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Rock Punk!
10-29-2007, 08:59 AM
Here's that poster everyone's been asking about:
http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193798165.jpg

DarkMatter
10-29-2007, 09:53 AM
Got a Poster or grabs? Good luck!

Rock Punk!
10-29-2007, 07:02 PM
Step 1: Put idea into script (4 1/2 pages) turned out to be too long:

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193709159.jpg

Step 2: Storyboard - sketched this out on a drive back home to Butler, PA - GO STEELERS!

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193709178.jpg

Step 3: Convince brother (Tim) to do shoot = 12 pack Budweiser. That's me. Okay - no "real" actors this year - c'mon this was a last minute shoot!

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193709138.jpg

Step 4: Vegas + Magic bullet + Sony B/W:

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193709105.jpg

cinealma
10-29-2007, 07:57 PM
Another B/W film! Awesome! How many is that going to be now, half a dozen? I'm in heaven, I tell ya!

Rock Punk!
10-29-2007, 08:02 PM
It's a sign o' the times my friend.

cinealma
10-29-2007, 08:14 PM
It's a sign o' the times my friend.

Then these are fine times, indeed.

agentjonny
10-29-2007, 09:26 PM
uh oh. two films starring jack and jill!
let's battle!

Tom Marshall
10-30-2007, 12:12 AM
Hey man, good to see you back on the boards... I'll be watching for this one... :beer:

Rock Punk!
10-30-2007, 10:03 AM
uh oh. two films starring jack and jill!
let's battle!

Yeah!!! Just like my entry last year: "Mary Mercer" vs. "Bloody Mary"!

"Bloody Mary" blew me away - way far away!

Ki-Ki
10-30-2007, 01:56 PM
Have you got a poster? Congrats on filming it in time. I'll look out for this.

Rock Punk!
10-30-2007, 06:54 PM
http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193795282.jpg

Script and storyboard

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193795298.jpg

Squeeze mode (who needs to lose weight with squeeze mode?)

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1193795312.jpg

Magic Bullet light bleach bypass + vignette & Sony B/W

Rock Punk!
10-30-2007, 07:39 PM
Have you got a poster? Congrats on filming it in time. I'll look out for this.

Edited first post in thread to include poster! http://dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=114060

Michael Anthony Horrigan
10-31-2007, 09:03 AM
SPOILERS!!





Cool!

I thought the pacing could have been sped up a bit but I loved the shot with the scissors. There were a few pretty good shots in this actually.

Cheers,

Mike

Rock Punk!
10-31-2007, 06:33 PM
Cool!

I thought the pacing could have been sped up a bit but I loved the shot with the [sp*!Ler deleted]. There were a few pretty good shots in this actually.

Cheers,

Mike

Thanks!

Rock Punk!
11-02-2007, 05:59 AM
Here is a review from BergVision:

Warning! SPOILERS!




WALGREENS?

Let this be a lesson to all who take too many prescription drugs!
You might end up going crazy and having a thing for pumpkins!
Or maybe it was just too much Viagra!

I can tell what you were going after, but I think the film was too serious to start out with to be funny by the end when we see he killed his pumpkin wife.

I would work on getting the editing tightened up, cleaning up the audio and and smoothing out the sound fx transitions. As well as trying to button down the story telling a bit.
I still don't understand what the guys issue was with Pumpkins??

cinealma
11-02-2007, 02:22 PM
REVIEW:
Argh! OK, so this is one of those films that irks me. Really good stuff and then that awful ending. I don't want to sound harsh, so let me review the first 99% of the film: AWESOME! The black and white looked great. Felt like a Twilight Zone episode. That's why I was hoping for a better ending. Sounds like you figured out the plot and the ending and then shot it. Probably no time, but after cutting it together I would have said to myself, "WHOA!", and then reshot a new ending.

Anyway, good stuff. Loved 99% of it.

FILMMAKER-TO-FILMMAKER:
Did you use a 35mm adapter? It looked like you had some sort of spot /barrell distortion going on.

LOTS of good stuff in this. The blinking pumpkin on the table. The shot through the scissors, the 60's-esque mind-altering VFX stuff.

