mattdreyer
04-10-2008, 03:34 PM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sVo79t_Ts_w
I know its very basic at the moment. I only recently got the program so I'm still a noob haha :P.
Its part of a series I'm doing as part of a school art exam.
In the next one I am being braver and using a camera in 3d space and moving it around.
My kinda inspiration for this was that marcellus wallace video, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JNT5zvd3g2M.
Any advice or help or critisism you guy can give me would be very much apreciated.
barnapkins
04-10-2008, 03:53 PM
What was your method for making that?
oneinfiniteloop
04-10-2008, 08:22 PM
A couple things...one, your typography doesn't really do anything for the piece. It's mostly randomly placed (the swastika being the exception), and when you stack it next to each other it jumbles up the screen. Words overlap each other, kerning is too tight on many words, especially for the swastika, which I'm assuming you did to make it work like that. If you're going to use a serif font, let it breath a little, give some room for the serifs.
It would probably benefit you to read up on grid systems in trad graphic design. Timothy Samara has a great book called Making and Breaking the Grid that is a good read. Also, anything by Mueller-Brockman, who preached the grid like it was the Bible. You have to know the rules before you can break them. A lot of words are placed on the screen with little deference to one another, which dilutes the piece.
Do something with the black space between his lines. This is such a powerful speech you have so many directions conceptually you can take. Think about what he is saying and come up with a concept, then use type and movement to convey that concept to the viewer. The Pulp Fiction piece you reference is nice, and it captures what they are saying with motion and type, but it's inspired by other pieces that came before it.
Check out these and watch what they do, these are some of the best in this area:
What Barry Says - Simon Robson (http://www.knife-party.net/#)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qO_8RwXMMwI
Brazil Inspired: Macho Box - MK12 (http://www.mk12.com/)
http://youtube.com/watch?v=-70qt-IkQtI&feature=related
mattdreyer
04-11-2008, 12:42 AM
one infinite loop thank you soo much. that was exactly what i needed to hear!
and barna i pretty much arranged the audio first, and then got the text to appear in time. i then did a quick job on the arrangment of text on screen but admitidly didnt put a whole load of thought into it. I added a couple of little text effects usign video copilots twitch but i dont think they added that much, so i might take them off with the exception of the last one.
i will try fix it today :)