlie') did a fantastic job, I thought. One of my favorite performances... he felt very natural and very right. The homeless guy, on the other hand, I didn't find as captivating. Overall some good performances here.

I think what sells me the most about this piece is the concept, pure and simple. I really like the idea and the ending is really effective. That alone elevates this one pretty high, so thanks to you guys for getting in on this fest and making this one happen. One of my favorites!

[stinkpot]

Yep just to add to the general praise of this film, i enjoyed this one too. Decent acting, story, and production value.

I think a brief montage of our guy and his forgotten identity going about, being unrecognised by folks he approaches might have added to the impression of his dire situation. As the two locations and the 'bum' character was limiting in representing the full scope of your idea - however it does work like this effectively enough!

Lawriejaffa, thanks for watching our film. I agree that we could expand this piece and explain a bit more (visually of course) and it would be pretty solid.


Great job with this one guys. Actually very reminiscent of an episode of the Lone Gunmen - but that's not a bad thing because I think the two are vastly different in their execution.

Your lead ('charlie') did a fantastic job, I thought. One of my favorite performances... he felt very natural and very right. The homeless guy, on the other hand, I didn't find as captivating. Overall some good performances here.

I think what sells me the most about this piece is the concept, pure and simple. I really like the idea and the ending is really effective. That alone elevates this one pretty high, so thanks to you guys for getting in on this fest and making this one happen. One of my favorites!

Jojopop, thanks for checking it out. When Peter presented the concept I was sold immediately. The actors did a great job and everyone worked very well together. The only thing I regret is not having as much time as I would have liked to do more character development but overall, I think each person brought something to the table on this project.

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[Darkline]

Hey Stinkpot (great name)

This was a great concept for a twilight film and I think you managed to pull it off. I like that you didnt explain who the takeover guys were but that his character was forced into change for the worse because of it. His actions create his own death. nice. I liked the use of the camera too, and some of the moves you pulled off.

If I was to offer any criticism, I'd say things could improve technically and if you had the time it would have been great to have seen a escalation of the events. Maybe he goes into work and no-one regonises him, or perhaps his ID is refused somewhere and then he notices his picture has changed on his card before we reveal the man in the house. I dunno, just something that shows a gradual increase in the severity of the situaion instead of the talky piece with the tramp. Finally I think it might have had more power if he had a real choice. You might feel he deserved his outcome a bit more if he had been put into choosing one of two paths.

But thats just me whittering, it doesnt take away that this was a good fun flick with a great story... What a bad day. He totally deserved it in my opinon....:-)

[gabrielflorit]

I was really intrigued by the story - it kept me guessing all the way to the end, but then the twist killed it for me. Technically you had some outstanding work here, I will be using some of your ideas on my next fest: I really like how you start a dialogue scene wide and then cut closer and closer and closer, it helps pull the audience in. My favorite shot is near the end, tight CU on Charlie, 5:35, brilliant man, I wish I would have done more stuff like that on mine.

[stinkpot]

Hey Stinkpot (great name)

This was a great concept for a twilight film and I think you managed to pull it off. I like that you didnt explain who the takeover guys were but that his character was forced into change for the worse because of it. His actions create his own death. nice. I liked the use of the camera too, and some of the moves you pulled off.

If I was to offer any criticism, I'd say things could improve technically and if you had the time it would have been great to have seen a escalation of the events. Maybe he goes into work and no-one regonises him, or perhaps his ID is refused somewhere and then he notices his picture has changed on his card before we reveal the man in the house. I dunno, just something that shows a gradual increase in the severity of the situaion instead of the talky piece with the tramp. Finally I think it might have had more power if he had a real choice. You might feel he deserved his outcome a bit more if he had been put into choosing one of two paths.

But thats just me whittering, it doesnt take away that this was a good fun flick with a great story... What a bad day. He totally deserved it in my opinon....:-)

Darkline, thanks so much for the thorough feedback and critique. I can't say enough how useful this is. I particularly enjoyed your film very much and many of your stylistic choices appeal to my taste so this means an awful lot.


I was really intrigued by the story - it kept me guessing all the way to the end, but then the twist killed it for me. Technically you had some outstanding work here, I will be using some of your ideas on my next fest: I really like how you start a dialogue scene wide and then cut closer and closer and closer, it helps pull the audience in. My favorite shot is near the end, tight CU on Charlie, 5:35, brilliant man, I wish I would have done more stuff like that on mine.

Gabriel, sorry the ending didn't work for you. There were a couple of things we had to cut out due to time constraints and the whole "six minute" thing that may have enhanced the end but either way, it is what it is.

You are the first person to recognize (or at least give me credit for) the intentional "tightening" of my framing as the movie progressed. I'm not sure if it was too subtle or not but I am glad you caught it. Thanks for watching and critiquing!

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[SparkyZa]

This was a very good movie. the bum was great.
Thanks.

[stinkpot]

This was a very good movie. the bum was great.
Thanks.

Cool! Thanks for checking out our entry.

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[Rodney V. Smith]

dude! Possible Charlie was one fest too early! This like one of the ultimate "Loss" stories.

[stinkpot]

dude! Possible Charlie was one fest too early! This like one of the ultimate "Loss" stories.

LOL. Today, someone suggested doing a sequel... Possible Charlie II "Was Yours, Mine Now".

I may have to for Loss Fest!

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