I mean, basically, a guy walks up to his porch, goes inside his house, gets a phone call in the entryway and then kills his "wife" in the adjacent bedroom. Very simple layout. But what you did in the confines of that small space was brilliant. I credit that to your shot selection and editing. Very well done.

I just, damn. I just wish you had a better ending... for me anyway. You could definitely expand this out to a nice little short film. You just have to figure who or what his wife is.

Good job! I look forward to more films from you. :thumbsup::thumbsup:

BergVision
11-02-2007, 04:01 PM
I voted in your poll. Good idea to do a poll.

I actually said inside "WTF" and then Laughed Outloud. So a combination of both. It was funny. And I was actually pleased to see it was a pumpkin rather then some killing of another woman. lol

traviscool
11-02-2007, 05:00 PM
I did none of the poll's options, I just kind of sat there. Really I liked it, a lot, acting was pretty good for what I've scene, relatively well written and the cinematography was great.
SPOILERS

However I felt that as you built the suspense you when a little too far, I pretty much guessed the ending as soon as he hung up the phone. I like the fact that you made it seem like his wife was sick however the door 'shook' one too many times and I just got tipped off to the fact that he was actually the mentally ill one. Also I liked the murder of the pumpkin at the end but I wish it was something else like a pillow or a doll the pumpkin was a bit anti climatic for me.

Rock Punk!
11-02-2007, 07:19 PM
REVIEW:
Did you use a 35mm adapter? It looked like you had some sort of spot /barrell distortion going on.

Nope. Just the DVX plus Vegas & Magic Bullet. Thanks to Barry G's DVX book and the wealth of knowledge on dvxuser.com I tried my best to set up the shots to get depth of field with the DVX.

Here is one scissors shot:
http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1194055665.jpg

STEP 1: 24P Advanced Squeeze Mode.

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1194055685.jpg

STEP 2: Sony Vegas Black and White

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1194055718.jpg

STEP 3: Magic Bullet - Light Bleach Bypass (adjusted a little bit)

http://www.dvxuser6.com/uploaded/15835/1194055701.jpg

STEP 4: Magic Bullet - Vignette (adjusted a little bit)

Thank you for taking the time to watch my film and put together a review. I appreciate your feedback.

Rock Punk!
11-02-2007, 07:26 PM
REVIEW:
I mean, basically, a guy walks up to his porch, goes inside his house, gets a phone call in the entryway and then kills his "wife" in the adjacent bedroom.

For more information, please see thread entitled "Is it just me, or do most Indie films look like they were shot in their basement (http://dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=56080)?" One of my personal favorite threads that seem to persist because .... well because ...

Rock Punk!
11-02-2007, 07:38 PM
SP*!LERS!




....the pumpkin was a bit anti climatic for me.


BUT ... It's All Hallows Fest!

Thanks for taking the time to put together and post a review. I appreciate it.

traviscool
11-02-2007, 11:47 PM
Not a problem, and I really liked it.

Marlon Ladd
11-03-2007, 08:49 AM
The pumpkin at the end really caught me by surprise. I thought the story and twist was very good. Kept making me think of "Psycho." The acting could have been stronger, but overall I thought this one was good. Good job. I may never look at pumpkins the same way again.

Blaine
11-03-2007, 11:05 AM
I liked the idea of b&w in this, just wished you'd had more contrast in you shots because the look was a bit too dark and flat. Like Cinealma, I caught the Twilight Zone vibe. The acting was a bit overwrought and the music level was too loud for me. It was giving me more of a headache than building tension.

BTW, where did you get that antique phone. I haven't seen one of those in a house in years. The scissors were a bit too obvious. They were one of the first things I noticed on the shot by the phone. But that might just be me. One continuity problem, though. The scissors were always closed while he was stabbing "her" and when you showed them sticking in the pumpkin, they were open.

Maximus
11-04-2007, 08:40 AM
Good film. It was creepy, great atmosphere. One man's descent into madness. B&W a good choice. Reminded me a little of Seconds, that great John Frankenheimer, Rock Hudson flick from the 60s. Nice surprise ending. Your poll suggests it was meant to be funny... Really? I thought it was being played straight. On the one hand the final image is so absurd as to be funny, and yet the idea that some people sleep with vegetables is not as far fetched as some believe. Some sick puppies out there!

Look forward to your next film.

Ben Sliker
11-04-2007, 04:58 PM
rockpunk,

you had some really solid images in this one, but if you are going to go with the black and white look, pay particularly close attention to your lighting, some shots were so dark i couldn't really tell what was going on in the shot.

The noises were really hard to listen to, so i guess that they played their part well, and it was well played on the buildup to the reveal. The reveal of a pumpkin was kind of a groaner for me, but i chuckled a little on the inside, i kinda like groaner jokes.

It was a bold move to take the effort to make entire film for a potential groaner joke at the end, congrats on that, i applaud the effort!

mentatDUKE
11-04-2007, 05:07 PM
Rock Punk,
This one was interesting. The twist at the end was unexpected.

Rock Punk!
11-04-2007, 07:17 PM
BTW, where did you get that antique phone. I haven't seen one of those in a house in years.

When I imagined the scene I knew I had to have an old phone - I was hoping for a rotary dial like I grew up with. When I went out of town to visit my mom I asked her if she still had any of those old phones. She didn't but she did have the one in the film. You actually have to wire it up to make it work - it doesn't even have a jack like most phones. Needless to say it is just hanging on the wall. The ring used in the story is one of my ringtones from my cell phone - ironic?


The scissors were a bit too obvious. They were one of the first things I noticed on the shot by the phone. .

The original script called for Jack to pull the phone off the wall and then smash Jill's head with it - kinda improbable so I changed it to scissors - ala Dial M for Murder.

Blaine
11-04-2007, 07:23 PM
Thanks for the feedback. These are always nice tidbits. :thumbsup:

Rock Punk!
11-07-2007, 07:06 PM
Good film. It was creepy, great atmosphere. One man's descent into madness. B&W a good choice. Reminded me a little of Seconds, that great John Frankenheimer, Rock Hudson flick from the 60s. Nice surprise ending. Your poll suggests it was meant to be funny... Really? I thought it was being played straight. On the one hand the final image is so absurd as to be funny, and yet the idea that some people sleep with vegetables is not as far fetched as some believe. Some sick puppies out there!

Look forward to your next film.

When I started editing, I put together the beginning - up to where he walks into the house - and the end - from where he opens the bedroom door through the final sequence.

The first time I watched the end, I laughed out loud. It's probably because the pumpkin is so f'n jolly looking. My wife, who also laughed out loud when she saw the end, suggested that I reshoot with a really smashed up pumpkin. I think that would have improved the "darkness" of the story. However, I liked the fact that I evoked such an opposite reaction to the tone of the film.

Thank you very much for taking the time to watch the film and provide feedback.

Rock Punk!
11-07-2007, 07:19 PM
... you had some really solid images in this one, but if you are going to go with the black and white look, pay particularly close attention to your lighting, some shots were so dark i couldn't really tell what was going on in the shot.

I lit mostly all of the scenes with my Home Depot salad bowl and 150 w fluorescent "natural light" bulb and the rooms' regular lighting. Outside shots were done with daylight. I did use the Cool VidLed for the one shot of the front door. So, you can see, I have almost no practical experience with lighting a scene properly. I know theoretically how to do it - I guess I just used what I had.

andoguru
11-07-2007, 11:34 PM
Hey Rock Punk!,

I thought you had a lot of very nice shots in this especially at the beginning.

I like the story of these pumpkins driving this guy mad, but I think you probably could have cut this down quite a bit because he is at the phone area for a long time.

Nice twist with it being a pumpkin at the end. I remember thinking at the start...hmm, this guy has a lot of pumpkins, but then moving on. Nice foreshadowing.

Laters,
Ando

Rock Punk!
11-10-2007, 07:42 PM
Nice twist with it being a pumpkin at the end. I remember thinking at the start...hmm, this guy has a lot of pumpkins, but then moving on. Nice foreshadowing.

My entry in Horrorfest '06 was a little obtuse - so I tried to 'over'shadow with this entry! Thanks for taking the time to provide some feedback.